Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: คำตอบของคุณควรใช้ไวยากรณ์ที่ถูกต้องและหลีกเลี่ยงการใช้คำซ้ำซ้อน เช่น 'I usually eating chocolate' ควรเป็น 'I usually eat chocolate' และ 'once I eating chocolate make me fresh' ควรเป็น 'eating chocolate makes me feel fresh' นอกจากนี้ควรจัดระเบียบประโยคให้ชัดเจนและเป็นธรรมชาติมากขึ้น

예시: I really enjoy eating chocolate because it helps me feel refreshed and relieved when I'm stressed or tired.

제안: ควรปรับปรุงการใช้ไวยากรณ์และคำเชื่อม เช่น 'I limit sugar intake to control my weight, so I allow myself to eat chocolate once a week' เพื่อให้ประโยคสมบูรณ์และชัดเจนมากขึ้น

예시: I usually eat chocolate once a week because I limit my sugar intake to control my weight.

제안: ควรใช้ไวยากรณ์ที่ถูกต้องและลดคำเติม เช่น 'once I were a kid' ควรเป็น 'when I was a kid' และ 'if I success to do something' ควรเป็น 'if I succeeded in doing something' รวมถึงจัดประโยคให้ลื่นไหลและชัดเจน

예시: Yes, when I was a kid, I often ate chocolate as a reward whenever I succeeded in doing something during the day.

제안: ควรปรับปรุงการใช้คำและโครงสร้างประโยคให้ถูกต้อง เช่น 'Chocolate is a popular dessert worldwide because it can be given as a gift to friends and family, helping to create connections when shared together.'

예시: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because it is a great gift to share with friends and family, which helps strengthen relationships.

제안: ควรปรับปรุงไวยากรณ์และความชัดเจน เช่น 'My favorite flavor is sweet because I like sweet things, and chocolate being sweet makes me feel refreshed and happier.'

예시: My favorite flavor of chocolate is sweet because I enjoy sweet tastes, and it always makes me feel refreshed and happy.

제안: ควรปรับปรุงการใช้คำและโครงสร้างประโยคให้ชัดเจนและถูกต้อง เช่น 'Yes, I think giving chocolate as a gift to family and friends is a good way to reconnect and share happy moments together.'

예시: Yes, I believe giving chocolate as a gift to family and friends is a wonderful way to reconnect and enjoy happy moments together.

× I usually eating chocolate and once I eating chocolate make me fresh and feel good.

✓ I usually eat chocolate and once I eat chocolate it makes me feel fresh and good.

The verb 'eating' is incorrectly used after 'usually'; the base form 'eat' should be used to indicate habitual action. Also, 'once I eating chocolate make me' is incorrect; it should be 'once I eat chocolate it makes me' to have proper subject-verb agreement and sentence structure.

× I would say one time per week because I limited sugar or dessert in a week so I allow to eat chocolate one time per week.

✓ I would say once a week because I limit sugar and desserts during the week, so I allow myself to eat chocolate once a week.

The modal verb 'would' is acceptable here, but 'limited' should be present tense 'limit' to indicate habitual action. Also, 'I allow to eat' is incorrect; it should be 'I allow myself to eat' to correctly use the reflexive pronoun with 'allow'.

× Yes I did. I ate chocolate uh, once I were a kid because, uh, every time if I success to do something in uh, in the day, I give my reward is chocolate and make me happy.

✓ Yes, I did. I ate chocolate when I was a kid because every time I succeeded in doing something during the day, I gave myself chocolate as a reward, and it made me happy.

The phrase 'once I were a kid' is incorrect; it should be 'when I was a kid' using past tense 'was'. 'If I success' should be 'if I succeeded' or 'when I succeeded' to use past tense. 'I give my reward is chocolate' is incorrect; it should be 'I gave myself chocolate as a reward'. 'Make me happy' should be 'made me happy' to maintain past tense consistency.

× My opinion, I think chocolate is the best dessert we can give us a gift to friend, to family and to make connection with this and eat together.

✓ In my opinion, I think chocolate is the best dessert; we can give it as a gift to friends and family to make connections and eat together.

The phrase 'My opinion' should be 'In my opinion' to use the correct preposition. 'Give us a gift to friend' is incorrect; it should be 'give it as a gift to friends'. 'Make connection with this' is unclear and should be 'make connections' or 'build connections'.

× My my favorite is sweet. I like everything sweet and especially chocolate is supposed to sweet 100% make me refresh and happier.

✓ My favorite is sweet. I like everything sweet, and especially chocolate is supposed to be 100% sweet, which makes me feel refreshed and happier.

'Chocolate is supposed to sweet' is missing the verb 'to be' and should be 'supposed to be sweet'. 'Make me refresh' is incorrect; it should be 'makes me feel refreshed'.

× Yes, I think it's good to give chocolate as a gift to family, to friends, yes to making re connect, connecting each other and sharing chocolate together and happy moment.

✓ Yes, I think it's good to give chocolate as a gift to family and friends to reconnect, connect with each other, share chocolate together, and enjoy happy moments.

'Yes to making re connect' is incorrect; it should be 'to reconnect'. The phrase 'connecting each other' should be 'connect with each other'. Also, 'happy moment' should be plural 'happy moments' to match the context.