Library— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn hơi dài và có một số lỗi ngữ pháp cũng như từ vựng không chính xác. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi, sử dụng câu đơn giản, rõ ràng và tránh lặp từ. Ngoài ra, hãy sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

예시: I used to go to the library often as a child because I loved reading. However, now I am busy with schoolwork, so I only visit the library on weekends.

제안: Bạn nên sử dụng câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn và chú ý đến ngữ pháp, ví dụ như dùng 'borrow books' thay vì 'rent'. Hãy thêm liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc và chi tiết hơn.

예시: Usually, I borrow books from the library and then find a quiet corner to read by myself. This helps me concentrate and enjoy the books peacefully.

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tốt nhưng có thể cải thiện bằng cách sử dụng câu ngắn gọn hơn và chú ý đến số nhiều (assignments). Hãy dùng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

예시: When I was a child, I loved reading and went to the library twice a week. I especially spent whole weekends there. But now, I have many school assignments and extracurricular activities, so I visit less often.

제안: Câu trả lời có lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác như 'do not really fond of'. Bạn nên sử dụng cấu trúc đúng và mở rộng câu trả lời với các chi tiết cụ thể hơn.

예시: In my opinion, Chinese kids nowadays are not very interested in traditional books. Instead, they spend more time playing online games and reading e-books.

× As a child I would say that I quite a bunch of reading books, so my mom got me a entrance card to the library.

✓ As a child, I would say that I quite enjoyed reading a bunch of books, so my mom got me an entrance card to the library.

The phrase 'quite a bunch of reading books' is incorrect because 'reading' should be the verb form 'enjoyed reading' to express the action properly. Also, 'a entrance card' should be 'an entrance card' due to the vowel sound at the beginning of 'entrance'. Adding a comma after 'As a child' improves sentence clarity.

× As a child I would say that I quite a bunch of reading books, so my mom got me a entrance card to the library.

✓ As a child, I would say that I quite enjoyed reading a bunch of books, so my mom got me an entrance card to the library.

The article 'a' before 'entrance card' is incorrect because 'entrance' starts with a vowel sound, so it should be 'an'. Also, a comma after 'As a child' is needed for correct sentence structure.

× However, when I was growing up, I have a lot of things to do at school so I don't often go to the library anymore, but I would go in the weekend.

✓ However, when I was growing up, I had a lot of things to do at school, so I didn't often go to the library anymore, but I would go on the weekend.

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly. Since 'when I was growing up' refers to the past, 'have' should be 'had' and 'don't' should be 'didn't' to maintain past tense consistency. Also, 'in the weekend' should be 'on the weekend' as the correct preposition for days or periods.

× but I would go in the weekend.

✓ but I would go on the weekend.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect when referring to specific days or periods like 'the weekend'. The correct preposition is 'on'.

× Most of the time when I go to the library, I will rent.

✓ Most of the time when I go to the library, I will borrow books.

The verb 'rent' is not typically used for books; 'borrow' is the correct verb. Also, the sentence is incomplete without an object after 'rent'.

× I will borrow book from the library and then sit quietly at some peaceful corner to read books by myself.

✓ I will borrow books from the library and then sit quietly in some peaceful corner to read by myself.

'Book' should be plural 'books' to match the context. Also, the preposition 'at' should be 'in' when referring to a location like 'corner'. The phrase 'read books by myself' can be simplified to 'read by myself'.

× As a child, I found myself really fond of reading books, so I used to go to the library twice a week and especially in the weekend I was spending my whole day in the library.

✓ As a child, I found myself really fond of reading books, so I used to go to the library twice a week, and especially on the weekend, I would spend my whole day in the library.

The phrase 'in the weekend' should be 'on the weekend'. Also, 'I was spending' is better as 'I would spend' to express habitual past action. Adding commas improves readability.

× especially in the weekend I was spending my whole day in the library.

✓ especially on the weekend, I would spend my whole day in the library.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect for 'the weekend'; 'on' is the correct preposition.

× However, growing up, I have a lot of school assignment and extracurricular activities to do, so I don't go to the library so often nowadays.

✓ However, growing up, I have a lot of school assignments and extracurricular activities to do, so I don't go to the library very often nowadays.

'Assignment' should be plural 'assignments' to match 'a lot of'. Also, 'so often' is better expressed as 'very often' in this context for naturalness.

× I have a lot of school assignment and extracurricular activities to do,

✓ I have a lot of school assignments and extracurricular activities to do,

'Assignment' should be plural 'assignments' because 'a lot of' refers to multiple items.

× In my opinion, Chinese kids now do not really fond of traditional books anymore, but they would spend times over online games and read online books.

✓ In my opinion, Chinese kids nowadays are not really fond of traditional books anymore, but they spend time on online games and read online books.

The phrase 'do not really fond' is incorrect; it should be 'are not really fond' to use the correct verb 'to be'. 'Would spend times over' is incorrect; it should be 'spend time on'. 'Nowadays' is better placed after 'kids' for naturalness.

× but they would spend times over online games and read online books.

✓ but they spend time on online games and read online books.

'Would' implies conditional or habitual past, but the sentence refers to current habits, so simple present 'spend' is appropriate. Also, 'times' should be singular 'time' and 'over' should be 'on'.