Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then give one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words (e.g., however, but, because) and correct collocations (e.g., "sing along" or "sing at karaoke"). Reduce hesitations and filler words.

예시: I don't usually like singing in front of others because I'm not confident in my voice. However, I do go to karaoke with friends occasionally and sing along after a few drinks to relax.

제안: Answer directly, avoid tense errors and unclear phrases. Use one clear conditional sentence if talking about a hypothetical (e.g., "If I had the chance, I would take lessons"). Specify what you would learn (breathing, pitch, range) and avoid repetition. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

예시: No, I have never taken formal singing lessons. If I had the opportunity, I would take lessons to improve my breathing and learn how to control pitch and reach higher notes.

제안: Begin with a clear topic sentence and give one specific example. Use linking words (e.g., "but", "however", "for example") and correct prepositions (e.g., "perform at a party"). Remove fillers and keep it to two sentences.

예시: I prefer not to perform in public, but if I had to I would sing for close friends or family. For example, I might perform a song at a small party while presenting a special gift.

제안: Answer directly and give one clear, specific example. Correct collocations (e.g., "household chores") and remove repetitions. Use linking words like "for example" properly and limit to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, absolutely — singing boosts my energy and mood. For example, I often sing to myself while doing household chores like cooking or cleaning, which makes those tasks more enjoyable.

제안: Provide a direct topic sentence and one specific supporting detail. Fix grammar ("listening to others sing", "one of my friends is good"). Use linking words and avoid hesitations.

예시: Yes, I enjoy listening to others sing. One of my friends sings very well, so I often go to karaoke with her to hear her perform.

제안: Be concise and correct in verb forms. State clearly that you haven't taken classes, then say what you would learn if you did (e.g., vocal technique, pitch control). Avoid repetition and hesitations; keep to two sentences.

예시: No, I haven't taken any singing classes. If I did, I would focus on vocal techniques like breath control and pitch training so I could sing higher notes more reliably.

× I I sometimes go to a karaoke room to fill out some songs with my friends after I after having a few drinks.

✓ I sometimes go to a karaoke room to sing some songs with my friends after having a few drinks.

The phrase 'fill out some songs' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'sing' or 'sing some songs'. Also 'after I after having' is redundant. Use gerund 'having' after 'after' and omit the extra 'I'. Suggestion: simplify to 'after having a few drinks.'

× No, I have never taken formal lessons before, but if I had had the opportunity to learn, I I would love to train my boys.

✓ No, I have never taken formal lessons before, but if I had the opportunity to learn, I would love to train my voice.

The conditional 'if I had had' implies past unreal and is inconsistent with the following 'would love' about a present desire; use 'if I had' or 'if I had the opportunity'. 'Train my boys' is likely incorrect word choice; context implies 'train my voice.' Remove duplicate 'I'.

× So I wanna, I wanna learn how pitch, how to pitch, how to hit high pitch.

✓ So I want to learn how to pitch my voice and how to hit high notes.

Informal 'wanna' should be 'want to' in a test context. 'How pitch' is ungrammatical; use 'how to pitch' with an object 'my voice' or 'how to hit high notes.' Use plural 'notes' for natural collocation.

× I don't like performing in public but if I had to I think for my friends or family umm it would be amazing if uh performing it in at a party along with a special gift.

✓ I don't like performing in public, but if I had to, I would perform for my friends or family; it would be amazing to perform at a party and give a special gift.

Problems: missing commas, awkward structure 'if I had to I think for my friends or family'; restructure for clarity. 'performing it in at a party' has wrong prepositions 'in at'; use 'perform at a party.' Use infinitive 'to perform' rather than 'performing it.'

× Yes, without a doubt it makes me it makes me much more energetic.

✓ Yes, without a doubt it makes me much more energetic.

Redundant repetition 'it makes me' appears twice. Remove duplicate to make sentence grammatical and concise.

× For example, when I do household, when I when I when I doing household course like umm cleaning or cooking, I home or sing to myself.

✓ For example, when I do household chores like cleaning or cooking at home, I hum or sing to myself.

Multiple errors: 'do household' should be 'do household chores.' Delete repeated fragments. 'doing household course' is incorrect. 'I home or sing' should be 'at home I hum or sing.' Use 'hum' for low-volume singing. Keep present simple for habitual actions.

× Yes, I like listening the singing.

✓ Yes, I like listening to singing.

The verb 'listen' requires the preposition 'to' when followed by a noun. Alternatively say 'I like listening to others sing' or 'I like listening to singing.'

× Umm actually my friends, one of my friends are good at singing so I I love to go to a karaoke room with her.

✓ Actually, one of my friends is good at singing, so I love to go to a karaoke room with her.

Subject-verb agreement: 'one of my friends' is singular and takes 'is' not 'are.' Remove unnecessary 'my friends' before the clause and duplicate 'I'.

× No, I have never taken singing classes before, but if I had to, if I had the opportunity to learn, I would love to. I would love to train my voice. So I wanna how to how to hit high pitched tones.

✓ No, I have never taken singing classes before, but if I had the opportunity to learn, I would love to train my voice. I want to learn how to hit high-pitched tones.

Reduce redundancy 'if I had to, if I had the opportunity' to a single conditional. Replace informal 'wanna' with 'want to.' 'How to how to' is repeated; remove duplication. Use adjective 'high-pitched' before 'tones' and keep present simple for desire.