Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct minor word choice and grammar (e.g., avoid 'MO'). Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep answers under five sentences and avoid repeating ideas.

예시: Yes, I enjoy singing; it’s one of my favourite hobbies. I particularly focus on the mood of each song and try to convey its emotions through my voice, which makes performing more expressive and satisfying.

제안: Use correct tense and pronouns, and be slightly more specific about methods and results. Begin with a direct answer, then add linked details about what you do and the effect it has had.

예시: No, I haven’t taken formal singing lessons, but I’ve been improving on my own by watching YouTube tutorials and practising vocal exercises daily. As a result, my breath control and pitch accuracy have noticeably improved.

제안: Answer directly and tighten phrasing. Use linking words to explain motivation and limit repetition. Clarify whether you mean immediate plans or future goals.

예시: I don’t have a specific audience right now, but in the future I’d love to perform on stage for my family and friends. I want to share the emotions I feel in songs with a wider audience, though only as a hobby rather than professionally.

제안: Be concise and avoid filler (e.g., 'def definitely'). Start with a clear topic sentence, then give a brief reason and an example. Use linking words for contrast.

예시: Yes, singing can change people’s moods: upbeat songs often lift spirits, while slow, minor-key pieces can evoke sadness. For example, happy pop music can make me feel more energetic and optimistic.

제안: Avoid vague phrasing and repetitions. Start with a direct statement, then give one specific reason and an example. Use smoother linking words and correct minor grammar ('listening to how people reflect a song' → 'how performers interpret a song').

예시: Yes, I enjoy listening to others when they sing well because I appreciate their technique and emotional interpretation. For instance, a good live performance can reveal subtle phrasing that studio recordings often miss.

제안: Use correct grammar (haven’t taken, classes) and remove fillers ('uh', 'umm'). Answer directly, explain why school classes weren’t helpful, and state a clear future intention with a brief reason.

예시: No, I haven’t taken formal singing classes aside from basic school lessons, which I found too general to help my technique. I plan to take private lessons in the future to work on breath control and vocal projection.

× I didn't take any specific lessons based on how to sing, but I'm trying to improve it myself by watching YouTube videos and voice training videos.

✓ I haven't taken any specific lessons on how to sing, but I'm trying to improve myself by watching YouTube and voice-training videos.

The original uses simple past 'didn't take' while the context (experience up to now) requires present perfect 'haven't taken' (type 9). Also 'improve it myself' is awkward; use 'improve myself'. Use 'on how to sing' instead of 'based on how to sing'. Hyphenate 'voice-training' as a compound adjective and shorten 'YouTube videos and voice training videos' to 'YouTube and voice-training videos' for clarity.

× I didn't think for any audience at the moment, but one day I would like to sing on a stage that my family and friends are going to watch.

✓ I'm not thinking about any audience at the moment, but one day I would like to sing on a stage for my family and friends to watch.

The original mixes past tense 'didn't think' with 'at the moment', which should use present tense 'I'm not thinking' or present continuous (type 5). Also 'sing on a stage that my family and friends are going to watch' is awkward; use 'sing on a stage for my family and friends to watch' to show purpose and correct relative clause structure.

× I like to get into the character and MO, the mood of the song that I'm singing and I really like to reflect emotions by my voice depending on the song.

✓ I like to get into the character and the mood of the song I'm singing, and I really like to express emotions with my voice depending on the song.

The sentence is wordy and has unnecessary abbreviation 'MO'; 'the mood' needs the definite article (type 10 and 17). 'Reflect emotions by my voice' is not natural; use 'express emotions with my voice'. Also remove redundant 'that' and tighten structure.

× They're really helpful to improve your voice and how you're using it without paying any money.

✓ They're really helpful for improving my voice and how I use it without having to pay.

Pronoun mismatch: the student should refer to their own experience with 'my' and 'I' rather than 'your' (type 12). Also use gerund 'improving' after 'helpful' and rephrase 'without paying any money' to 'without having to pay' for naturalness.

× I would like to reflect my emotions on a stage and on a wider audience as a hobby though not as a professional.

✓ I would like to show my emotions on stage and to a wider audience as a hobby, though not as a professional.

Use 'on stage' (no article) and 'to an audience' rather than 'on a wider audience' (type 11). 'Reflect my emotions' is less natural than 'show my emotions'. Add commas for clarity.

× If it's a happy song that you're singing, yes it can def definitely improve your mood and get you in a more positive state.

✓ If it's a happy song you're singing, it can definitely improve your mood and put you in a more positive state.

Remove filler 'def', place 'definitely' before the verb for correct adverb placement (type 20). Use 'put you' instead of 'get you' for natural collocation.

× I do if they can sing well, otherwise it's a bit disturbing for your ears.

✓ I do if they can sing well; otherwise, it's a bit unpleasant to listen to.

The clause 'otherwise it's a bit disturbing for your ears' is awkward and informal. Rephrase for naturalness and clarity (type 26). 'Unpleasant to listen to' is a more native expression.

× As I said before, no, I haven't took any singing clothes other than the ones at the school.

✓ As I said before, no, I haven't taken any singing classes other than the ones at school.

Use past participle 'taken' after 'haven't' (type 5 and 9). 'Clothes' is the wrong word; it should be 'classes'. Also 'at school' is more natural than 'at the school' in this context.