Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答内容有针对性，但句子连贯性和语法需改进；避免重复并用连接词让表达更自然具体。建议把短句合并成一到两句，补充具体场景或原因。举例：先给主题句，然后用because/for example/for instance连接理由或场景，保持不超过五句。

예시: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me express my emotions and relax. For example, I often sing in the shower or at friends' birthday parties, which makes those moments more fun and lively.

제안: 回答能传达意思但语言重复且有语法错误。避免口语重复（"I will, I will"），用更自然的表达说明没有受过专业训练并补充具体情境。使用连词如 but/so 来连接对比和结果。

예시: No, I have never had professional singing lessons, but I enjoy singing casually. For instance, I often sing at home or when I’m relaxed, even though I haven’t received formal training.

제안: 回答结构清晰（列出几类人），但语言不够简练，有语法错误和冗余。建议用序列词（first/second/last）并用简洁句子说明原因和具体例子，注意时态和句子完整性。不要重复词语。

예시: I would like to sing for my parents first, because they have cared for me since childhood and I want to show my gratitude. Second, I would sing for my teachers to thank them for their guidance. Finally, I’d sing for my close friends when I’m facing difficulties, since their encouragement has helped me a lot.

제안: 观点明确但表述不够连贯，部分句子不完整且词汇使用不准确（如 'emerge others'）。建议先给主题句，然后用because/for example说明具体场景，确保句子完整并使用合适词汇如 'infect' 或 'create a festive atmosphere'。

예시: Yes, I believe singing can make people happy because it expresses joyful feelings and creates a festive atmosphere. For example, during Chinese New Year, lively music in shops often lifts people’s spirits and makes everyone feel enthusiastic.

제안: 态度表述直接但用词过于强硬（如 'I hate them'），语法错误明显。建议更礼貌和客观地表达个人偏好，使用连词对比优缺点，并给出具体原因或例子。避免评价朋友时使用冒犯性词汇。

예시: Yes, I enjoy listening to people who sing well because professional singers can convey emotion and technique. I also appreciate enthusiastic amateur singers, although I prefer clearer pitch and better control, which some of my friends may lack.

제안: 回答信息完整但有时态和用词小错误（如 'never look for' 应为 'never looked for'），口语化短句可合并以更自然流畅。建议说明具体课程内容或理由并用because连接，结尾可用一句总结。

예시: I took basic music classes in primary school, but I haven’t taken any formal singing lessons since then because I’m a bit tone-deaf and didn’t consider pursuing it seriously. However, I still enjoy singing for fun in the shower or at KTV.

× in many circumstances I try to sing for others or sing for myself such as taking a shower or going to others birthday.

✓ In many circumstances I try to sing for others or sing for myself, such as when taking a shower or going to others' birthdays.

“others birthday” 中的名词单复数和所有格错误。应使用复数形式 “birthdays” 并用所有格表示属于别人，写作 “others' birthdays”。此外在列举情境时加上连词如 “when” 更符合英语表达习惯。

× I think it is a method of. Expressing our emotions.

✓ I think it is a method of expressing our emotions.

句子被错误地分成两部分，使结构不完整。应将短语连成一个完整名词短语 “a method of expressing” 而不是断句。

× No, I haven't received a professional practice on singing, but I am keen on singing, so in many situations I will, I will, I will sing without any reasons.

✓ No, I haven't received professional training in singing, but I am keen on singing, so in many situations I sing without any reason.

“received a professional practice on singing” 用法不当，应为 “received professional training in singing”。“will, I will, I will sing” 在表达习惯性动作时不应使用将来式，改为一般现在时 “sing”。“without any reasons” 中“reasons” 应为不可数或单数，改为 “any reason”。

× Firstly, I want to sing for my parents for the reason that they have looked at looked after me for such a long time that I appreciate them very much.

✓ Firstly, I want to sing for my parents because they have looked after me for such a long time, and I appreciate them very much.

“for the reason that” 冗长且句子中有错别词 “looked at looked after”。应使用更自然的连接词 “because”。去掉多余的 “looked at”。并用逗号及连词连接句子使语义更清晰。

× Secondly, I'd like to sing for my teachers that give me a good education.

✓ Secondly, I'd like to sing for my teachers who gave me a good education.

用于指人的限定性从句应使用关系代词 who 而不是 that（虽可用但此处需注意时态）。句子主句为过去得到教育，故动词用过去式 “gave”。

× In result I I acquire many professional knowledge.

✓ As a result, I have acquired a lot of professional knowledge.

“In result” 用法错误，应为 “As a result”。“I I” 有重复。动词时态应为现在完成时 “have acquired” 表示到现在的影响；“many professional knowledge” 中 knowledge 是不可数名词，应使用 “a lot of” 或 “much”。

× Last but not least, I want to sing for my best friends when I face some difficulties. They encouraged me and cheer me up so I can.

✓ Last but not least, I want to sing for my best friends when I face some difficulties. They encourage me and cheer me up, so I can too.

句子时态混乱：“When I face” 是现在时，应与描述朋友通常行为保持一般现在时 “They encourage… and cheer me up”。“They encouraged” 是过去式，不一致。句尾 “so I can” 不完整，应加上 “too” 或改为完整表达 “so I can cheer them up too”。

× I think singing is the way of expressing our happy feelings, which can emerge others in an exciting atmosphere, you know, in the Chinese year.

✓ I think singing is a way of expressing our happy feelings, which can immerse others in an exciting atmosphere, you know, during Chinese New Year.

“the way of” 可改为更自然的 “a way of” 或 “a way to express”。“emerge others” 用词错误，应为 “immerse others”（使沉浸于）。时间短语 “in the Chinese year” 不自然，常用 “during Chinese New Year”。

× There are some happy music in the supermarket, everyone are enthusiastic.

✓ There is some happy music in the supermarket; everyone is enthusiastic.

“music” 是不可数名词，主语与动词应为单数，“There is”。“everyone” 虽指多人但语法上为单数，动词用 “is”。建议用分号或句号分开两分句以免混乱。

× When hearing the singing.

✓ When hearing the singing, people feel happy.

原句是片语，缺少主句，不能单独作为句子。应补全主句以表达完整意思，例如 “people feel happy” 或 “I feel happy”。

× Yes, but the others should have good singing skills.

✓ Yes, but others should have good singing skills.

“the others” 常指特定的另一群体，此处泛指 “其他人”，用 “others” 更自然。

× I am glad to hear some professional singer to sing all kinds of songs and I enjoy them very much.

✓ I am glad to hear some professional singers sing all kinds of songs, and I enjoy them very much.

“some professional singer” 数不一致，应使用复数 “singers”。不需要不定式 “to sing” 可直接用动词原形或将句子改为 “who sing”。

× However, some of my friends are lack of the singing skills their voice are. Bad and I hate them.

✓ However, some of my friends lack singing skills; their voices are bad, and I dislike them singing badly.

“are lack of” 语法错误，应为 “lack” 或 “are lacking in”。“the singing skills” 冠词不当且复数形式需对应，“their voice are” 主谓不一致，应为 “their voices are”。“Bad” 应与前句连接并调整表达，且 “hate them” 用词过强，可改为 “dislike them singing badly”。

× Yes, I had some basic music classes in primary school, but I never look for more singing lessons.

✓ Yes, I had some basic music classes in primary school, but I never looked for more singing lessons.

前半句使用过去时 “had”，后半句应与过去背景一致使用过去式 “looked for” 而不是现在式 “look”。

× Honestly, I'm a bit tone deaf so I've never seriously considered pursuing it.

✓ Honestly, I'm a bit tone-deaf, so I've never seriously considered pursuing it.

“tone deaf” 在作形容词修饰人时常用连字符 “tone-deaf”。此外在书面语中在两个并列分句间加逗号更清晰。