Library— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is somewhat natural but has some hesitations and redundancy. Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and incomplete phrases like 'but, uh, a, but'. Also, keep your answer concise and clear within 5 sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: I used to visit the library often as a child because I loved learning new things and exploring ideas through books. However, now I prefer digital platforms for convenience, so I rarely go there in person.

제안: Your answer lacks clarity and is incomplete. Avoid vague phrases like 'after a whirlwind I'm bored' and incomplete sentences. Provide clear, specific details and use linking words to organize your answer logically.

예시: When I visit the library, I usually browse through various books and pick the ones that interest me. I spend time reading them, and if I get bored, I often play chess with friends in the library's game area.

제안: Your answer is generally good but contains some errors like 'exploding different ideas' instead of 'exploring different ideas' and unclear phrases like 'Melissa's activity'. Use correct vocabulary and clarify your points for better understanding.

예시: Yes, I used to go to the library as a child because digital platforms were not available then. I was interested in learning new things and exploring different ideas. Reading comics was one of my favorite activities to refresh my mind.

제안: Your answer is understandable but has grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Avoid phrases like 'the Chinese kids are going to the library' and 'going to the library on person'. Use correct grammar and linking words to improve coherence.

예시: I'm not sure if Chinese kids often go to the library, but I think that nowadays, because of easy access to technology, they prefer reading digitally or using e-learning platforms instead of visiting the library in person.

× I used to go to the library more often because I was really keen to learning, uh, new things and exploring new ideas, reading books.

✓ I used to go to the library more often because I was really keen on learning, uh, new things and exploring new ideas, reading books.

The phrase 'keen to learning' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'keen on learning'. The preposition 'on' should be used after 'keen' when followed by a gerund (-ing form). This is a common collocation in English.

× I don't like to visit there in person, but, uh, a, but.

✓ I don't like to visit there in person, but, uh, well.

The phrase 'but, uh, a, but' is unclear and ungrammatical. Replacing it with 'but, uh, well' makes the sentence more natural and coherent. Also, 'visit there' is acceptable but 'visit the library in person' would be clearer.

× When I go to the library I visit the book varieties.

✓ When I go to the library I look at the variety of books.

The phrase 'book varieties' is incorrect; 'variety' is usually uncountable or singular when referring to types or kinds. 'Variety of books' is the correct expression.

× I explore different kind of books then which I find interesting.

✓ I explore different kinds of books that I find interesting.

'Different kind of books' should be pluralized to 'different kinds of books' because 'different' implies multiple kinds. Also, 'then which' is incorrect; 'that' is the correct relative pronoun here.

× I've only picked that one.

✓ I've only picked one.

'That one' is acceptable but 'one' is more natural in this context. No plural issue here, but the sentence is awkward; simplifying improves clarity.

× I read the books and after a whirlwind I'm bored.

✓ I read the books, and after a while, I get bored.

'After a whirlwind' is incorrect and unclear. The phrase 'after a while' is appropriate to indicate some time passing. Also, 'I'm bored' fits better as 'I get bored' to indicate a change of state.

× I play chess which is alongside and I also.

✓ I play chess which is nearby, and I also...

The phrase 'which is alongside' is incorrect here. 'Nearby' or 'next to me' would be better. The sentence is incomplete, but correction focuses on preposition use.

× the digital platforms which are available now weren't available back then, and I was really interested in learning the new things and exploding different ideas.

✓ the digital platforms which are available now weren't available back then, and I was really interested in learning new things and exploring different ideas.

The word 'exploding' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'exploring'. This is a vocabulary error but affects verb form and meaning.

× Also, it was a part of Melissa's activity to make my mind refreshed.

✓ Also, it was part of my activities to refresh my mind.

'Melissa's activity' is unclear and likely incorrect pronoun use. The student probably meant 'my activities'. Also, 'make my mind refreshed' is ungrammatical; 'refresh my mind' is correct.

× I'm not very sure about the Chinese kids are going to the library, but I think nowadays as this is the ease of technology, they prefer reading digitally or e-learning rather than going to the library on person.

✓ I'm not very sure if Chinese kids go to the library, but I think nowadays, due to the ease of technology, they prefer reading digitally or e-learning rather than going to the library in person.

The phrase 'about the Chinese kids are going' is incorrect; 'if Chinese kids go' is correct. 'As this is the ease of technology' should be 'due to the ease of technology'. Also, 'on person' should be 'in person'.