Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make your answer more concise, correct grammar, and organise ideas with a clear topic sentence plus one or two supporting details. Use linking words (for example, 'because' or 'so') and avoid repetition. Also correct verb forms and word choices (e.g. 'sing up' → 'sing', 'helps me more enjoyable' → 'makes me feel happier').

예시: Yes, I love singing. Because I find it relaxing, I often go to karaoke with my best friends when I have free time, and singing helps me unwind after a long day of work.

제안: Start with a direct topic sentence and give two specific details: when and what you learned. Correct tense and agreement, replace vague phrases ('a lot of song') with precise ones, and remove filler words. Use linking words like 'for example' or 'also.'

예시: Yes, I learned how to sing at high school. For example, my music teacher taught us traditional Vietnamese songs and basic vocal techniques, which I still appreciate today.

제안: Answer directly and give a clear supporting detail with correct phrasing. Avoid awkward expressions ('sing a song per day') and repetition. Use linking words like 'for example' correctly and ensure subject-verb agreement and possessive forms.

예시: I would like to sing for my parents. For example, I often sing for my mother on her birthday because it makes her happy and brings our family closer.

제안: Give a direct opinion then support it with a clear reason or brief example. Use correct word choice ('funnier' → 'cheerful' or 'happier') and correct verb forms ('by sing' → 'by singing'). Keep it concise and avoid fillers.

예시: Yes, I think singing can cheer people up. When I sing an upbeat song, it often lifts the mood of friends who are feeling down, so I feel satisfied knowing I helped them feel happier.

제안: Provide a clear topic sentence and one specific reason or example. Fix grammar ('love hear' → 'love to hear' or 'enjoy listening to'), avoid vague phrases ('another world', 'know know spend'), and use appropriate vocabulary ('discover songs from other countries' if that's intended).

예시: Yes, I enjoy listening to other people sing, especially new songs I find online. For example, I like discovering music from different countries because it broadens my taste and makes my free time more enjoyable.

제안: Respond directly with correct tense and concise details: when you took the class and what you learned. Avoid unclear phrases ('break thing') and explain specific techniques you practiced (e.g. breath control, pitch). Use linking words like 'for example' or 'also.'

예시: Yes, I took a singing class last year. For example, my teacher taught me breath control and vocal exercises to improve pitch and tone, which helped me sing more confidently.

× I really love singing so I when I have free time I always go to karaoke and have a sing up song with my best friends and I really enjoy this time and it helps me more enjoyable after a long day of working.

✓ I really love singing, so when I have free time I always go to karaoke and sing a song with my best friends; I really enjoy this time and it makes me feel more relaxed after a long day of work.

Errors: incorrect phrase 'have a sing up song' and 'helps me more enjoyable' use wrong verb forms and adjectives. Use the verb 'sing' for the action (base form after 'go to karaoke and') and use 'make someone feel' + adjective: 'makes me feel more relaxed'. Also 'after a long day of working' is better as 'after a long day of work'. Suggestions: use base verb 'sing' for actions, use 'make/feel' patterns for emotions, and prefer 'work' as a noun for 'a long day of work'.

× Yes, I have learned a lot of song when I study at high school, my teacher teach me how to sing a song of Vietnam and I really appreciate about this time when I study umm sing class at school.

✓ Yes, I learned a lot of songs when I studied in high school; my teacher taught me how to sing Vietnamese songs and I really appreciate that time in my singing class at school.

Errors: inconsistent tense and incorrect verb forms: 'have learned' vs 'study' should be past 'learned' and 'studied'; 'teach' should be past 'taught'. Also 'a lot of song' should be plural 'songs' and 'sing a song of Vietnam' is unnatural; use 'Vietnamese songs'. Suggestions: keep past tense consistent for past experiences and use correct past forms 'learned/learnt' and 'taught'; use plural nouns where appropriate.

× I would like to sing for my parents. For example, when my mother's birthday is, I always sing a song per day for her and I really appreciate and feel happy when I make a happy for my mothers and my father.

✓ I would like to sing for my parents. For example, on my mother's birthday I always sing a song for her, and I really appreciate and feel happy when I make my mother and father happy.

Errors: incorrect preposition 'when my mother's birthday is' should be 'on my mother's birthday'. 'A song per day' is odd here; use 'a song' or 'sing a song for her'. 'Make a happy for my mothers and my father' has wrong article and plural; use 'make my mother and father happy'. Suggestions: use 'on' for specific dates/events, simplify 'sing a song for her', and use correct possessive/plural forms.

× For me, when I sing a happy song, I can make people and around me more funnier when they have a lot of umm, sad time. So I really feel happy when I can make them happier by sing a song.

✓ For me, when I sing a happy song, I can make people around me feel better when they are having sad times. So I feel happy when I can make them happier by singing a song.

Errors: 'more funnier' is redundant ('funnier' alone). 'People and around me' should be 'people around me'. 'When they have a lot of sad time' should be 'when they are having sad times' or 'when they feel sad'. 'By sing a song' requires gerund 'by singing'. Suggestions: avoid double comparatives, place modifiers correctly, and use gerund after 'by'.

× Yes, for me I really love hear a new song in the Internet especially I always research a new song from another world when I have free time because it make me more umm enjoyable and can make me a know know spend.

✓ Yes, I really love hearing new songs on the Internet. I especially like discovering songs from other countries when I have free time because it makes me feel more joyful and helps me spend my time usefully.

Errors: 'love hear' needs gerund 'hearing'; 'in the Internet' should be 'on the Internet'; 'research a new song from another world' is odd—use 'discover songs from other countries'; 'it make' should be 'it makes'; 'more enjoyable' should describe the speaker 'feel more joyful'; final phrase 'make me a know know spend' is unintelligible and was replaced with 'helps me spend my time usefully'. Suggestions: use gerund after 'love', correct prepositions, use 'discover' for finding music, ensure subject-verb agreement, and express outcomes clearly.

× Yes, I have taken a singing class last year. I have learned one song about my teacher teach for me and teacher teach me how to break thing and control my voice so I can learn another ways to improve my voice and improve my singing.

✓ Yes, I took a singing class last year. I learned one song that my teacher taught me, and the teacher showed me how to breathe and control my voice so I could learn other ways to improve my voice and singing.

Errors: use simple past for a finished time 'last year' (not present perfect). 'Have learned' should be 'learned'; 'my teacher teach for me' and 'teacher teach me' need past 'taught' and clearer phrasing. 'Break thing' likely intended 'breathe' (spelling) and 'another ways' should be 'other ways'. Suggestions: use simple past for completed past events, use correct past participles, check spelling ('breathe'), and use plural agreement 'other ways'.