List— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is somewhat off-topic and lacks clarity. Try to directly answer the question first, then add specific details about your list-making habits when shopping. Also, avoid redundancy and grammatical errors to make your response more natural and effective.

예시: Yes, I usually make a list when I shop to ensure I don't forget anything important. For instance, I prepare a list of clothes and shoes I need before visiting Elante Mall, which is a large shopping centre near my house.

제안: Your answer addresses the question but could be clearer and more concise. Use linking words to connect ideas and correct minor errors. Also, specify how effective the list is to fully answer the question.

예시: Yes, I make a list to organize my daily schedule, which includes household chores and professional tasks. This method works well because it helps me stay focused and complete all my responsibilities on time.

제안: Your answer is understandable but contains grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to use clearer sentences and provide more specific reasons why some people avoid making lists.

예시: Some people dislike making lists because they find it time-consuming and prefer to rely on their memory. They believe that remembering tasks mentally is more flexible and less restrictive.

제안: Your answer is brief and contains repetition and grammatical mistakes. Try to give a clear preference with reasons and avoid redundancy to make your response more natural and effective.

예시: I prefer to make lists on my phone because it's convenient and I am less likely to lose them compared to paper lists. Plus, I can easily edit or add items whenever needed.

× First of all I love doing shopping, shopping in big malls and I remembered I have a big mall nearby my house called Elante Mall an it has a various variety of things that I want including a good brand, clothes.

✓ First of all, I love shopping, especially in big malls, and I remember I have a big mall near my house called Elante Mall, and it has a wide variety of things that I want, including good brand clothes.

The phrase 'doing shopping' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'love shopping'. 'Nearby my house' should be 'near my house' because 'nearby' is an adverb, not a preposition. 'An it has a various variety' is incorrect; it should be 'and it has a wide variety' to correctly use the article and adjective. Also, 'a good brand, clothes' is awkward; 'good brand clothes' is clearer.

× First of all I love doing shopping, shopping in big malls and I remembered I have a big mall nearby my house called Elante Mall an it has a various variety of things that I want including a good brand, clothes.

✓ First of all, I love shopping, especially in big malls, and I remember I have a big mall near my house called Elante Mall, and it has a wide variety of things that I want, including good brand clothes.

The phrase 'a various variety' is incorrect because 'variety' is singular and 'various' is plural in meaning; 'a wide variety' is the correct collocation. Also, 'clothes' is plural and should not be preceded by 'a'.

× First of all I love doing shopping, shopping in big malls and I remembered I have a big mall nearby my house called Elante Mall an it has a various variety of things that I want including a good brand, clothes.

✓ First of all, I love shopping, especially in big malls, and I remember I have a big mall near my house called Elante Mall, and it has a wide variety of things that I want, including good brand clothes.

The verb 'remembered' is in past tense, but the context suggests a present fact, so 'remember' (present tense) is appropriate.

× 2 shoes and yes.

✓ Two shoes, and yes.

The number '2' should be written as 'two' in formal speech. Also, the sentence fragment 'and yes' is unclear and incomplete; it should be connected properly or clarified.

× I make list of that which includes my heart, household chores and also the professional work.

✓ I make a list of that which includes my heart, household chores, and also professional work.

The phrase 'make list' is missing the article 'a' before 'list'. Also, 'professional work' does not need 'the' here.

× Some people don't like making a list because they don't want to spend their energy and in making a list or writing.

✓ Some people don't like making a list because they don't want to spend their energy on making a list or writing.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect here; the correct preposition to use with 'spend energy' is 'on'.

× Instead they remember in through in their mind and they follow what they want.

✓ Instead, they remember it through their mind and follow what they want.

The phrase 'remember in through in their mind' is incorrect; 'remember it through their mind' is clearer and grammatically correct. Also, 'in' is unnecessary before 'through'.

× I prefer to make a list on my phone because I instead I don't lose it.

✓ I prefer to make a list on my phone because I don't lose it.

The phrase 'because I instead I don't lose it' is incorrect; 'instead' is unnecessary and disrupts the sentence structure. Removing 'instead' makes the sentence clear and grammatically correct.