Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make your answer more grammatical, concise and varied. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid repetition and correct verb forms and pronouns.

예시: Yes, I like eating chocolate because it cheers me up. For example, when I'm stressed after work I often have a small piece, which helps me relax. Because of that, I sometimes buy chocolate to keep at home.

제안: Answer directly with frequency expressions and give a specific example or routine. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid saying 'yes' to a how-often question.

예시: I eat chocolate several times a week. For instance, I usually have a small bar at home in the evenings, and when I go to a café I often order a chocolate dessert.

제안: Provide a clear past-tense response and a specific reason. Use correct grammar for negatives and refer to children generally. Add a short consequence or contrast if needed.

예시: No, I didn't eat much chocolate as a child because my mother thought it was unhealthy for kids. As a result, I only had chocolate on special occasions like birthdays.

제안: Give a clearer explanation with specific reasons and avoid vague or repetitive adjectives. Use linking words to list reasons and correct collocations (e.g., 'milky', 'sweet').

예시: I think chocolate is popular worldwide for several reasons: it's tasty, convenient, and can be made in many flavors. For example, its milky and sweet taste appeals to many people, and manufacturers also market it as a comforting treat.

제안: Use correct vocabulary (flavour, not flower) and give a brief reason with an example of how you choose chocolate. Keep it concise and natural.

예시: My favourite flavour is dark chocolate because I prefer less sweet treats. Therefore, when I buy chocolate I usually choose dark varieties with at least 70% cocoa.

제안: Answer directly and add a specific reason and one condition or alternative. Improve grammar and word choice (gifts, give).

예시: Yes, chocolate can be a good gift because many people enjoy it and it's easy to share. However, I would choose high-quality or specialty chocolates for gifts to make them feel more special.

× Yes I do eating chocolate, they usually give my mood.

✓ Yes, I do eat chocolate; it usually improves my mood.

The student used the progressive -ing form incorrectly after do for a habitual action. After the auxiliary do we use the base verb form (do eat). Also 'they' is incorrect pronoun for 'chocolate' (uncountable), and 'give my mood' is unnatural; use 'improves my mood'. Suggestion: use base verb after do, use singular/uncountable agreement, and choose appropriate verb 'improve'.

× Yes I do eating chocolate, they usually give my mood.

✓ Yes, I do eat chocolate; it usually improves my mood.

The pronoun 'they' refers to plural nouns but 'chocolate' is treated as uncountable or singular here, so use 'it'. Also adjust verb agreement accordingly. Suggestion: replace 'they' with 'it' when referring to chocolate generally.

× That's why I try to eat every day.

✓ That's why I try to eat it every day.

The sentence lacks a clear object; 'eat' needs an object when referring to chocolate. Add 'it' to clarify the referent. Suggestion: include pronoun 'it' or noun 'chocolate' after eat.

× That's why I buy some chocolate.

✓ That's why I buy some chocolate.

This sentence is acceptable, but 'some chocolate' is uncountable and fits the context. No change needed. Explanation: 'chocolate' can be used uncountably with 'some' to indicate an unspecified amount.

× It makes me feel much better.

✓ It makes me feel much better.

This sentence is correct present simple for habitual effect. No change needed.

× Yes, I often buy some chocolate.

✓ Yes, I often buy some chocolate.

Present simple 'often buy' correctly describes habitual action. No change needed.

× If I go to the restaurant, I just order some chocolate.

✓ If I go to a restaurant, I usually order some chocolate.

'Just' is unnatural here; 'usually' better expresses frequency. Use 'a restaurant' (general reference). Suggestion: use appropriate adverb of frequency and article 'a' for a general place.

× No, when I was a kid my mom didn't like to buy some chocolate because it is don't good for some child.

✓ No. When I was a kid, my mom didn't like to buy chocolate because it wasn't good for children.

Multiple errors: 'didn't like to buy some chocolate' is okay but 'some' unnecessary; use uncountable 'chocolate'. 'It is don't good' mixes tenses and negatives—use past simple 'wasn't good'. 'for some child' is incorrect pluralization and article use—use 'children' or 'a child'. Suggestion: keep past tense consistent and use correct negative 'wasn't', and use plural 'children' for general statements.

× I think that it is a very popular in old world because all chocolate is very milk and sweet and beautiful beautiful.

✓ I think that it is very popular around the world because most chocolate is milky, sweet, and attractive.

Errors: 'a very popular' incorrect article before adjective—remove 'a' or use noun. 'old world' is wrong context; use 'around the world'. 'all chocolate is very milk' uses wrong adjective form—'milky'. Repetition 'beautiful beautiful' unnecessary; use 'attractive' or 'pleasant'. Also 'all' is too absolute; 'most' is better. Suggestion: use correct adjective forms, remove duplicate words, and choose accurate quantifiers.

× I think that it is a very popular in old world because all chocolate is very milk and sweet and beautiful beautiful.

✓ I think that it is very popular around the world because most chocolate is milky, sweet, and attractive.

Using 'all' is too absolute; 'most' is more natural. Also 'a very popular' incorrectly uses article; adjust phrase structure. Suggestion: prefer 'most' when not all items are meant.

× That's why some people eat every day.

✓ That's why some people eat it every day.

The verb 'eat' needs an object when referring to chocolate; add 'it'. Also 'eat every day' without object is incomplete. Suggestion: include pronoun 'it' or explicit noun.

× My favorite flower is dark chocolate because I don't like sweet chocolate.

✓ My favorite flavor is dark chocolate because I don't like sweet chocolate.

The student wrote 'flower' instead of 'flavor' (word choice error). Use 'flavor' for taste. Suggestion: use correct vocabulary for food tastes.

× That's why when I buy some chocolate I prefer dark chocolate.

✓ That's why, when I buy chocolate, I prefer dark chocolate.

Minor punctuation and article: 'some chocolate' is acceptable but 'chocolate' without 'some' is more natural. Present simple 'prefer' correctly expresses a general preference. Suggestion: use commas to set off the subordinate clause.

× I suppose that it is good to use chocolate as gifts because some people like to eat chocolate.

✓ I suppose that it is good to give chocolate as a gift because some people like to eat it.

'Use chocolate as gifts' is awkward; better 'give chocolate as a gift'. Also 'gifts' plural with 'it' singular inconsistent—use singular form 'a gift' or plural consistently. Add pronoun 'it' after 'eat'. Suggestion: use natural collocations like 'give as a gift' and keep number agreement.

× When I want to buy something gives, I just buy chocolate.

✓ When I want to buy a gift, I just buy chocolate.

'something gives' is incorrect word order and word choice; use 'a gift'. The verb 'want to buy' requires a noun object—'a gift'. Suggestion: replace awkward phrase with 'a gift' and maintain correct object position.