Library— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: In your answer, try to use correct singular/plural forms and avoid filler words like 'like' and 'I guess'. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. For example, you can say: "I often go to the library, but it depends on the type. Some libraries are quite small, so it's hard for me to concentrate and read books. However, bigger libraries make me feel more relaxed and free."

예시: I often go to the library, but it depends on the type. Some libraries are quite small, so it's hard for me to concentrate and read books. However, bigger libraries make me feel more relaxed and free.

제안: Avoid redundancy such as repeating 'often' and unnecessary conjunctions like 'and, but'. Use clear linking words to connect your ideas. For example, say: "I sometimes read books in the library, but usually I go there to do assignments because my teacher gives me many tasks."

예시: I sometimes read books in the library, but usually I go there to do assignments because my teacher gives me many tasks.

제안: Try to avoid hesitation sounds like 'uh' and unclear phrases. Use correct grammar and be specific. For example: "When I was a kid, I really enjoyed reading books, especially horror and romantic novels. They used to be my favorite. I often went to the library to read these kinds of novels."

예시: When I was a kid, I really enjoyed reading books, especially horror and romantic novels. They used to be my favorite. I often went to the library to read these kinds of novels.

제안: Avoid informal contractions like 'cause' and unclear phrases. Use linking words to organize your answer logically. For example: "I think it depends on the person. Most people prefer watching movies rather than reading books, in my opinion. However, it varies according to individual personality."

예시: I think it depends on the person. Most people prefer watching movies rather than reading books, in my opinion. However, it varies according to individual personality.

× Some library is quite small and it's hard for me to like concentrate and read books.

✓ Some libraries are quite small and it's hard for me to concentrate and read books.

The noun 'library' should be plural 'libraries' to agree with the determiner 'some' which refers to more than one. Also, 'like' is unnecessary here and should be removed for clarity.

× And some libraries are big.

✓ And some libraries are big.

This sentence is correct in terms of singular and plural usage, no correction needed.

× It makes me feel more kind of relaxed and freedom I guess.

✓ They make me feel more relaxed and free, I guess.

The subject 'some libraries' is plural, so the verb should be 'make' instead of 'makes'. Also, 'more kind of relaxed and freedom' is awkward; 'more relaxed and free' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× In the library, I sometimes read books and, but usually I just go and do some assignments there.

✓ In the library, I sometimes read books, but usually I just go and do some assignments there.

The conjunctions 'and' and 'but' are incorrectly combined. Removing 'and' before 'but' corrects the sentence structure.

× My teacher assigned me a lot of assignments so that I often go to the library often.

✓ My teacher assigned me a lot of assignments, so I often go to the library.

The phrase 'a lot of assignments' is correct. The sentence is repetitive with 'often' used twice; removing the second 'often' improves clarity.

× It's it us.

✓ It's us.

The phrase 'It's it us' is incorrect and likely a speech filler or error. Correcting to 'It's us' makes the sentence grammatically correct.

× And I often go to the library to read those kind of novels.

✓ And I often went to the library to read those kinds of novels.

Since the context is about childhood ('when I was a kid'), past tense 'went' should be used. Also, 'those kind of novels' should be 'those kinds of novels' to agree in number.

× I'd say it depends on the type of people 'cause mostly people like enjoy they enjoy watching movie rather than reading books.

✓ I'd say it depends on the type of people because mostly people enjoy watching movies rather than reading books.

The phrase 'like enjoy they enjoy' is redundant and incorrect; 'enjoy' alone suffices. Also, 'movie' should be plural 'movies' to match 'watching'. 'Cause' is informal; 'because' is more appropriate.

× But actually I don't really know it depends on people personality.

✓ But actually, I don't really know; it depends on people's personalities.

The phrase 'people personality' is incorrect; it should be 'people's personalities' to show possession and plural form. Also, adding punctuation improves clarity.