Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Reduce hesitations and avoid repetition. Correct verb forms and prepositions (e.g., 'I often sing in the shower' not 'staying in the shower').

예시: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me relax and lift my mood. For example, I often sing in the shower or with friends at weekend gatherings, which helps me forget stress and feel happier.

제안: Answer directly and use clearer sentence structure. Say whether you have learned and then give a brief, specific explanation using linking words (e.g., 'but', 'however'). Use correct tense and simpler phrases to express listening habits and informal practice.

예시: No, I haven't had formal singing lessons. However, I listen to many kinds of songs in different languages and sometimes I learn short parts by ear to practice melodies and vocabulary.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence naming the person or people you sing for, then add one or two concise reasons. Avoid repeating phrases and be careful with collocations (e.g., 'sing to relax' not 'get out to help me').

예시: I usually sing for myself because it helps me relax and reduce stress. For instance, singing before a nap or bedtime refreshes my mind and improves my mood.

제안: State your opinion clearly and support it with a concise reason and an example. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., 'express emotions', 'evoke feelings') and avoid vague phrases or repetition.

예시: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness because it expresses emotions and connects people. For example, an upbeat song can lift your mood, while a moving ballad can help listeners process feelings.

제안: Give a direct answer and then compare types of singers with clear linking language. Use correct nouns and plurals, and choose simpler, accurate phrasing instead of awkward constructions.

예시: Yes, I enjoy listening to both professional singers and amateur covers. Professionals often convey emotions well, while covers and collaborations can be creative and relatable.

제안: Answer clearly with correct tense and give one reason for your choice. Mention future plans if relevant, using 'will' or 'plan to' and avoid filler words.

예시: No, I haven't taken any singing classes yet because I am focusing on my studies. However, I plan to take lessons in the future to develop my technique and sing more professionally.

× For example, I often staying in the shower or sometimes go through in a bathrooms with yeah and with my friends and and weekend and also.

✓ For example, I often stay in the shower or sometimes go into a bathroom with my friends on weekends.

The student used the continuous -ing form 'staying' incorrectly after 'often' where the base verb 'stay' is required; also 'go through in a bathrooms' is ungrammatical and needs 'go into a bathroom' (preposition and singular/plural fixed). Use simple present for habitual actions and correct preposition and noun number.

× No, I never learned how to sing, but I usually listen all the songs, like, uh, all types of songs.

✓ No, I have never learned how to sing, but I usually listen to all kinds of songs.

The time reference 'never' with life experience is better expressed with present perfect 'have never learned'. Also 'listen all the songs' requires the preposition 'to' and 'all types of songs' is more natural as 'all kinds of songs'.

× And, uh, in that times of many languages are there and many kind of, uh, vocabularies.

✓ And, uh, at those times there are many languages and many kinds of vocabulary.

Use 'at those times' for reference to occasions; word order should place 'there are' before the subject. 'Many kind of' should be 'many kinds of' and 'vocabularies' is better as uncountable 'vocabulary'.

× And, uh, sometimes I pointed something and keep it in my mind and I try to sing a song, but I don't know, I don't learn it.

✓ Sometimes I notice something and keep it in my mind, then I try to sing the song, but I don't really learn it.

Mixed past and present verbs ('pointed' with present 'keep' and 'try') create confusion; use consistent present tense for habitual actions. Also 'sing a song' vs 'sing the song' depends on context; 'don't really learn it' clarifies meaning.

× I sing a song for myself to my happier to feel happy and to feel very, to get out from stress, to get out to help me to refresh my mind.

✓ I sing for myself to feel happier and to get away from stress and refresh my mind.

Unnecessary 'a song' after 'sing' and incorrect phrase 'to my happier'. Use 'feel happier'. 'Get out from stress' should be 'get away from stress'. Simplify to natural English structure.

× And it helped me umm in my resting point like when I'm taking nap and when I'm sleeping.

✓ And it helps me when I'm resting, such as when I'm taking a nap or sleeping.

Tense should be present ('helps') for general truth. 'Taking nap' needs an article: 'taking a nap'. 'Resting point' is unnatural; use 'when I'm resting'.

× Of course, singing, uh, can bring happiness to all the people because many of those things, uh, singing have their own emotion and the most of the things that singing have their, uh, own vocabularies, own languages and some emotional songs makes us feel, cry and very, very, umm, it feel like this.

✓ Of course, singing can bring happiness to people because songs express their own emotions, languages, and vocabulary, and some emotional songs can make us feel like crying.

Subject-verb agreement and tense are inconsistent ('singing have', 'songs makes', 'it feel'). Use plural 'songs' with plural verbs or rephrase. 'Feel like crying' is the natural expression. Remove redundant words and clarify sentence structure.

× Yes I like listening to other singings like professional singers are have your own vocabulary on emotions and some like other peoples like normal people are also singing in like brand like collabs and cover songs are also.

✓ Yes, I like listening to other singers. Professional singers have their own emotional vocabulary, and ordinary people also sing covers and collaborations.

'Singings' is incorrect; use 'singers'. 'Are have your' is ungrammatical; use 'have their'. 'Peoples' should be 'people'. Simplify and organize into clear clauses.

× I never take a singing class in my, uh, life of 17 years.

✓ I have never taken a singing class in my 17 years of life.

Use present perfect 'have never taken' for life experience up to now and the past participle 'taken' is required. Also reorder '17 years of life' to 'in my 17 years'.

× Uh, but for my future, I can try to sing a song in professionally by taking a singing classes.

✓ But in the future, I might try to sing professionally by taking singing classes.

Use 'might' or 'may' to express future possibility. 'In professionally' is wrong word order; use 'sing professionally'. 'A singing classes' has article-number mismatch; plural 'singing classes'.

× Umm, but now, uh, I'm not uh, but in this time I'm not taking a singing class, uh, because I'm focusing on my own study, so.

✓ But now I'm not taking a singing class because I'm focusing on my studies.

Remove redundant fillers and fix noun number: 'study' should be plural 'studies' for general academic work. Simplify sentence for clarity and use present continuous correctly for current action.