Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific details. Avoid filler words (umm) and fix errors ("relieve" not "gives me relieve", "recharge my energy" is fine).

예시: Yes, I enjoy singing. For example, I often go to karaoke with my sister when I feel stressed, and singing helps me relax and recharge quickly.

제안: Answer directly, correct vocabulary and grammar, and give a specific detail about what you would like to learn. Avoid repeated words and unclear phrases ("swing sing", "route").

예시: No, I haven't taken lessons, but I would love to. If I could, I would learn vocal techniques such as breath control and how to produce a stronger, clearer tone like professional singers.

제안: Give a fuller answer with a brief explanation. Use a topic sentence then a reason or example. Avoid hesitation sounds and be natural.

예시: I don't really have a particular person in mind to sing for; I usually sing for myself or with friends simply to enjoy the moment and relieve stress.

제안: This is a good direct answer; improve by tightening the sentence and adding a brief example or explanation using linking words like "because" or "for example." Correct small grammar ("daily life" not "lives").

예시: Yes, I think singing brings happiness because it helps people forget daily life stress; for example, when I sing I feel more relaxed and energetic afterwards.

제안: Be specific and grammatical. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give a specific example and use linking words. Avoid fillers and choose accurate expressions ("pumped up" not "bumped up").

예시: Yes, I enjoy listening to other people sing, especially K-pop. For instance, I often play K-pop when I drive because it makes me feel energized and upbeat.

제안: Combine sentences into one coherent answer. Fix grammar and collide ideas: explain why you haven't taken classes and what you would hope to learn if you did. Use linking words like "because" and "but" correctly.

예시: No, I haven't taken a singing class because I thought it would be a waste of money since I'm not confident, but if I had the opportunity I would take lessons to improve my pitch and breathing technique.

× 'It gives me relieve my stress and recharge my energy without thinking.'

✓ 'It helps relieve my stress and recharge my energy without thinking.'

'Gives me relieve' is incorrect because 'relieve' is a verb and needs an appropriate verb like 'help' or 'helps' before it. Also subject-verb agreement requires 'helps' for 'It'. Use 'help/helps relieve' to express causing relief. Suggestion: use 'helps relieve' or 'helps me relieve'.

× 'I love singing because when I have umm, stress, I like to go karaoke with my sister or my best friend.'

✓ 'I love singing because when I am stressed, I like to go to karaoke with my sister or my best friend.'

'when I have stress' is grammatically acceptable but less natural; use adjective 'stressed' to describe state. Also 'go karaoke' lacks preposition 'to' and 'karaoke' usually used as 'go to karaoke' or 'go to a karaoke bar'.

× 'Have you ever learnt how to sing?'

✓ 'Have you ever learned how to sing?'

'Learnt' is a valid past participle in British English, but in many contexts 'learned' is preferred in spoken modern English; no tense error if British, but align with common spoken form 'learned'. If keeping British English, 'learnt' is acceptable.

× 'No umm, but if I had a chance to learn how to swing sing, I would definitely want to learn about how to route and strong sounds make strong sounds like singer.'

✓ 'No. But if I had a chance to learn how to sing, I would definitely want to learn how to produce strong, clear sounds like a singer.'

The original sentence has multiple problems: 'swing' is incorrect instead of 'sing'; 'learn about how to route' is confused phrasing — 'produce' or 'create' is intended; 'strong sounds make strong sounds' is repetitive; missing article before 'singer'. Suggest simplifying and using correct verbs: 'learn how to sing' and 'produce strong, clear sounds like a singer.'

× 'Oh well. MMM, there's no one that I want to sing for.'

✓ 'Oh well. Um, there is no one I want to sing for.'

'There's' is contraction of 'there is' and is fine, but 'that I want to sing for' is wordy; removing 'that' and using 'um' for hesitation is stylistic. No major number issue; kept as slight refinement for natural speech.

× 'in my case singing makes me forget about my daily lives or daily stress and I find it is the fun way to relieve my stress and recharge my energy.'

✓ 'In my case, singing makes me forget about my daily life and daily stress, and I find it is a fun way to relieve my stress and recharge my energy.'

Use singular 'daily life' rather than plural 'daily lives' when referring to one person's routine. Add article 'a' before 'fun way'. Maintain present tense 'makes' and 'find' consistent.

× 'because when I go outside or driving I love to.'

✓ 'because when I go outside or drive, I love to.'

After 'or' parallel structure must match: 'go outside or drive' (both base verbs). 'Driving' is a gerund; use 'drive' to match 'go'. Also add comma before continuation.

× 'I love listening to other songs like K Pop or UMM. K pop music, it makes me feel bumped up.'

✓ 'I love listening to songs like K-pop. K-pop music makes me feel pumped up.'

'Other songs' is vague; 'songs like K-pop' is clearer. 'bumped up' is incorrect idiom; correct phrase is 'pumped up' meaning excited. Standardize 'K-pop' capitalization/hyphenation.

× 'I haven't taken a singing class. Because I don't have to good at singing so it's quite waste of money I think.'

✓ 'I haven't taken a singing class because I'm not very good at singing, so I think it would be a waste of money.'

Combine sentence fragments: do not start sentence with 'Because' as separate sentence. 'don't have to good' is incorrect; use 'I'm not very good'. 'it's quite waste of money' needs article 'a' and conditional 'would be' to express hypothetical evaluation. Maintain present perfect 'haven't taken' correctly.

× 'But if I had a chance I definitely want to how to sing well.'

✓ 'But if I had a chance, I would definitely want to learn how to sing well.'

Incorrect conditional form: 'If I had a chance' is unreal past; pair with 'I would want' not 'I want'. 'want to how to sing' is ungrammatical—use 'want to learn how to sing well.'