Library— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more concise and avoid repetition. Use clear linking words to show your plan change logically. Also, correct grammar mistakes like 'a new types' to 'new types' or 'a new type'.

예시: Yes, I usually go to the library once a week because I enjoy reading different types of books and magazines. However, I have recently decided to increase my visits to twice a week to explore more materials.

제안: Improve grammar by using singular/plural correctly, e.g., 'a new topic' or 'new topics'. Use linking words like 'then' or 'after that' to connect ideas smoothly. Also, clarify what you mean by 'negotiate' to make your answer clearer.

예시: I usually read new topics in the library, then I relax and enjoy my coffee. Sometimes, my friends and I gather there to discuss these topics and share our opinions.

제안: Use past tense consistently and improve sentence structure. For example, say 'it was easier for us' instead of 'it will be more easy'. Also, use linking words like 'because' to explain reasons clearly.

예시: Yes, I sometimes went to the library with my family when I was a kid, but we usually preferred searching for books online because it was easier and helped us discover more topics.

제안: Avoid filler words like 'uh' and 'umm' to sound more confident. Also, answer the question directly and use correct grammar, e.g., 'children are very interested'. Clarify unclear phrases like 'discovering the box'.

예시: I am not sure about Chinese kids specifically, but I believe children worldwide are very interested in exploring new things to improve their knowledge and ideas.

× I enjoy reading and discovering a new types of books and magazines.

✓ I enjoy reading and discovering new types of books and magazines.

The phrase 'a new types' is incorrect because 'types' is plural and should not be preceded by the singular article 'a'. The correct form is 'new types' without 'a'.

× So after one week I decide to change my plan to make it to make it twice a week instead of once a week.

✓ So after one week I decided to change my plan to make it twice a week instead of once a week.

The sentence refers to a past decision, so the verb 'decide' should be in the past tense 'decided' to match the time frame.

× So I usually try to read a new topics and after that I relax and enjoy my coffee.

✓ So I usually try to read new topics and after that I relax and enjoy my coffee.

The phrase 'a new topics' is incorrect because 'topics' is plural and should not be preceded by the singular article 'a'. The correct form is 'new topics' without 'a'.

× Sometime we gather there to discuss a new topics and negotiate.

✓ Sometimes we gather there to discuss new topics and negotiate.

The phrase 'a new topics' is incorrect because 'topics' is plural and should not be preceded by the singular article 'a'. Also, 'Sometime' should be 'Sometimes' to indicate frequency.

× Yes, I went with my family sometimes but we usually try to search the online books so it will be more easy for us and it's also help us to discover more topics.

✓ Yes, I went with my family sometimes but we usually try to search online books so it is easier for us and it also helps us to discover more topics.

The phrase 'more easy' is incorrect; the comparative form 'easier' should be used. Also, 'it's also help' should be 'it also helps' to agree with the singular subject 'it'. 'The online books' should be 'online books' without 'the' because it refers to books in general.

× Umm, I didn't hear about that, but I think, uh, children's, uh, around the world, uh, they very interested in discovering, uh, the box and to, uh, uh, improve their knowledge and their ideas.

✓ Umm, I haven't heard about that, but I think children around the world are very interested in discovering books and improving their knowledge and ideas.

The word 'children's' is possessive and incorrect here; it should be 'children'. The phrase 'they very interested' lacks the verb 'are'. 'The box' is likely a mishearing or typo and should be 'books'. Also, 'to improve' should be 'improving' to maintain parallel structure.