Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar and fluency: use correct verb forms and reduce repetition. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two concise supporting details linked with a connector. Focus on clarity: e.g., “I enjoy singing even though I’m not very skilled” instead of “I listening.”

예시: I enjoy singing even though I’m not very skilled, because it helps me relax and socialize with friends. For example, we often sing together at parties, which makes me feel more confident than I used to be.

제안: Clarify meaning and correct vocabulary errors: remove confusing phrases and use simple past consistently. Provide one clear supporting detail about what you learned and the result. Avoid irrelevant or incorrect words (e.g., “chemists”)

예시: Yes. When I was in primary school I joined a singing club and practiced for several months with more experienced friends, which helped me learn basic techniques and gain confidence.

제안: Make the response direct and concise: start with a topic sentence answering the question, then add one supporting detail with linking words. Remove repeated words and fix tense issues.

예시: I usually don’t sing for anyone in particular; I sing mainly to relax. For instance, I often sing with friends when we hang out and sometimes I join in at concerts to enjoy the atmosphere.

제안: Work on sentence structure and precise vocabulary: use connectors correctly and give one or two specific reasons or examples. Correct grammar (e.g., subject-verb agreement) and remove unclear phrases like “performing hand”.

예시: Yes, definitely. Singing brings joy and can build friendships because singing together creates social bonds. For example, joining a choir can boost people’s self-confidence and encourage them to try new activities.

제안: Improve coherence and correct awkward phrasing: answer directly, then add a clear reason using linking words. Replace unclear lines (e.g., last sentence) with a concise contrast.

예시: It depends who is singing. I particularly enjoy live concerts by my favorite artists because the atmosphere and energy are amazing; however, I am less impressed when strangers sing in public if they are not very skilled.

제안: Use clear, grammatical sentences and give one or two specific reasons. Correct word choice and tense (e.g., “not common”, “for a long time”). Keep response within 2–3 sentences.

예시: No, I haven’t taken singing lessons. In Thailand they are not very common and can be expensive and time-consuming, so I never enrolled in one.

× Yes, I listening even though I'm not very skilled, I enjoy it with my friends because it's a fun way to relax and socialize.

✓ Yes, I listen, and even though I'm not very skilled, I enjoy it with my friends because it's a fun way to relax and socialize.

The verb 'listening' is incorrectly used without an auxiliary; the simple present 'I listen' fits this habitual action. Also added 'and' to connect clauses and corrected punctuation. Suggestion: use simple present for habitual activities and link clauses with proper conjunctions.

× I used to be shy before I am afraid too soon for another people, but now I'm brave enough to do something messy.

✓ I used to be shy because I was afraid of other people, but now I'm brave enough to try new things.

Mixed tenses and wrong preposition/pronoun usage. 'Used to' requires past description 'I was afraid'; 'for another people' is incorrect — use 'of other people'. 'Do something messy' is awkward; 'try new things' fits context. Use consistent past tense when describing past state.

× When I was in primary school, I joined a singing club and practiced there for several months with friends who were talented singers.

✓ When I was in primary school, I joined a singing club and practiced there for several months with friends who were talented singers.

Sentence is grammatically correct; past tense is appropriate for a past experience. No correction needed.

× After school, I learned basic, were called chemists, and gained confidence although I was a song and singer.

✓ After school, I learned the basics and gained confidence, although I was not a great singer.

Original has fragmented and unrelated phrases ('were called chemists') and unclear meaning. Corrected to logical sequence: 'learned the basics' and 'gained confidence'. Replaced 'although I was a song and singer' with 'although I was not a great singer' to convey intended contrast. Suggestion: keep clauses coherent and relevant.

× I don't usually sing for anyone in particular, I seem to relax and do and when when I'm hanging out with my friends and sometimes I sing along at concerts to enjoy a live music.

✓ I don't usually sing for anyone in particular; I sing to relax when I'm hanging out with my friends, and sometimes I sing along at concerts to enjoy live music.

Problems: redundant words ('do and when when'), incorrect article 'a live music' (music uncountable), and comma splice. Use semicolon or separate sentences, remove redundancy, and drop 'a' before 'live music'. Suggestion: simplify clauses and use correct articles with uncountable nouns.

× Yes, definitely singing not only brings joy but also helps people from friendships and boost self-confidence.

✓ Yes, definitely singing not only brings joy but also helps people form friendships and boost self-confidence.

Typo 'from' should be 'form' (verb meaning create). Also maintain parallel structure: 'helps people form friendships and boost self-confidence' aligns verbs. Suggestion: ensure parallel verbs and correct word choice.

× Be causing together creates social bonds and performing hand make you feel more capable.

✓ Because singing together creates social bonds, performing can make you feel more capable.

'Be causing' is incorrect; should be 'Because' to indicate reason. 'performing hand' is meaningless; use 'performing' as noun with correct verb. Rearranged to clear causal sentence. Suggestion: use 'because' for cause and ensure subject matches verb.

× In addition, it can inspire people to pursue it create.

✓ In addition, it can inspire people to pursue singing or creative activities.

Original ends with 'to pursue it create' which is ungrammatical. Clarified intended objects: 'pursue singing or creative activities.' Suggestion: specify clear objects after 'pursue'.

× It depends who is singing.

✓ It depends on who is singing.

Missing preposition 'on' after 'depends'. Use 'depends on' to indicate reliance. Suggestion: remember the collocation 'depend on'.

× I especially enjoy going to live concerts to see my favorite singers because the atmosphere and energy made the performance unforgettable and I love singing along with them.

✓ I especially enjoy going to live concerts to see my favorite singers because the atmosphere and energy make the performances unforgettable, and I love singing along with them.

Tense agreement: 'made' should be present 'make' to match general truth. 'Performance' plural better as 'performances'. Added comma before conjunction. Suggestion: maintain consistent present tense when stating general facts.

× Unless impressed when strangers sing about it in public though.

✓ However, I'm not usually impressed when strangers sing in public.

Original is a fragment and misuses 'unless'. Rewrote as full sentence conveying intended meaning. Suggestion: avoid sentence fragments and use complete clauses.

× No, I haven't taken a singing class in Thailand for more.

✓ No, I haven't taken a singing class in Thailand.

'for more' is incomplete and unnecessary. Present perfect 'haven't taken' is fine to indicate experience up to now. Suggestion: remove incomplete time phrase or specify duration (e.g., 'for a long time').

× Singing lessons are quite com uncommon and can be expensive and they would require a lot of time so I never enrolled in one.

✓ Singing lessons are quite uncommon and can be expensive, and they require a lot of time, so I never enrolled in one.

Typo 'com uncommon' fixed to 'uncommon'. 'Would require' changed to 'require' to state a general fact. Added commas for clarity. Suggestion: proofread for typos and keep tense consistent for general statements.