Library— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to make your sentences more natural and concise. For example, directly state that you don't go often because of your busy work schedule and family commitments. Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences.

예시: I don't often go to the library because I work from 9 to 5 and need to spend quality time with my family after work.

제안: Your answer lacks clarity and has grammatical mistakes. Use linking words to connect your ideas and be specific about what you do. For example, mention that you enjoy reading general knowledge books but mostly look for technical books related to science or ICT, and sometimes read magazines.

예시: I usually look for technical books related to science or ICT because I find them interesting, but I also enjoy reading general knowledge books and magazines when I visit the library.

제안: Your answer is confusing and grammatically incorrect. Try to give a clear and direct response. For example, say you did not go to the library often as a child, but sometimes you visited and saw other kids there.

예시: When I was a kid, I did not go to the library often, but I sometimes visited and saw other children reading there.

제안: Your answer is vague and lacks coherence. Try to give a more structured response using linking words. For example, explain that library attendance among Chinese kids depends on factors like location and time of day.

예시: Whether Chinese kids often go to the library depends on the area they live in and the time of day; some visit more in the afternoons or evenings, while others rarely go.

× Actually, I don't often go to the library because of my job and my job is very busy and I have to work 9:00 to 5:00 a day and I have a family and I am too. I am to spend a special time to my with my family.

✓ Actually, I don't often go to the library because my job is very busy. I have to work from 9:00 to 5:00 every day, and I also have a family. I want to spend special time with my family.

The original sentence is a run-on with multiple ideas joined incorrectly, causing confusion. Breaking it into shorter sentences improves clarity. Also, 'I am to spend a special time to my with my family' is incorrect; it should be 'I want to spend special time with my family.' This correction improves sentence structure and clarity.

× I I love general knowledge book but I often search technical book like science or ICT related and I I find interesting reading magazine also.

✓ I love general knowledge books, but I often search for technical books related to science or ICT, and I also find reading magazines interesting.

The original sentence has missing plural forms ('book' should be 'books'), missing prepositions ('search technical book' should be 'search for technical books'), and awkward phrasing ('I find interesting reading magazine also' should be 'I also find reading magazines interesting'). Correcting these improves grammatical accuracy and naturalness.

× Actually hold up my career, I did not. Go library heavily, but I often go the often went there and I find some kids who or others in that library.

✓ Actually, during my career, I did not go to the library often, but I sometimes went there and saw some kids or others in the library.

The original sentence is fragmented and confusing with incorrect word order and missing prepositions. 'Go library heavily' is incorrect; it should be 'go to the library often.' Also, 'I find some kids who or others' is unclear and corrected to 'saw some kids or others.' These changes improve sentence structure and clarity.

× It varies from area to area or from the period, and that's daytime or evening time or afternoon time.

✓ It varies from area to area or from period to period, whether it's daytime, evening, or afternoon.

The phrase 'from the period' is incorrect; it should be 'from period to period' to indicate variation over time. Also, 'that's daytime or evening time or afternoon time' is awkward; rephrasing to 'whether it's daytime, evening, or afternoon' is more natural. These corrections improve preposition use and sentence flow.