List— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more natural and clear by avoiding repeated words and incomplete sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then explain why you make a list, and finish with a supporting detail.

예시: Yes, I always make a list when I go shopping because it helps me remember everything I need, especially when I'm in a hurry. Sometimes, I try to keep all items in my mind, but as a human, I often forget important things. Therefore, making a list ensures I don't miss anything important.

제안: Improve your answer by using complete sentences and linking words to make your ideas flow logically. Avoid fragmented sentences and unclear phrases. Also, use more precise vocabulary to express your ideas clearly.

예시: Yes, I always make a list for my work because it helps me stay disciplined and organized. For example, having a clear list allows me to allocate my time effectively and focus on completing tasks one by one. As a result, I become more productive compared to when I don't use a list.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains many incomplete sentences. Try to express your ideas clearly and use linking words to connect your points. Also, avoid unnecessary repetition and focus on giving specific reasons with examples if possible.

예시: In my opinion, some people don't like making lists because they prefer to do things spontaneously. It depends on their personality; some enjoy flexibility and dislike being restricted by a list.

제안: Make your answer more coherent by avoiding incomplete sentences and repetitions. Use linking words to connect your ideas and explain clearly why you prefer using your phone for lists. Keep your answer concise and natural.

예시: I prefer to make a list on my phone because it is more convenient and I always carry it with me. Also, my phone is less likely to get lost or damaged compared to paper. Moreover, I can easily delete items once I have completed them.

× For me, I always make.

✓ For me, I always make a list.

The original sentence is incomplete and lacks an object after the verb 'make'. Adding 'a list' completes the sentence and clarifies the meaning.

× Please when I go shopping because it helps me remember the things that I need especially when I'm I am in a hurry.

✓ Especially when I go shopping, it helps me remember the things that I need, especially when I am in a hurry.

The original sentence has an incorrect conjunction 'Please' and awkward structure. Rephrasing improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Sometimes I will try to keep everything in my mind but you know as as a human.

✓ Sometimes I try to keep everything in my mind, but you know, as a human,

The sentence is incomplete and has repeated words 'as as'. Correcting repetition and completing the sentence improves clarity.

× So then we keep forgetting something for important items.

✓ we end up forgetting some important items.

The original sentence is awkward and ungrammatical. Rephrasing to 'we end up forgetting some important items' makes it clear and grammatically correct.

× Yes, I of course make my list during my work because it helps me stay more disciplined and only nice.

✓ Yes, I of course make my list during work because it helps me stay more disciplined and organized.

The phrase 'only nice' is incorrect and unclear. Replacing it with 'organized' fits the context better. Also, 'during my work' is better as 'during work'.

× Just for example.

✓ For example,

'Just for example.' is a fragment and incomplete. Changing it to 'For example,' introduces the example properly.

× If I have a clear list, I can totally set out my times and focus on completing tasks 1 by 1.

✓ If I have a clear list, I can plan my time well and focus on completing tasks one by one.

'Set out my times' is awkward; 'plan my time well' is clearer. Also, '1 by 1' should be 'one by one' for formal speech.

× Which I can more productive compared to when I don't use a list.

✓ This helps me be more productive compared to when I don't use a list.

The original sentence is a fragment and lacks a subject. Adding 'This helps me be' completes the sentence.

× In my opinion, some people they don't like to make this making list because they more preferred to Acacia or.

✓ In my opinion, some people don't like making lists because they prefer to be spontaneous or

The phrase 'they more preferred to Acacia or' is unclear and incorrect. Replacing with 'they prefer to be spontaneous or' fits the context better.

× Having any kind of things whenever they feel like this, my said depends on their own personalities.

✓ do things whenever they feel like it; it depends on their personalities.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. Rephrasing clarifies the meaning.

× Some people they. Sting having. Having this is.

✓ Some people dislike having lists.

The original sentences are fragments and unclear. Combining into a clear sentence improves understanding.

× Yes, I prefer to make a list on my phone because it's more convenient and always carry it with me.

✓ Yes, I prefer to make a list on my phone because it's more convenient and I always carry it with me.

The original sentence lacks the subject 'I' before 'always carry it with me', causing a grammatical error.

× I like my, I like people.

✓ I like my phone.

The original sentence is incomplete and confusing. Correcting to 'I like my phone.' makes it clear.

× My phone is. Less likely to get loss or damage.

✓ My phone is less likely to get lost or damaged.

The original sentence is fragmented and uses incorrect forms 'loss' instead of 'lost' and 'damage' instead of 'damaged'.

× In the most. Convenient is I can easily delete those items.

✓ The most convenient thing is I can easily delete those items.

The original sentence is fragmented and awkward. Rephrasing improves clarity and grammatical correctness.