Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the answer more natural and grammatically consistent. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct tense/use of verbs (help -> helps) and avoid redundancy.

예시: Yes, I love singing because it helps me relax and relieve stress. For example, after a busy day at work I often sing along to my favorite songs for twenty minutes, which calms my mind and lifts my mood.

제안: Be direct and avoid contradictory phrases. Use clear structure: topic sentence, then brief supporting detail. Avoid awkward phrasing like 'sing back' and 'let's say'.

예시: No, I have never had formal singing lessons. However, I have watched many online tutorials on vocal techniques, and these videos have helped me improve my pitch and breathing.

제안: Remove repetition and make the response concise. Use linking words to show contrast or addition. Provide one specific example of when you would sing for someone.

예시: I usually sing for myself to relax and unwind. However, I would also like to sing for my boyfriend on special occasions, for instance on his birthday to make him feel appreciated.

제안: Correct vocabulary and be specific. 'Senior' is incorrect — use 'singing' and explain briefly how it affects emotions with a clear link phrase. Avoid vague phrases like 'a lot with people emotionally.'

예시: Yes, I believe singing increases dopamine and endorphins, which can make people feel happier. For example, group singing or karaoke often lifts my mood and helps me feel more connected to others.

제안: Fix grammar and metaphors. Keep it clear and specific: state your opinion, then give a reason with one example. Avoid confusing imagery like 'eye look on my ears.'

예시: Yes, I enjoy listening to others sing because some people have beautiful voices and great expression. For instance, I often watch live performances on YouTube because the emotion in a singer's voice can be very moving.

제안: Be concise and correct repetition. Structure the answer with a direct statement followed by a specific supporting detail about what you learned and how it helped. Avoid repeating words ('properly properly').

예시: No, I haven't taken a formal singing class, but I have followed many YouTube tutorials on breathing, pitch control, and vocal warm-ups. As a result, I've improved my range and can sing confidently in casual settings.

× Yes, I love singing because it helped me relax and relieve some stress.

✓ Yes, I love singing because it helps me relax and relieve stress.

The original mixes present tense 'I love' with past tense 'helped'. The situation is general/habitual, so present simple 'helps' is correct. Also 'some stress' is natural as 'stress' without 'some.' Use present simple to describe habitual effects.

× No, I have never learned how to sing back.

✓ No, I have never learned how to sing properly.

The phrase 'sing back' is incorrect in this context. The student likely meant 'properly' or 'formally.' The present perfect 'have never learned' is appropriate for life experience; replace the incorrect adverb with 'properly.'

× I have watched some videos about how to sing properly. So let's say I have taken some classes.

✓ I have watched some videos about how to sing properly, so you could say I have taken some informal classes.

Two short sentences joined by 'So' are acceptable but can be improved for clarity. The phrase 'let's say' is conversational and odd when describing personal experience; 'you could say' or 'I suppose' is clearer. Also clarify that these were informal 'classes' from videos.

× Usually I sing for myself because I sing because I want to relax and relieve some pressure.

✓ Usually I sing for myself because I want to relax and relieve some pressure.

The original contains a repeated clause 'because I sing because,' creating redundancy. Remove the extra 'I sing' to make the sentence concise and grammatically correct.

× So mostly I think for myself, but I also would love to sing for my boyfriend.

✓ So mostly I sing for myself, but I would also love to sing for my boyfriend.

'I think for myself' is odd here; the intended meaning is that singing is for oneself. Use present simple 'I sing for myself.' Also place 'also' after the subject for natural word order: 'I would also love.'

× Yes, I believe senior would increase dopamine in your body and make you feel elated.

✓ Yes, I believe singing would increase dopamine in your body and make you feel elated.

The word 'senior' is incorrect and likely a typo for 'singing.' Use the gerund 'singing' as the subject. The conditional 'would increase' is acceptable when speaking generally about effects.

× So I am pretty sure that singing can help a lot with people emotionally.

✓ So I am pretty sure that singing can help people a lot emotionally.

Word order and preposition use are awkward. Place 'people' immediately after 'help' and use 'a lot' or 'emotionally' in natural positions: 'help people a lot emotionally.' This corrects the pronoun/phrase placement.

× Yes, as much as I love singing myself, I also love listening to other people singing because some people have really really beautiful voice and singing to them feel like a little bit to my eye look on my ears.

✓ Yes, as much as I love singing myself, I also love listening to other people sing because some people have really beautiful voices and listening to them feels delightful to my ears.

Multiple issues: 'other people singing' is better as 'other people sing' or 'listening to other people sing.' 'Really really' is informal repetition; one 'really' suffices. 'Beautiful voice' should be plural 'beautiful voices.' The clause 'singing to them feel like a little bit to my eye look on my ears' is ungrammatical and unclear; replace with 'listening to them feels delightful to my ears' to convey the intended meaning. Ensure subject-verb agreement: 'listening ... feels.'

× I have never taken a proper singing class but I have watched some video online especially on YouTube about how to sing better or tips on singing better, something like that.

✓ I have never taken a proper singing class, but I have watched some videos online, especially on YouTube, about how to sing better and tips for improving.

Maintain plural 'videos' to match 'some.' Add commas for clarity. Replace the repetitive phrase 'how to sing better or tips on singing better' with 'how to sing better and tips for improving' to avoid repetition and improve style.

× So I haven't really learned singing properly properly but I can sing pretty well because of those videos.

✓ So I haven't really learned to sing properly, but I can sing pretty well because of those videos.

Use the infinitive 'to sing' after 'learned' rather than the gerund. Remove duplicate 'properly properly.' Add a comma before 'but' to join clauses correctly.