Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct awkward phrasing, avoid irrelevant cultural qualifiers, and limit to 3–4 sentences. Use linking words to explain reasons briefly (e.g., because, so).

예시: Yes, I love singing. Karaoke is very popular in the Philippines, and singing together brings people closer, so I enjoy it as a way to bond with family and friends.

제안: Use a direct topic sentence and cleaner grammar. Replace wordy phrases with concise explanations and link the example to your main point. Avoid repetition and check verb forms (learned, exposed to).

예시: Not formally; I picked it up informally. Since childhood my family sang karaoke often, so through regular exposure I gradually learned how to sing.

제안: Start with a clear, confident answer and avoid vague phrases like 'anybody really.' Give a brief reason and a specific detail about the situation to make it vivid. Keep it to two or three sentences.

예시: I enjoy singing for my friends and family. Singing together is a special bonding activity that creates lasting memories, especially at family gatherings and parties.

제안: Provide a concise argument with smoother sentence flow and correct grammar. Combine short fragments into complete sentences and give a specific example of how music transcends language. Avoid grand, vague claims without support.

예시: Yes, I think singing brings people happiness because melody and rhythm can touch emotions even when the words are unfamiliar. For example, at concerts people from different countries often sing along to the tune despite not understanding the lyrics.

제안: Be more fluent by removing hesitations and repetition. Use one linking phrase to explain why and give a specific context or example where you connect with others through singing.

예시: Yes, I enjoy listening to others sing because it brings me joy and can be very moving. For instance, I often sing along with friends at karaoke nights, which helps us connect and have fun together.

제안: Answer directly then clarify briefly. Use correct phrasing ('I haven't' is fine) and give one supporting detail about what the school classes involved to show relevance.

예시: No, I haven't taken formal singing lessons, but our school music classes involved group singing and basic vocal exercises, which helped me develop my voice.

× 'As a Filipino, I may not be blessed with the singing Jean, but I do love karaoke and it's very prominent here in my country and it just brings people together and I love every moment of it.'

✓ 'As a Filipino, I may not be blessed with the singing gene, but I do love karaoke; it's very popular in my country, it brings people together, and I love every moment of it.'

'Singular and plural issue: The word "Jean" is a wrong word choice and likely a misspelling of "gene." Also "it's very prominent" is grammatically acceptable but "popular" is more natural for activities. No plural/singular change needed beyond correcting the noun. Suggestion: use the correct noun "gene" and natural collocations such as "popular in my country.'

× 'I don't think I was learning how to sing, but rather I was just exposed on singing and over time I naturally learned through it.'

✓ 'I don't think I was learning how to sing; rather, I was just exposed to singing, and over time I naturally learned it.'

'Verb + -ing form: The correct preposition with "exposed" is "exposed to," not "exposed on." Also "learned through it" is wordy; use "learned it". Suggestion: use "exposed to singing" and simplify the clause.'

× 'For example, ever since I was a child, people do lots of karaoke, my family sings a lot, and over time I sing.'

✓ 'For example, ever since I was a child, people did a lot of karaoke; my family sang a lot, and over time I learned to sing.'

'Present tense issue: The sentence mixes present simple with a time frame that refers to the past ("ever since I was a child"). Use past tense for habitual actions in the past: "did" and "sang." Also "over time I sing" is incorrect for describing an acquired skill; use "I learned to sing.'

× 'I want to sing for anybody really.'

✓ 'I want to sing for anyone, really.'

'Incorrect use of pronouns: "Anybody" is not wrong but "anyone" is more natural here; also reduce redundancy by placing "really" after the phrase. Suggestion: use "anyone" or keep "anybody" but position adverb naturally.'

× 'It gives, it brings me joy and sometimes I do love to sing along if I know the song and I think it's a great way to connect with people.'

✓ 'It brings me joy, and sometimes I love to sing along if I know the song; I think it's a great way to connect with people.'

'Present tense issue and style: The repetition "it gives, it brings" is redundant. Use simple present "brings" for habitual feelings. Remove unnecessary auxiliary "do" before "love." Suggestion: streamline into two clear clauses.'

× 'No, I haven't, but we have a music subject at school and it involves singing, so I think that counts as a singing class.'

✓ 'No, I haven't, but we had a music subject at school that involved singing, so I think that counted as a singing class.'

'Past tense issue: The student is referring to school in the past, so verb forms should be past: "had" and "involved." Also maintain tense consistency with "counted." Suggestion: use past tense when talking about past schooling.'

× 'Indeed, it does bring happiness to every people.'

✓ 'Indeed, it does bring happiness to everyone.'

'Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs / pronoun choice: "every people" is incorrect; use "everyone" or "every person." Suggestion: use singular indefinite pronouns like "everyone" when referring to all people.'

× 'The singer is singing the melody itself and transcends to every race and generation, and I find that very interesting.'

✓ 'The singer sings the melody itself, which transcends race and generation, and I find that very interesting.'

'Verb in the past participle form / sentence structure: "is singing" is grammatically possible but awkward here; use simple present "sings" for general statements. Also "transcends to every race and generation" uses incorrect preposition; "transcends" does not need "to" and should take direct objects like "race and generation." Suggestion: use simple present and correct verb-object usage.'