Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Améliorez la clarté et la fluidité de votre réponse en évitant les répétitions et en structurant vos phrases de manière plus naturelle. Utilisez des phrases simples et évitez les erreurs grammaticales pour rendre votre réponse plus compréhensible.

예시: Yes, I definitely love singing because it makes me feel happy and relaxed. I often sing at home, and it helps me express my emotions.

제안: Travaillez sur la cohérence et la précision de vos idées. Évitez les phrases confuses et les erreurs de vocabulaire. Utilisez des mots appropriés et organisez vos idées clairement pour que votre réponse soit plus naturelle et efficace.

예시: Yes, I have tried to learn singing many times. I enjoy singing because it relaxes me and makes me happy, although I still want to improve my skills.

제안: Clarifiez votre réponse en structurant vos phrases correctement et en utilisant un vocabulaire approprié. Évitez les erreurs grammaticales et les répétitions pour rendre votre réponse plus naturelle et facile à comprendre.

예시: I like to sing for anyone who asks me, especially my family and my best friends. Singing for them makes me feel connected and happy.

제안: Améliorez la structure de vos phrases et utilisez des mots plus précis pour exprimer vos idées. Évitez les erreurs grammaticales et les phrases trop longues pour rendre votre réponse plus claire et naturelle.

예시: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness because it allows people to express their emotions. It helps them feel relaxed and can also make those around them happy.

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✓ I often sing everywhere in my home and I am very happy when I sing. I really enjoy it.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'think' instead of 'sing' and has tense and structure issues. The corrected sentence uses the present tense 'sing' to describe habitual action and corrects the sentence structure for clarity.

× Of course, I've tried many times how to learn to sing and I think that I don't have to improve my singing because I already know how to sync and everybody wanted to hurt you.

✓ Of course, I've tried many times to learn how to sing and I think that I don't have to improve my singing because I already know how to sing and everybody wants to hear me.

The original sentence misuses 'sync' instead of 'sing' and 'wanted to hurt you' which is incorrect in context. The corrected sentence uses the correct verb 'sing' and changes 'wanted to hurt you' to 'wants to hear me' to make sense. Also, 'wants' agrees with 'everybody' (third person singular).

× Listen to me the singing and that's my challenge, I think, because it's very Rexel relaxing for me and makes me feel happy.

✓ Listening to me sing is my challenge, I think, because it's very relaxing for me and makes me feel happy.

The phrase 'Listen to me the singing' is incorrect. It should be 'Listening to me sing' to correctly use the gerund and infinitive forms. Also, 'Rexel' is corrected to 'relaxing'.

× I don't care who's the people I'm gonna sync for I just everyone who's gonna tell me to sing for I'm gonna sing for an especially my family and I'm going to sing for my best friend meeting.

✓ I don't care who the people are that I'm going to sing for. I will sing for everyone who asks me to, especially my family and my best friend's meeting.

The original sentence has incorrect pronoun use ('who's the people') and awkward phrasing. The correction clarifies the pronouns and sentence structure for better understanding.

× Of course, I believe that singing can bring happiness to people because when you think it gonna express your emotions is going to express your feelings and that's make you relaxing and happy and demyx that people all around you very happy too.

✓ Of course, I believe that singing can bring happiness to people because when you sing, it expresses your emotions and feelings, which makes you relaxed and happy and makes the people around you very happy too.

The original sentence misuses verb forms and has unclear phrasing. The correction uses the correct verb forms and clarifies the meaning, using 'sing' instead of 'think', and corrects 'that's make' to 'which makes'.