Library— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally clear but could be more concise and natural. Avoid redundancy such as repeating 'at home' and try to use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, try to keep your answer within 5 sentences for better coherence.

예시: I used to go to the library frequently two years ago, where I studied English with my friend for about four hours. However, nowadays I prefer studying at home, so I don't visit the library as often.

제안: Your answer is brief and could be improved by adding more specific details and using linking words to make it more coherent. Avoid ending with 'And that's it' as it sounds informal and incomplete.

예시: In the library, I usually focus on doing my homework quietly. Additionally, I sometimes read academic books or articles related to my work to deepen my understanding.

제안: Your answer contains many hesitations and incomplete sentences, which affect fluency and clarity. Try to organise your thoughts before speaking and use complete sentences. Also, explain your opinion clearly with linking words.

예시: Yes, I often went to the library as a child. However, I found it boring because it was very quiet and people were not allowed to talk, which made the atmosphere less enjoyable for me.

제안: Your answer shows hesitation and incomplete thoughts. Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and complete your sentences. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas logically and provide a clearer opinion.

예시: I'm not sure about the habits of Chinese children since I have never been to China. However, in Iran, many children often go to the library to read books. I imagine that in China, where education is highly valued, children also visit libraries frequently.

× Two years ago, I used to go to the library and I studied English with my friend and we stayed there about four hours.

✓ Two years ago, I used to go to the library where I studied English with my friend, and we stayed there for about four hours.

The original sentence lacks the preposition 'for' before the duration 'about four hours', which is necessary to indicate the length of time. Adding 'for' clarifies the time period we stayed there.

× Two years ago, I used to go to the library and I studied English with my friend and we stayed there about four hours.

✓ Two years ago, I used to go to the library and I studied English with my friend and we stayed there for about four hours.

When expressing duration, the preposition 'for' should be used before the time period. Omitting 'for' is incorrect in this context.

× Don't wanna speak with each other and umm.

✓ We didn't want to speak with each other.

The original sentence is incomplete and uses informal contraction 'Don't wanna' which is inappropriate in this context. Also, the subject 'we' is missing, and the sentence should be in past tense to match the context.

× Yes, I often went to the library when I was a child uh, it was a boring place for me because umm umm, the umm, because it was quiet and.

✓ Yes, I often went to the library when I was a child. It was a boring place for me because it was quiet, and I didn't want to speak with others.

The original sentence is a run-on sentence with incomplete thoughts and filler words. It needs to be split into two sentences and completed properly for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I'm not really sure about, uh, Chinese children's, uh, habits because, uh, I have never been to China.

✓ I'm not really sure about Chinese children's habits because I have never been to China.

The original sentence has unnecessary commas and filler words that interrupt the flow. Removing them improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× However, in Iran, uh, many kids go to library and read books.

✓ However, in Iran, many kids go to the library and read books.

The phrase 'go to library' is incorrect because 'library' is a singular countable noun and requires the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific place.

× I imagine that in China where education is high valued.

✓ I imagine that in China, where education is highly valued.

The phrase 'high valued' is incorrect; the correct adverb form is 'highly valued' to modify the verb 'valued'. Also, a comma is needed after 'China' to separate the clause.