Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is natural and relevant, but slightly long and contains some redundancy (e.g., 'it is therapeutic' and 'it cheers me up' say similar things). Keep sentences concise and use a linking phrase to show routine. Also avoid overly specific irrelevant detail (singing in the bathroom is okay but one clear reason is enough).

예시: I enjoy singing because it helps me relax after a hectic day. For example, I usually sing for about 30 minutes while studying, which clears my mind and boosts my mood.

제안: Good direct response with supporting details, but there are grammatical mistakes ('quickly' should be 'short' or 'brief') and slight repetition of feeling relaxed/happy. Use one clear detail and a linking word to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I learnt to sing in primary school. The lessons were short but enjoyable, and because we sang together the atmosphere was lively, which made me feel relaxed.

제안: Strong specific answer and good supporting details. To improve, add a linking phrase and vary vocabulary slightly (e.g., 'perform' → 'sing for them'), and avoid small tense/detail mismatches ('used to listen to' is fine).

예시: I usually sing for my parents because they always look proud when I sing. For instance, at family gatherings I often choose old pop songs they used to listen to, and seeing their reaction makes me happy.

제안: Your idea is good but the answer has unclear phrasing ('when people think') and a strange phrase ('in a trail'). Be specific and concise, use linking words to give reasons, and correct word choice. Provide one or two clear reasons and an example.

예시: Yes, I think singing brings happiness because it helps people forget stress and releases emotions. For example, singing with friends can create social support and lift everyone's mood after a long workday.

제안: Your answer contains repeated 'actually' and some unclear clauses ('and we talked', past/present tense mix). Keep it concise, correct tenses, and avoid repetition. Mention when and why you listen, with one linking phrase.

예시: Yes, I enjoy listening to others sing, especially artists like The Beatles or Blackpink on YouTube or TikTok, because their music helps me relax. I usually listen in the evening during my commute or while cooking.

제안: Clear response but repetitive about feelings and uses 'actually' unnecessarily. Keep within five sentences and avoid repeating the same idea. Add a linking word to connect past experience with lasting memory.

예시: Yes, I took music classes in primary school. The lessons were short but enjoyable, and because we learned simple songs together the atmosphere was lively. I still remember those tunes and the fun we had.

× We had a quickly music classes.

✓ We had quick music classes.

Grammar problem type ID:13 Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs. The original uses the adverb 'quickly' to modify the noun 'classes,' but 'quickly' is an adverb and cannot modify a noun. Use the adjective 'quick' to describe 'music classes.' Also corrects article agreement ('a' with plural 'classes' is incorrect) by removing 'a'.

× Singing, especially with friends or in a trail, also provides emotional release and social support which reduce stress and lift mood.

✓ Singing, especially with friends or in a choir, also provides emotional release and social support which reduce stress and lift mood.

Grammar problem type ID:26 Sentence structure errors (word choice leading to wrong meaning). The phrase 'in a trail' is incorrect in this context; likely intended 'in a choir' or 'in a group.' Replacing with 'in a choir' fixes meaning. No change to tense or other grammar required.

× Actually, yes, I often listen to my favorite songs by artists like The Beatles or Blackpink on YouTube or Tiktok because their music helps me relax after a heated work day and we talked.

✓ Actually, yes, I often listen to my favorite songs by artists like The Beatles or Blackpink on YouTube or TikTok because their music helps me relax after a hectic work day, and I talk with friends about them.

Grammar problem type ID:26 Sentence structure errors and 6 Present tense issue. The original contains 'we talked' which is past tense and disconnected; it also uses 'heated work day' which is odd collocation. Change to present tense 'I talk with friends' to match habitual context and use 'hectic work day.' This aligns tense and clarifies meaning.

× Actually, I usually listened in the evening during my commute or while cooking.

✓ Actually, I usually listen in the evening during my commute or while cooking.

Grammar problem type ID:6 Present tense issue. The original uses past tense 'listened' while the adverb 'usually' indicates a habitual present action. Change to present simple 'listen.'

× I learned to sing in primary school.

✓ I learned to sing in primary school.

No grammar error listed applies. The sentence is correct in context (past action). No change needed.

× It always made me feel relaxed and happy.

✓ It always made me feel relaxed and happy.

No grammar error listed applies. The sentence correctly uses past tense to describe the effect of past lessons.

× I usually sing for about 30 minutes a day, often while I am studying or in the bathroom where the acoustics make my voice sound better and it cheers me up.

✓ I usually sing for about 30 minutes a day, often while I am studying or in the bathroom where the acoustics make my voice sound better and it cheers me up.

No grammar error listed applies. Sentence is grammatically correct; 'it cheers me up' correctly refers to singing.

× I usually sing for my parents because they always look so proud and excited when I perform.

✓ I usually sing for my parents because they always look so proud and excited when I perform.

No grammar error listed applies. Sentence is correct.

× I often do this at family gatherings and I especially like to sing old pop songs that they used to listen to.

✓ I often do this at family gatherings, and I especially like to sing old pop songs that they used to listen to.

Grammar problem type ID:16 Incorrect conjunction use (comma needed before 'and' joining two independent clauses). Added a comma to improve sentence structure.

× Actually, yes, when people think, they often feel at ease and even over the moon because music lets them forget about a hectic work schedule.

✓ Actually, yes, when people listen, they often feel at ease and even over the moon because music lets them forget about a hectic work schedule.

Grammar problem type ID:26 Sentence structure/word choice error. The verb 'think' is incorrect here; context requires 'listen' to music. Replacing it corrects meaning.

× The lessons were short but enjoyable.

✓ The lessons were short but enjoyable.

No grammar error listed applies. Sentence is correct.

× We learned simple songs together and sang with friends, and the lively atmosphere always made me feel relaxed and happy.

✓ We learned simple songs together and sang with friends, and the lively atmosphere always made me feel relaxed and happy.

No grammar error listed applies. Sentence is grammatically correct.

× I still remember those simple tunes and the fun we had in class.

✓ I still remember those simple tunes and the fun we had in class.

No grammar error listed applies. Sentence is correct.