Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be clearer and avoid errors: start with a direct topic sentence, correct vocabulary (singing, not seeing), and give one or two specific supporting details. Use a linking word to connect ideas and keep it within 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me express my emotions. For example, after a stressful workday I often sing upbeat songs to relax and clear my mind. This usually helps me feel calmer and more positive.

제안: Give a concise direct answer, avoid repetition, and add one specific plan or example of how you would learn. Use a linking word when adding the detail.

예시: No, I haven't had formal lessons. However, I plan to take weekly classes or practice with a talented friend so I can improve my breathing and pitch control.

제안: Answer directly and avoid vague phrases like 'Don't know what to do next.' Provide a clear reason and a specific context when you sing for yourself. Keep it coherent with linking words.

예시: I usually sing for myself because it lifts my spirits. For instance, when I'm commuting or exercising I sing upbeat songs to boost my energy and motivation.

제안: Provide a clear topic sentence and one specific example with a linking word. Avoid vague phrases like 'some good memories'—explain briefly how music does this (e.g., triggers memories or changes mood).

예시: Yes, I think singing can make people happy because it evokes positive memories and emotions. For example, when I'm stressed I sing an upbeat song from my childhood and it immediately improves my mood.

제안: Start with a direct response and combine reasons succinctly. Use linking words to connect ideas and give one concrete example of how listening helps you (e.g., imitation, feedback).

예시: Yes, I enjoy listening to others because I can feel the emotion in their voice and learn from their technique. For example, when I listen to a friend sing, I pay attention to their phrasing and try to imitate it to improve my own control.

제안: Answer directly, avoid repeating previous points, and give a specific plan or timeframe for taking classes. Use a linking word to show intention.

예시: No, I haven't taken formal classes, but I plan to start weekly lessons next month. Alternatively, I will practice with a skilled friend twice a week to work on my breath control and pitch.

× Some of my friends are pretty good at singing, maybe I can learn something from them.

✓ Some of my friends are pretty good at singing; maybe I can learn something from them.

The original sentence runs two independent clauses with only a comma, creating a comma splice. While this is primarily a sentence-structure/punctuation issue, it also affects plurality clarity when listing ideas. Use a semicolon or conjunction to join independent clauses properly: '...singing; maybe...' or '..., and maybe...'. Suggestion: Join independent clauses with a semicolon or use a coordinating conjunction.

× I enjoy seeing very much because it is a way for me to express my emotions.

✓ I enjoy singing very much because it is a way for me to express my emotions.

This is not a third-person singular problem but a word error: 'seeing' should be 'singing' to match the context. Replace the incorrect verb form. Suggestion: choose the correct verb that fits the topic and subject.

× I like seeing especially during some busy days, which helps me unwind and clear my mind.

✓ I like singing, especially on busy days, which helps me unwind and clear my mind.

Errors: wrong verb 'seeing' instead of 'singing' and incorrect preposition 'during some busy days'. Use 'on busy days' for habitual actions. Suggestion: use present simple for habits and correct preposition 'on'.

× Have you ever learnt how to sing?

✓ Have you ever learned how to sing?

'Learnt' is a valid British past participle, but if using American English, 'learned' is preferred. The present perfect 'have you ever...' requires the past participle; both 'learnt' and 'learned' are acceptable. Suggestion: choose one form consistently; use 'learned' for American English and 'learnt' for British English.

× Probably myself because I really enjoy some upbeat songs which can lift my spirit and boost my energy while I feel tired or just move around.

✓ Probably myself, because I really enjoy upbeat songs that can lift my spirits and boost my energy when I feel tired or just moving around.

Problems: reflexive pronoun 'myself' is awkward as subject complement; 'some upbeat songs' -> 'upbeat songs' sounds more natural; 'which' should be 'that' for defining clause; 'spirit' -> plural 'spirits' collocates with 'lift my spirits'; 'while I feel tired or just move around' is awkward — use 'when I feel tired or am just moving around'. Suggestion: avoid unnecessary reflexive pronouns and use natural collocations and correct clause words.

× Don't know what to do next.

✓ I don't know what to do next.

The original fragment lacks the subject 'I', making it informal or a sentence without a verb-subject structure. Add the subject to form a complete sentence. Suggestion: include subjects in formal responses: 'I don't know...'.

× It can bring some good memories to the people so they have good mood.

✓ It can bring back good memories to people, so they are in a good mood.

Problems: 'some good memories' is acceptable but 'bring back good memories' is a natural collocation; 'the people' is unnecessary—use 'people'; 'have good mood' is ungrammatical—use 'be in a good mood'. Suggestion: use natural collocations and correct noun phrases.

× For example, I feel tired and stressed.

✓ For example, I feel tired and stressed.

This sentence is grammatically correct in present simple to describe a current state; no tense change needed. Keep as is. Suggestion: none.

× I often listen to some upbeat music which is really helpful and I feel better after that.

✓ I often listen to upbeat music, which is really helpful, and I feel better afterward.

Stylistic improvements: remove 'some' for naturalness, add commas around non-defining relative clause, and change 'after that' to 'afterward' for conciseness. 'Listening to upbeat music' uses gerund correctly; no -ing error. Suggestion: improve cohesion and punctuation.

× I enjoy listening to them singing, which may help me improve my technique and gain more confidence.

✓ I enjoy listening to them sing, which may help me improve my technique and gain more confidence.

After verbs of perception or listening, use the bare infinitive ('listen to them sing') rather than '-ing' when referring to the action being perceived. Suggestion: use 'listen to someone do something' structure.

× No I haven't, that's probably why I'm not confident about singing.

✓ No, I haven't; that's probably why I'm not confident about singing.

Comma/semicolon punctuation: joining independent clauses properly. Tense usage is correct (present perfect + present). Suggestion: add proper punctuation for clarity.

× Some of my friends are really talented singers so I can take lessons or just practice with them to improve my technique so I will feel more confident when I sing.

✓ Some of my friends are really talented singers, so I can take lessons or practice with them to improve my technique and feel more confident when I sing.

Run-on with repeated 'so'. Use one coordinating conjunction and combine clauses with 'and' to avoid redundancy. Present simple and future intention 'will' can be replaced by present construction 'feel' after 'to' for smoother flow. Suggestion: avoid repeating conjunctions and keep tense consistent.