Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 你的回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，建议简化句子结构，避免重复和冗余，同时注意时态和词汇的正确使用。可以先直接回答问题，然后用具体例子支持观点。

예시: I don't like singing because I am tone-deaf and feel very shy in front of others. For example, when I sang in kindergarten, some children laughed at me, which made me feel embarrassed.

제안: 回答中有语法和表达不准确的问题，建议使用更自然的表达方式，注意时态一致，并且避免句子结构混乱。可以先直接回答问题，然后用具体细节丰富内容。

예시: Yes, I learned how to sing in primary school through music lessons twice a week. Our teacher taught us not only singing skills but also how to appreciate music. In high school, I continued attending singing classes once a week.

제안: 回答中有多处表达错误和重复，建议简洁明了地表达观点，避免语法错误和重复，同时使用连贯的句子结构。

예시: Although I'm not a good singer, if I had to sing for someone, I would choose my mother. Singing for her would be a special way to show my gratitude and love.

제안: 回答不完整且表达混乱，建议先明确观点，再用具体例子支持，注意句子完整和逻辑连贯。

예시: I think singing can bring happiness because it helps reduce stress and makes people feel relaxed. For example, when my sisters sing for my mom, it cheers her up and brings us closer together.

× I am a tone deafness.

✓ I am tone deaf.

这里“tone deafness”是名词，前面加了不定冠词“a”表示单数，但句子需要形容词来描述状态，正确表达是用形容词短语“tone deaf”。

× And the second reason is anti Willfield really shy when seeing in front of others.

✓ And the second reason is I feel really shy when singing in front of others.

原句中“anti Willfield”无意义，且缺少主语，应该用“I feel”来表达“我感到害羞”，并且“seeing”应改为“singing”符合语境。

× For example, in my kindergarten I sound in front of others but I feel really embarrassed because someone laughed and me.

✓ For example, in my kindergarten I sang in front of others but I felt really embarrassed because someone laughed at me.

描述过去发生的动作，动词应使用过去式，“sound”应为“sang”，“feel”应为“felt”，并且“laughed and me”应为“laughed at me”，加介词“at”。

× Of course I have learned how to sing when I was in primary school by hand music lessons twice a week.

✓ Of course I learned how to sing when I was in primary school by taking music lessons twice a week.

“have learned”与“when I was in primary school”时间状语冲突，应该用一般过去时“learned”。“by hand music lessons”表达不正确，应改为“by taking music lessons”。

× Over in high school, I continued to attend the middle class is a once a week.

✓ In high school, I continued to attend the music class once a week.

“middle class is a”表达错误，应为“music class”，且“once a week”前不需要冠词。

× Well, I I mentioned before I'm not a good Arab thing, but if someone asked me to sing for somebody, I will trust you for my mom.

✓ Well, as I mentioned before, I'm not good at singing, but if someone asked me to sing for somebody, I would trust myself to sing for my mom.

“Arab thing”无意义，应为“singing”。“I will trust you for my mom”表达错误，应该是“trust myself to sing for my mom”。

× Because I think it will be a special way for me to experience my gratitude for her, for her, and show my love for her.

✓ Because I think it will be a special way for me to express my gratitude to her and show my love for her.

“experience my gratitude”用词不当，应为“express my gratitude”。“for her”应改为“to her”，表达感谢的对象。

× As I think thing can bring happiness to people because it helps us reduce stress and make us feel more relaxed.

✓ I think singing can bring happiness to people because it helps us reduce stress and makes us feel more relaxed.

“thing”应为“singing”，且主语是单数，谓语动词“make”应改为“makes”。

× For example, when my sisters ink for my mom is not only chose her up but also make our relationships closer scene together can create a.

✓ For example, when my sisters sing for my mom, it not only cheers her up but also makes our relationships closer. Singing together can create a bond.

“ink”应为“sing”，“chose”应为“cheer”，“make”应为“makes”，主语和谓语要一致。句子不完整，补充完整表达。