Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is a bit repetitive and unclear. Try to make your response more concise and structured by giving a clear topic sentence followed by specific reasons. Avoid repeating words and incomplete sentences.

예시: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me express my emotions and relieve stress, especially when I feel anxious or overwhelmed.

제안: Your answer lacks clarity and is incomplete. Try to give a direct answer first, then explain how you learned to sing with specific details. Avoid hesitations and incomplete thoughts.

예시: Yes, I have learnt how to sing using mobile apps like 'Smule', which provide various singing lessons and practice opportunities.

제안: Your answer is confusing and contains grammatical errors. Try to clearly state who you sing for and why, using simple and correct sentences. Avoid unnecessary details that do not relate directly to the question.

예시: I usually like to sing for my daughter to express my love and support for her during difficult times.

제안: Your answer is incomplete and unclear. Try to give a direct opinion first, then explain with specific reasons. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

예시: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness because it relieves stress and creates a joyful atmosphere for both the singer and the listeners.

× Yes, actually I like to sing a sing a song with my friends and actually singing is a fantastic way to show our emotions and relieve over emotions when we when we felt anxiety or or we suppressed with any feelings.

✓ Yes, actually I like to sing a song with my friends and actually singing is a fantastic way to show our emotions and relieve our emotions when we feel anxiety or when we are suppressed with any feelings.

The phrase 'relieve over emotions' is incorrect; it should be 'relieve our emotions' to correctly express possession. Also, 'when we felt anxiety' should be 'when we feel anxiety' to maintain present tense consistency. The repetition 'when we when we' is a redundancy and should be corrected. The verb 'suppressed' needs an auxiliary verb 'are' to form the passive voice correctly as 'we are suppressed'. These corrections improve clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× Yes, actually I learned how to sing using a mobile with many with many of the options nowadays.

✓ Yes, actually I have learned how to sing using a mobile with many options nowadays.

The use of simple past 'learned' is less appropriate here because the action has relevance to the present (using apps nowadays). Present perfect 'have learned' is better to indicate experience up to now. Also, 'with many with many of the options' is redundant; it should be 'with many options' for clarity.

× It's like a singing apps called AB called this mule, right?

✓ It's like a singing app called AB, called this mule, right?

The phrase 'a singing apps' is incorrect because 'apps' is plural and 'a' is singular. It should be 'a singing app'. The sentence is also unclear; possibly 'called AB, called this mule' is confusing and needs clarification, but based on instructions, only grammar errors are corrected here.

× I tried to sing an I learned, uh, I learned the way of singing in.

✓ I tried to sing and I learned, uh, I learned the way of singing.

The phrase 'I tried to sing an I learned' contains a typo 'an' which should be 'and'. The sentence ends abruptly with 'in' which is incomplete; removing 'in' corrects the sentence structure.

× Usually I like to sing for my daughter to show how I rise her and how I how I manage her with any of the struggles and how I how I give birth to her.

✓ Usually I like to sing for my daughter to show how I raise her and how I manage her through any struggles and how I gave birth to her.

The verb 'rise' is incorrect here; it should be 'raise' meaning to bring up a child. The phrase 'manage her with any of the struggles' is better expressed as 'manage her through any struggles' to use the correct preposition. Also, 'give birth to her' is a past event, so 'gave birth to her' is correct tense.

× Uh, usually when we sing, when we sing any song up for others or ourselves, that can be, uh, because the shelf will do relieve all our stress and, and also it brings as a, and also it brings us a biggest.

✓ Uh, usually when we sing any song for others or ourselves, it can relieve all our stress and also bring us happiness.

The phrase 'sing any song up for others' is incorrect; 'sing any song for others' is correct. 'Shelf will do relieve' is incorrect and unclear; it should be 'it can relieve'. The phrase 'it brings as a, and also it brings us a biggest' is incomplete and unclear; simplified to 'also bring us happiness' for clarity and correctness.