Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition and filler words, correct grammar (e.g., 'sing songs' -> 'sing songs' or 'sing', 'the pop music' -> 'pop music'), and limit to 2–4 sentences. Add a specific reason or example using a linking word like 'because' or 'for example'.

예시: Yes, I enjoy singing, especially R&B and pop, because it helps me relax after studying. For example, I often sing along to upbeat songs to unwind and improve my mood.

제안: Fix grammatical mistakes and clarify the story. Use a clear topic sentence ('Yes, I have') then give specific details about lessons, what you learned and the impact. Avoid contradictory or confusing phrases ('mom don't send me'). Use linking words like 'because' or 'as a result'.

예시: Yes, I have. When I was a child my mother enrolled me in a singing club, where I learned basic techniques for singing confidently and fluently. As a result, I became the club leader and gained confidence that still helps me today.

제안: Be clearer and correct word choice. Start with 'I like to sing for my family' then give specific reasons and an example. Replace awkward phrases ('approached me', 'never ashamed about me behavior') with natural expressions like 'support me' and 'are not ashamed of me'. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so'.

예시: I like to sing for my family because they are very supportive and make me feel comfortable. For instance, I often perform at home to show my appreciation and make them smile.

제안: Organize the response: start with a direct opinion, then explain with a specific reason and an example. Correct grammar ('same' -> 'singing', 'sing the sounds' -> 'singing') and use linking words like 'because' and 'for example'. Keep it concise (2–3 sentences).

예시: Yes, I think singing can make people happier because it relieves stress and boosts energy. For example, when I feel down I sing an upbeat song and it quickly improves my mood.

제안: Use a clear topic sentence and correct verb forms ('they all sing'). Avoid repetition ('relax my mind and relax my body')—combine ideas. Provide a short example of when or where you listen, using linking words like 'because' and 'for example'.

예시: Yes, I enjoy listening to others sing because talented performers can be inspiring. For example, I often attend friends' performances or concerts to relax and enjoy their music.

제안: Remove repetition and correct vocabulary and grammar ('sailing' -> 'singing', 'nerd' -> 'learned'). Start with a clear affirmative sentence, then give concise, specific details about the lessons and what you gained. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, I took singing classes as a child and my mother enrolled me in a local singing club. I learned vocal techniques, became the group leader, and gained confidence that influenced me deeply.

× I really love sing songs such as R&B or the pop music because I think that to sing these songs can actually help me relax my body and unwind my mind from the heavy study and work.

✓ I really love singing songs such as R&B and pop music because I think singing these songs can actually help me relax my body and unwind my mind from heavy study and work.

The verb 'love' is followed by a gerund when indicating enjoyment of an activity (verb + -ing). 'Sing songs' should be 'singing songs'. Also 'the pop music' is unneeded article; use 'pop music'. Remove the infinitive 'to' before 'sing these songs' because the gerund 'singing' is appropriate here. Suggestion: use 'love' + verb-ing and keep nouns without unnecessary articles. Grammar Problem Type ID: 8

× Uh, and besides these songs can, uh, it's really my cup of tea.

✓ Uh, and besides, these songs are really my cup of tea.

The phrase 'is my cup of tea' requires a linking verb 'are' (since 'these songs' is plural) rather than 'can' or 'it's'. Remove 'can' and 'it's' which are ungrammatical here. Use correct subject-verb agreement and article usage. Grammar Problem Type ID: 17

× I really love seeing them to surprise the love to the.

✓ I really love hearing them because they surprise me and make me feel loved.

Original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. 'Seeing them to surprise the love to the' does not form a valid structure. Replace 'seeing' with 'hearing' if referring to songs, or 'listening to them'. Provide a clear clause: 'because they surprise me and make me feel loved.' Suggestion: ensure subject, verb, and object are present and meaning is explicit. Grammar Problem Type ID: 26

× Yes, definitely When I was a child, my mom don't send me to the club to uh, train me to sing in front of different people and I become the leader in the club for either the some basic skills about how to sing confidently and fluently.

✓ Yes, definitely. When I was a child, my mom sent me to a club to train me to sing in front of different people, and I became the leader in the club and learned some basic skills about how to sing confidently and fluently.

Multiple errors: 'don't send' should be past tense 'sent' to match 'When I was a child'. 'I become' should be past 'I became'. 'for either the some basic skills' is ungrammatical — use 'and learned some basic skills'. Use consistent past tense for past events. Grammar Problem Type ID: 5

× Who do you want to sing for? Student: Well, actually I really love to sing for my family members because they always approached me in daily life and they never ashamed about me behavior.

✓ Well, actually I really love to sing for my family members because they always support me in daily life and they are never ashamed of my behavior.

Pronoun and verb errors: 'approached me' is wrong contextually; use 'support me' or 'are supportive'. 'They never ashamed about me behavior' needs passive/adjective form 'are never ashamed of my behavior'. Use correct preposition 'of' and possessive 'my'. Grammar Problem Type ID: 12

× Also I really want to sing for them to express my attitude and the gratitude them.

✓ Also I really want to sing for them to express my feelings and gratitude to them.

'Express my attitude' is awkward; 'feelings' is better. 'the gratitude them' is ungrammatical — use 'gratitude to them' or 'my gratitude'. Include preposition 'to'. Correct pronoun placement. Grammar Problem Type ID: 11

× Definitely same can really bring happiness to different people.

✓ Definitely, singing can really bring happiness to different people.

'Same' is incorrect; likely intended 'singing' or 'music'. Also subject 'singing' (singular noun) with verb 'can bring' is correct. Ensure the subject properly matches the verb. Grammar Problem Type ID: 27

× If people are upset or depressed with one thing or they may meet difficulties at that moment and if they sing the sounds that is really inspiring and can give them a sense of excitement, can really lift their moods.

✓ If people are upset or depressed or facing difficulties at that moment, singing inspiring songs can give them a sense of excitement and really lift their moods.

Problems: redundant conditionals and awkward clauses. Use consistent structure: subordinate condition clause then main clause. 'they sing the sounds that is really inspiring' should be 'singing inspiring songs' (gerund + adjective + noun). Ensure subject-verb agreement ('songs that are really inspiring'). Combine ideas concisely. Grammar Problem Type ID: 26

× I really love to listen to my friends singing sounds because they all sings very well, brilliant And I just like to listening the concert and I think that just listen to the to sing the sounds that can help me relax my mind and relax my body.

✓ I really love to listen to my friends sing because they all sing very well. I also like listening to concerts, and I think that listening to singing can help me relax my mind and body.

Errors: 'singing sounds' is awkward — use 'friends sing'. 'they all sings' should be 'they all sing' (subject-verb agreement). 'I just like to listening' should be 'I like listening' (verb form). 'listen to the to sing the sounds' is ungrammatical — simplify to 'listening to singing'. Use correct verb forms and agreement. Grammar Problem Type ID: 2},{

× So actually I have taken to a sailing class when I was a child and it left a deep impression on my mind.

✓ So actually I took a singing class when I was a child and it left a deep impression on me.

Errors: 'have taken to a sailing class when I was a child' mixes present perfect with a past time expression — use simple past 'took'. 'sailing' is a typo for 'singing'. 'left a deep impression on my mind' is acceptable but more natural 'on me'. Keep tense consistent with time adverbial. Grammar Problem Type ID: 5

× I become the leader and this singing club and the nerd some basic knowledge about how to sing.

✓ I became the leader of this singing club and learned some basic knowledge about how to sing.

Errors: 'I become' should be past 'I became'. 'leader and this singing club' needs preposition 'of this singing club'. 'the nerd some basic knowledge' is incorrect — use 'learned some basic knowledge'. Ensure past tense and correct word order. Grammar Problem Type ID: 26