Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to avoid grammatical errors and unclear pronouns. Instead of 'he sort of takes my stress away,' specify what 'he' refers to or rephrase. Also, combine sentences to avoid redundancy and improve fluency.

예시: Yes, I like singing because it helps relieve my stress and feels like a therapeutic experience.

제안: Avoid sentence fragments and improve sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, replace 'an.' with 'and' and clarify how listening helps.

예시: No, I haven't taken any singing classes, but I practice by watching YouTube videos and listening to music with lyrics, which helps me improve.

제안: Good direct answer with supporting details. To improve, use linking words to connect ideas and vary vocabulary to sound more natural.

예시: I mainly sing for myself because I don't enjoy singing in front of big crowds or even family and friends; I prefer to sing alone in my room.

제안: Work on grammar and clarity. Avoid informal contractions like 'cause' and correct sentence structure. Use linking words to contrast ideas clearly.

예시: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness, especially when singing uplifting songs. However, singing sad songs might lower your mood, while happy songs with a cheerful rhythm can lift your spirits.

× Yes, I do like singing. Because he sort of takes my stress away an I feel like by singing it is that of a therapeutic experience.

✓ Yes, I do like singing because it sort of takes my stress away and I feel like singing is a therapeutic experience.

The original sentence incorrectly starts a new sentence with 'Because', which is a conjunction and should connect clauses within a sentence. Also, 'he' is incorrect here and should be 'it' referring to singing. The word 'an' is a typo and should be 'and'. The phrase 'it is that of a therapeutic experience' is awkward and should be simplified to 'singing is a therapeutic experience' for clarity.

× No, I haven't taken any singing classes. I only practice through YouTube videos an. Listening to music with lyrics it helps me a lot, but I have not taken any classes.

✓ No, I haven't taken any singing classes. I only practice through YouTube videos and listening to music with lyrics; it helps me a lot, but I have not taken any classes.

The word 'an' is a typo and should be 'and' to correctly connect the two activities. Also, the sentence 'Listening to music with lyrics it helps me a lot' is a run-on and should be separated properly with a semicolon or period for clarity.

× Mainly for myself. I don't like big crowds and I don't like to sing for family or friends. I only sing for myself when I am in my room.

✓ Mainly for myself. I don't like big crowds, and I don't like to sing for family or friends. I only sing for myself when I am in my room.

A comma is needed before 'and' to properly connect the two independent clauses. The pronouns are used correctly here, but punctuation improves clarity.

× Yes, I do believe singing can bring happiness to people, especially when you are singing. Uplifting songs 'cause of course if using sad songs the is going to bring your mood down, but if you sing happy songs Anne happy rhythm is going to uplift your spirit.

✓ Yes, I do believe singing can bring happiness to people, especially when you are singing uplifting songs, because of course, if you use sad songs, it is going to bring your mood down, but if you sing happy songs and happy rhythms, it is going to uplift your spirit.

The sentence contains informal and incorrect conjunctions such as ''cause' which should be 'because'. The phrase 'if using sad songs the is going to bring your mood down' is missing the subject 'you' and has 'the' instead of 'it'. 'Anne' is a typo for 'and'. Correct conjunctions and proper sentence structure are necessary for clarity and grammatical correctness.