List— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is a bit unclear and lacks coherence. Try to start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add supporting details using linking words. Avoid incomplete sentences and redundancy. Also, keep your answer within 5 sentences for clarity.

예시: I usually don't make a list when I shop because I don't shop often. However, if my mother calls to ask for something we need at home, I go shopping spontaneously. In such cases, I might quickly note down the items to avoid forgetting them.

제안: Your response is somewhat confusing and contains grammatical errors. Begin with a clear statement about whether you make lists for work, then provide specific examples with linking words. Avoid fragmented sentences and ensure your answer is concise and relevant.

예시: I find it difficult to make lists for work. However, my family used to make a monthly grocery list together to stock up items. Although it was tiring, it helped us stay organized.

제안: Your answer lacks clarity and contains awkward phrasing. Start with a clear topic sentence, then explain reasons using linking words. Avoid unnecessary fillers and incomplete sentences to make your answer more natural and effective.

예시: Some people dislike making lists because they find it boring or time-consuming. On the other hand, others appreciate lists as they help them stay organized and mindful during shopping.

제안: Your answer is generally clear but can be improved by using more precise vocabulary and linking words. Also, avoid repetition and incomplete sentences. Try to give a direct preference and support it with reasons.

예시: I used to make shopping lists in a notebook that my family kept. However, nowadays I prefer using the Notes app on my iPhone because it is very user-friendly and convenient.

× Usually I don't shop that much so.

✓ Usually, I don't shop that much.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'so' which is unnecessary and causes sentence structure error. Removing 'so' completes the sentence properly.

× But let's say for example, if I'm out of my mom calls me that if we need something in the house, usually go for shopping and then it's spontaneous.

✓ But let's say, for example, if I'm out, my mom calls me to ask if we need something in the house; usually I go shopping and then it's spontaneous.

The original sentence is confusing and lacks proper structure. Adding commas, conjunctions, and clarifying the subject improves clarity and sentence structure.

× To have something from outside.

✓ To get something from outside.

This is a sentence fragment lacking a subject and verb. Changing it to 'To get something from outside' completes the thought and corrects the sentence structure.

× Like I said before, it's a hard man's for me making a list.

✓ Like I said before, it's hard for me to make a list.

The phrase 'hard man's' is incorrect and unclear. The correct expression is 'hard for me to make a list' to convey difficulty properly.

× But I remember a time where in in my family we used to sit together to make a list for all the grocery items we would buy for the next month and stock up.

✓ But I remember a time when my family and I used to sit together to make a list of all the grocery items we would buy for the next month and stock up.

The phrase 'where in in my family' is incorrect. Replacing it with 'when my family and I' corrects the sentence structure and meaning.

× Well, it depends because some people don't find making list their cup of tea while the other hand on the other hand some people may find it as.

✓ Well, it depends because some people don't find making lists their cup of tea, while on the other hand, some people may find it useful.

The phrase 'making list' should be plural 'making lists'. Also, 'while the other hand on the other hand' is redundant and incorrect; 'while on the other hand' is correct.

× The brilliant thing to do because it makes them feel mindful about their shopping experience throughout.

✓ It's a brilliant thing to do because it makes them feel mindful about their shopping experience throughout.

The original sentence lacks a subject and verb. Adding 'It's' completes the sentence structure.

× So it can be. Like that?

✓ So it can be like that?

The sentence is broken into two fragments. Combining them into one sentence corrects the structure.

× Oh, this one I remember in my family we used to have a notebook.

✓ Oh, I remember that in my family we used to have a notebook.

The phrase 'this one I remember' is awkward. Changing it to 'I remember that' improves clarity and correctness.

× It's just particularly used for making list for shopping.

✓ It was just particularly used for making lists for shopping.

The phrase 'making list for shopping' should be 'making lists for shopping'. Also, 'used for' is correct preposition usage here, but 'was' fits better for past reference.

× But nowadays we use Notes in the Eye and the iPhone Notes app in the iPhone which is very user friendly and useful.

✓ But nowadays we use the Notes app on the iPhone, which is very user-friendly and useful.

'Notes in the Eye' is incorrect; it should be 'Notes app on the iPhone'. Also, 'user friendly' should be hyphenated as 'user-friendly'.