Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Pronunciation and word choice need correction (singing not seeing). Keep answer concise: give a clear topic sentence then one or two specific reasons with linking words. Reduce redundancy and grammatical errors. Use correct collocations (bring good mood → lift people's mood).

예시: Yes, I enjoy singing because it relaxes me and lifts my mood. For example, singing slow, soft songs after a busy day helps me calm down and feel happier.

제안: Correct vocabulary and grammar (learned how to sing; played piano; same teacher taught both). Structure answer: state when and where you learned, then give a brief specific detail about lessons. Use linking words like because or so.

예시: Yes, I learned to sing when I was in primary school. The same teacher taught both singing and piano, so I could practice singing while accompanying myself on the piano, which made learning more convenient.

제안: Make a clear topic sentence answering the question directly. Then explain your reason concisely using linking words. Correct word choices (sing, purpose, entertain, relax). Avoid long confusing phrases.

예시: I don't usually sing for a specific person; I sing mainly for my own enjoyment. In other words, my goal is to relax and entertain myself rather than to perform for others.

제안: Keep answer focused and factually simple. Avoid incorrect historical claims and unclear phrasing. State your opinion then give a concrete modern example or reason using linking words (for example, because, for instance).

예시: Yes, definitely. Singing can lift people's spirits because it releases endorphins and creates social bonds; for example, people often sing at celebrations or religious events to feel connected and happy.

제안: Improve clarity and reduce repetition. Answer directly, then give one specific effect with linking words. Use natural phrases (sing along, enjoy the atmosphere).

예시: Yes, I enjoy listening to others sing because I can appreciate their voice and also join in, which helps me feel part of a joyful, relaxed atmosphere.

제안: Clarify timeline and compare clearly using linking words (however, whereas). Correct word choices (more intensive, more professional, stricter teacher, vocal technique). Give one or two specific differences. Keep within 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I took singing classes in primary school and again in middle school. However, the middle school lessons were more intensive and professional, with a stricter teacher who focused on vocal technique and phrasing rather than just learning lyrics.

× Yes, I like seeing not only because seeing is an activity can do or we can enjoy in our daily life, but also it could bring people's good mood.

✓ Yes, I like singing not only because singing is an activity we can do or enjoy in our daily life, but also because it can lift people's mood.

Multiple errors: incorrect word 'seeing' instead of 'singing' (word choice, treated as sentence structure but falls under 26 Sentence structure errors), omitted relative pronoun and incorrect clause structure ('an activity can do' should be 'an activity we can do'), and awkward phrase 'bring people's good mood' should be 'lift people's mood'. Suggestion: use correct noun, include the subject for relative clause, and use natural collocations like 'lift mood' or 'make people feel good'.

× Some soft rhythm could make people feel more relaxed and entertaining.

✓ Some soft rhythms can make people feel more relaxed and entertained.

Present tense/predicate form: 'could' is acceptable but 'can' fits general truth; 'rhythm' should be plural when referring generally; 'entertaining' describes something that causes entertainment, but the intended state is 'entertained' (adjective). Use 'can' + plural noun + past participle adjective.

× Yes, I have learnt seeing in my primary school.

✓ Yes, I learned to sing in my primary school.

Tense and verb form: 'have learnt' is present perfect but context of schooling in past simple is better; 'seeing' is wrong word and should be 'to sing' (infinitive). Suggest using 'learned to sing' or 'learnt singing' depending on variety; here 'learned to sing' is clear.

× During that time I alert piano at the scene at the same time because there was the same teacher taught me both of the license.

✓ At that time I learned piano at the same place because the same teacher taught me both subjects.

Sentence structure and word choice errors: 'alert piano at the scene' is nonsensical; 'both of the license' is incorrect for 'both subjects' or 'both lessons'. Simplify: 'learned piano at the same place' and 'the same teacher taught me both subjects'.

× So it's really convenient for me to learn the piano and the scene together.

✓ So it was really convenient for me to learn piano and singing together.

Tense consistency: context is past ('in primary school') so use past 'was'. Word choice: 'the scene' should be 'singing'. Article use: 'learn piano' or 'learn the piano' both acceptable; here 'learn piano and singing together' or 'learn the piano and singing together'.

× I don't want to sing for any particular or some special person as the more than just saying to myself I the aim of my seeing or aim of the song I think is to entertainment and relax ourselves instead of just show to others.

✓ I don't want to sing for any particular person; more than anything, the aim of my singing, I think, is to entertain and relax ourselves rather than to show off to others.

Pronoun and structure errors: remove redundant 'some', fix clause order, and correct 'seeing' to 'singing'. Use 'aim of my singing' and verbs 'to entertain and relax' and phrase 'show off' for 'show to others'. Also punctuation to separate ideas.

× Yes, definitely. I think seeing could bring happiness and relaxment to people in the ancient time, not only in ancient region countries but also in some European countries like Rome and Greek, all of the Asian people are found their own way to.

✓ Yes, definitely. I think singing can bring happiness and relaxation to people since ancient times, not only in ancient regional countries but also in European countries like Rome and Greece; people across Asia also found their own ways to do this.

Tense and word form: 'could' -> 'can' for general truth; 'relaxment' -> 'relaxation'; 'ancient time' -> 'since ancient times'; 'Rome and Greek' -> 'Rome and Greece' (Greece is noun); sentence structure: split into two clauses and correct 'found their own way' to 'found their own ways'.

× Yes, I like it because when you hear someone surrounding you sing songs with you, you could not only get the could not only just to appreciate the song itself, but also the more important things that you can stick yourself into the happy and relaxed atmosphere.

✓ Yes, I like it because when you hear someone around you singing with you, you can not only appreciate the song itself, but more importantly immerse yourself in a happy and relaxed atmosphere.

Tense and form: 'surrounding you' -> 'around you'; 'sing songs with you' -> 'singing with you'; remove duplicate phrase 'could not only get the could not only just'; use 'can' for general truth; 'stick yourself into' -> 'immerse yourself in'. Simplify for clarity.

× Yes, I have ever taken same class when I was in my primary school.

✓ Yes, I took the same class when I was in primary school.

Past tense usage: 'have ever taken' is incorrect in this context; use simple past 'took' for a specific past time ('when I was in primary school'). Add article 'the' before 'same class'.

× The same class is quite different from the C group I attend in my middle school.

✓ That class was quite different from the C group I attended in middle school.

Tense and structure: maintain past tense 'was' and 'attended' because referring to past schools. Replace 'the C group I attend' with 'the C group I attended'.

× The sickness is quite more, is more professional and the teacher is more strict with me.

✓ The instruction was more advanced and more professional, and the teacher was stricter with me.

Incorrect word choice and comparative forms: 'sickness' is wrong (should be 'instruction' or 'training'); 'quite more' is ungrammatical — use 'more advanced' or 'much more'. Use comparative 'stricter'. Maintain past tense 'was'.

× Not only the lyrics but also the rising.

✓ Not only the lyrics, but also the pitch and vocal techniques were taught.

Sentence fragment and unclear noun 'rising' — restructure to complete sentence and use correct musical terms like 'pitch' or 'vocal techniques'.