Library— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn. Bạn nên tránh lặp từ và sử dụng câu ngắn gọn, tự nhiên hơn. Hãy thêm liên từ để câu trả lời trôi chảy và cụ thể hơn về hoạt động bạn làm ở thư viện.

예시: Yes, I often go to the library because I enjoy reading books and doing my homework there. My school library is very large and modern, offering a wide range of books in various fields, including economics.

제안: Bạn nên tránh lặp từ và nói rõ hơn về hoạt động của mình. Sử dụng liên từ để kết nối ý và làm câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn. Hãy mô tả cụ thể hơn về việc học nhóm và sách bạn đọc.

예시: In my school library, I usually read books related to my major, finance and banking. Additionally, I often do homework with my friends there, which is very convenient for teamwork.

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp. Hãy sử dụng câu đơn giản, tránh lặp từ và nói trực tiếp về sở thích của bạn khi còn nhỏ. Thêm liên từ để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn.

예시: No, I did not often go to the library when I was a kid. I preferred doing exciting activities like playing games and watching television, so I was not very interested in reading books.

제안: Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp và rõ ràng hơn. Tránh lặp từ và nói lan man. Hãy đưa ra ý kiến cụ thể và sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh, có liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc.

예시: I am not sure, but I think Chinese kids often go to the library because education is very important in their culture. Libraries provide valuable resources that help them study effectively.

× MMM yes also it's my favorite activity to go to library for reading books, doing my homework.

✓ MMM yes also it's my favorite activity to go to the library for reading books, doing my homework.

The definite article 'the' is required before 'library' because it refers to a specific place known to both speaker and listener.

× I often go to my school library which is very huge and modern with various types of books in different fields and economy.

✓ I often go to my school library which is very huge and modern with various types of books in different fields including economics.

The word 'economy' should be 'economics' to correctly refer to the academic field; also, 'fields and economy' is awkward, so 'fields including economics' is clearer.

× In in my in my school library, I often I often try books related to my major finance and banking.

✓ In my school library, I often try books related to my major, finance and banking.

Repeated words 'In in my in my' are redundant and should be removed; also, a comma is needed after 'major' to separate the appositive.

× And also I do my homework in teamwork with my friends is very convenient.

✓ Also, I do my homework in teamwork with my friends, which is very convenient.

The original sentence is a run-on; adding 'which' and a comma clarifies the sentence structure.

× No, I'm not sorry. When I was a kid, I tend to I prefer doing some exciting activities like you do, you know, playing games and watching television and something like that.

✓ No, I'm sorry. When I was a kid, I tended to prefer doing some exciting activities like playing games and watching television.

'Tend' and 'prefer' should be in past tense 'tended' and 'preferred' to match the past time frame; 'I'm not sorry' is incorrect in context and should be 'I'm sorry'.

× I I did not keen on reading books. That's.

✓ I was not keen on reading books. That's true.

'Did not keen' is incorrect; the correct form is 'was not keen'. Also, 'That's' is incomplete and should be 'That's true' or similar.

× MMM, I don't I don't know much about the Chinese kids. Yes, but maybe I think they but I think that I think that they have educational tradition and I find it very educational in library is quite hard and you know.

✓ MMM, I don't know much about Chinese kids. But I think they have an educational tradition, and I find that studying in the library is quite hard, you know.

Repeated phrases 'I don't I don't' and 'I think they but I think that I think that' are redundant and should be simplified. 'Educational tradition' needs an article 'an'. The phrase 'educational in library is quite hard' is unclear and corrected to 'studying in the library is quite hard'.