Library— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is understandable but could be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy like "in the in my own study" and clarify time expressions. Try to start with a clear topic sentence and then add a reason using linking words.

예시: I don't often go to the library nowadays because I prefer studying in my own room. It only takes about five minutes to get there, but I find my study environment more comfortable.

제안: Your answer is a bit long and lacks clear structure. Use linking words to connect ideas and correct grammar, such as verb forms. Also, avoid repeating 'library' too often. Try to give a clear topic sentence and then add specific activities you do there.

예시: Although I don't visit the library now, I used to go there often. Usually, I would read books quietly while listening to music with my headset, and sometimes I watched movies.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains some incomplete sentences. Try to organise your ideas clearly and avoid repetition. Use linking words to explain reasons and provide specific details about your hometown.

예시: I didn't go to the library as a child because I grew up in a small town that didn't have one. However, there was a well-known bookstore where I often spent time.

제안: Your answer is generally good but can be more natural and concise. Avoid filler phrases like 'probably according to my own knowledge' and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, try to use more precise vocabulary.

예시: Nowadays, most Chinese children visit libraries regularly because there are more public facilities where they can read and complete their homework.

× At present I don't go to the library because I prefer to stay in the in my own study to read and write something.

✓ At present I don't go to the library because I prefer to stay in my own study to read and write something.

The phrase 'stay in the in my own study' contains a redundant preposition 'in the'. The correct preposition is 'in' followed directly by the noun phrase 'my own study'. Removing the extra 'in the' corrects the sentence.

× Going to the library needs to 5 minutes around.

✓ Going to the library takes around 5 minutes.

The phrase 'needs to 5 minutes around' is incorrect. The verb 'needs' is not appropriate here; 'takes' is the correct verb to express duration. Also, 'around' should precede the time expression '5 minutes' for natural word order.

× Even though I don't go to the library now before I am a frequent visitor to the library and in the library most of the time I just read a book and listening to music quietly with my headset and sometimes watching a movie.

✓ Even though I don't go to the library now, before I was a frequent visitor to the library, and most of the time in the library I just read a book, listen to music quietly with my headset, and sometimes watch a movie.

The original sentence is a run-on with incorrect tense and verb forms. 'Before I am' should be 'before I was' to match past tense. The verbs 'listening' and 'watching' should be in base form 'listen' and 'watch' to parallel 'read'. Commas are added for clarity and correct sentence structure.

× When I was a kid, I didn't go to the library because I came from a small city small town and there is no library to August and but there was a famous bookstore which is which is.

✓ When I was a kid, I didn't go to the library because I came from a small town and there was no library, but there was a famous bookstore.

The phrase 'small city small town' is redundant; 'small town' is sufficient. 'There is no library to August and but there was' is incorrect and confusing; it should be 'there was no library, but there was'. The repeated phrase 'which is which is' is unnecessary and removed. The sentence is corrected for clarity and proper past tense usage.

× Nowadays, probably according to my own knowledge, most of the kids, they visit the library regularly because now we have more infrastructure and public places that children can read and do their homework.

✓ Nowadays, probably according to my own knowledge, most of the kids visit the library regularly because we now have more infrastructure and public places where children can read and do their homework.

The pronoun 'they' is redundant after 'most of the kids'. Also, 'that children can read' should be 'where children can read' to correctly refer to places. The adverb 'now' is better placed after 'we' for natural flow.