Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise, correct grammar and give a clear topic sentence followed by one specific reason. Use linking words and avoid repetition. Aim for 2–3 sentences and correct tense/word forms.

예시: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me express my emotions and relax. For example, I often sing alone at home after a long day to unwind.

제안: Use past tense when referring to learning and be specific about what you did. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to connect ideas and avoid vague phrases like 'for a big time'.

예시: Yes, I have practised singing informally by singing along to my favourite songs for several years because it relaxes me and entertains me.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (confidence, how I sing), and give one specific reason. Use a linking phrase like 'because' and avoid extra filler words.

예시: I would prefer to sing for my parents because I feel comfortable with them and they are supportive, so I can sing without worrying about being judged.

제안: Be clearer and more specific—explain how singing brings happiness and give a concise example. Correct word choice (makes people happy, 'harana' explain briefly) and use linking words.

예시: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness because it entertains people and reduces stress. For example, traditional 'harana' songs were used to court someone and create joyful memories.

제안: Organise into two clear sentences: state your opinion, then give a specific example. Correct vocabulary ('karaoke') and grammar; use linking words like 'when' or 'because.'

예시: Yes, I enjoy listening to others sing because it makes me happy and relaxed. For example, my family often sings karaoke at home, and I enjoy listening to them perform.

제안: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence in past/present perfect where appropriate, then give a concise reason and a brief plan. Fix grammar and avoid repetition ('exciting and thrilling' similar meaning).

예시: No, I haven't taken a singing class, but I would like to in the future because I enjoy music and think lessons would improve my technique. If I have the time and money, I plan to enroll next year.

× Yes, I do because I felt like I can express myself and I'm a little I can relax from it but I love singing alone, not just singing with singing or singing with other people.

✓ Yes, I do because I feel like I can express myself and I can relax with it, but I prefer singing alone rather than singing with other people.

The student mixed past tense 'felt' with the present context; the question asks about a general preference so present simple 'feel' is required. Also several awkward phrases were used: 'I'm a little I can relax from it' and 'singing with singing' are incorrect structures. Replacing with 'I can relax with it' and 'prefer singing alone rather than singing with other people' corrects tense and clarity. Suggest practicing consistent use of present simple for habitual or general statements and simplifying redundant phrases. 'Grammar Problem Type ID:6'

× Yes, I do. Since I'm a fan of listening to music, I try to go with it and try to sing along for a big time because I feel it's relaxing to do that and I feel that it's entertaining at the same time.

✓ Yes. Since I'm a fan of listening to music, I try to sing along a lot because I find it relaxing and entertaining.

The student used 'try to go with it' and 'sing along for a big time' which are incorrect collocations. Also 'I feel it's relaxing' is acceptable but 'I find it relaxing' is more natural. The tense and aspect should remain present simple for habitual actions. Replace awkward phrases with 'try to sing along a lot'. Practice common collocations ('sing along', 'a lot') and use present simple for habits. 'Grammar Problem Type ID:6'

× I'm not that quite confident with my voice with how I sing, but if I wanted to sing with someone, I think it would be my parents because I can be who I really wanted and they won't judge me about my voice.

✓ I'm not very confident about my voice or how I sing, but if I wanted to sing with someone, it would be my parents because I can be myself and they won't judge my voice.

Pronoun and adjective usage is awkward: 'that quite' is incorrect; use 'not very'. 'Confident with' should be 'confident about'. 'Be who I really wanted' mixes tense and pronouns; use 'be myself'. 'Judge me about my voice' should be 'judge my voice'. Maintain present conditional with 'would' or simple conditional 'it would be'. Suggest studying common adjective+preposition pairs (confident about) and pronoun usage (myself). 'Grammar Problem Type ID:12'

× Yes I do because there are a lot of people using music as a form of entertainment and a form of relaxation and mixed people happy. For example, in the past it was used for the harana or it makes courting people.

✓ Yes, because many people use music as a form of entertainment and relaxation, and it makes people happy. For example, in the past it was used for harana, or to court someone.

The original has poor sentence structure and incorrect word forms: 'mixed people happy' is ungrammatical; use 'makes people happy'. 'It was used for the harana' should be 'used for harana' (no definite article) and 'it makes courting people' is awkward—use 'to court someone'. Also replace 'there are a lot of people using' with 'many people use' for present habitual meaning. Suggest practicing conjunctions and proper verb forms for causation ('make someone happy') and article use with cultural terms. 'Grammar Problem Type ID:16'

× Yes, I do I love listening to people who are singing along when I'm at home people my family usually use karaoka to sing along and I just listened them to sing along with them and I feel more happy and relaxed seeing them do that.

✓ Yes, I do. I love listening to people singing along. At home, my family usually uses karaoke to sing, and I listen to them sing. I feel happier and more relaxed seeing them do that.

Multiple issues: run-on sentence needs splitting. 'People who are singing along when I'm at home people' is confusing. 'Karaoka' should be 'karaoke'. 'I just listened them to sing along with them' is ungrammatical; correct is 'I listen to them sing' or 'I sing along with them'. 'More happy' should be 'happier'. Use present simple for habitual actions. Suggest avoiding run-on sentences, use correct verb patterns ('listen to someone do something') and comparative forms. 'Grammar Problem Type ID:12'

× No I don't, but I imagine it would be much more exciting and thrilling especially I like listening to music so it would be good to do that. so I hope in the future, if I have time and resources, I can enroll to one.

✓ No, I haven't, but I imagine it would be exciting and thrilling, especially since I like listening to music, so it would be good to take a class. I hope in the future, if I have time and resources, I can enroll in one.

The answer used 'No I don't' which is incorrect for experience questions; use present perfect 'No, I haven't' or 'No, I haven't taken one.' 'Enroll to one' is wrong preposition; use 'enroll in one'. Also 'especially I like listening to music' needs connector 'since' or 'because'. 'Much more exciting and thrilling' is acceptable but redundant; simplify. Suggest using present perfect for life experience questions ('have you ever...') and correct preposition with 'enroll in'. 'Grammar Problem Type ID:22' }]}