Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答中表达了喜欢唱歌的原因，但用词不够准确，且句子结构稍显混乱。建议使用更自然的表达方式，并避免使用“its voice”这种不明确的指代。

예시: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helps me relax and improves my mood whenever I feel stressed or overwhelmed.

제안: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清的问题，如“business busy study licenses”不合适，且句子结构不够连贯。建议简化表达，使用正确的语法，并用连接词使句子更流畅。

예시: Actually, I haven't learned how to sing formally because I am very busy with my studies. However, I often listen to songs repeatedly to learn how to sing them better.

제안: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不清晰，且有重复词汇。建议简化句子，注意时态和语法，表达更自然。

예시: To be honest, I am shy to sing in front of others, so I usually sing only for myself, especially when I am taking a shower because it makes me feel relaxed and happy.

제안: 回答中有语法错误和重复表达，如“make me make people feel happier”，且“its beautiful voice”指代不明。建议使用更准确的表达，避免重复。

예시: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people because it allows them to express their emotions and feel joyful.

× I really enjoy singing because its voice is hard to resist and singing can lift my mood whenever I feel stressed or overwhelmed.

✓ I really enjoy singing because its voice is hard to resist and singing can lift my mood whenever I feel stressed or overwhelmed.

此句中“its voice”指代不明确，应该用“the voice of singing”或“the singer's voice”更合适，但根据题目要求只纠正列出的语法错误，故不修改。

× Because of the business busy study licenses, I seldom have time to learn how to sing.

✓ Because of the busy business study licenses, I seldom have time to learn how to sing.

“business busy”词序错误，应为“busy business”，但此处短语本身不通顺，建议改为“Because of my busy study and work schedule”更合适。

× I just listen to the singer and try to understand how they sing this song.

✓ I just listen to the singer and try to understand how he or she sings this song.

“they”作为单数代词使用不规范，应该用“he or she”或改为复数形式。

× I listen it over and over again so that I can sing it well.

✓ I listen to it over and over again so that I can sing it well.

动词“listen”后应接介词“to”，不能直接加宾语。

× I'm afraid to sing a song for any other people.

✓ I'm afraid to sing a song for other people.

“any other people”用法不当，直接用“other people”更自然。

× I always just sing for myself.

✓ I always just sing for myself.

此句语法正确，无需修改。

× For example I often thinking when I am take a shower it it it let me feel relaxed and happy.

✓ For example, I often think when I take a shower it lets me feel relaxed and happy.

“thinking”应为动词原形“think”，动词“am take”错误，应为“take”，主语和动词不一致，“it it it”多余，应删去，“let”应为第三人称单数“lets”。

× It's a good way to express people's emotion and make me make people feel happier.

✓ It's a good way to express people's emotions and make people feel happier.

“emotion”应为复数“emotions”，去掉多余的“me make”。

× Most of people really enjoy singing because its beautiful voice is hard to resist.

✓ Most people really enjoy singing because its beautiful voice is hard to resist.

“Most of people”应为“Most people”，去掉“of”。