List— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to give a clear and direct answer first, then add supporting details. Also, avoid grammatical errors and unclear phrases. For example, say 'I don't usually make a list when I shop because I prefer to look for discounted products and buy what I need on the spot.'

예시: I don't usually make a list when I shop because I prefer to look for discounted products and buy what I need on the spot. This way, I can be flexible and save money by choosing items on sale.

제안: Your answer is clear but could be improved by using linking words and more natural phrasing. For example, start with a topic sentence, then add 'because' or 'so' to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I do make a list for my work because it helps me perform tasks efficiently. So, I can keep a clear mindset about what to do next, especially during a hectic schedule.

제안: Try to avoid sentence fragments and use linking words to make your answer coherent. For example, say 'I think some people are more spontaneous and don't like making lists because they feel it restricts their flexibility when performing duties.'

예시: I think some people are more spontaneous and don't like making lists because they feel it restricts their flexibility when performing duties. They prefer to decide what to do as they go along.

제안: Your answer is good but could be smoother by avoiding short, choppy sentences and using linking words like 'because' and 'moreover' correctly. Also, use 'than' instead of 'then'.

예시: Definitely on my phone because it's much handier to carry than paper when I'm going out. I won't forget my phone, but I might forget to bring paper. Moreover, making a list on my phone is more environmentally friendly.

× I don't usually I'll look for the discounted products too.

✓ I don't usually, but I'll look for the discounted products too.

The original sentence lacks proper conjunction to connect two independent clauses, causing confusion. Adding 'but' clarifies the contrast between not usually making a list and looking for discounted products.

× Can see the what I have to buy instead of making a list to shop.

✓ I can see what I have to buy instead of making a list to shop.

The original sentence is missing the subject 'I' and has an unnecessary 'the' before 'what'. Including the subject and removing 'the' corrects the sentence structure.

× They don't want to be bound by a fixed list that may hinder. The flexibility of performing. Duties.

✓ They don't want to be bound by a fixed list that may hinder the flexibility of performing duties.

The original sentence is fragmented with periods breaking the sentence incorrectly. Combining the fragments into one sentence with proper conjunction improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Definitely on my phone because it's way more handy to bring a phone then the paper when I'm going out.

✓ Definitely on my phone because it's way more handy to bring a phone than paper when I'm going out.

The original sentence uses 'then' incorrectly; the correct comparative preposition is 'than'. Also, 'the paper' is better as 'paper' in this context.

× I won't forget to bring my phone, but I'll definitely forget to. Bring a paper with me, moreover.

✓ I won't forget to bring my phone, but I'll definitely forget to bring paper with me. Moreover, making a list on the phone is more environmentally friendly.

The original sentence is fragmented and has punctuation errors. Combining the fragments and correcting 'environmental friendly' to 'environmentally friendly' improves sentence flow and correctness.

× Making a list of phone is more environmental friendly.

✓ Making a list on the phone is more environmentally friendly.

The phrase 'environmental friendly' should be the adverb 'environmentally friendly' to correctly modify the adjective. Also, 'of phone' should be 'on the phone' to indicate the medium.