Memory— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, reduce hesitations and repetitions, correct basic grammar (e.g., "forget" → "forget things", "I have a dreams" → "I had a dream"). Use one or two specific examples and link them with a brief explanation using linking words like "for example" or "however." Aim for 2–3 sentences only.

예시: No, I'm not good at memorising things. For example, I often forget my dreams by the time I wake up, although I sometimes remember small details like an animal I saw. This makes me rely on notes for important information.

제안: Organise the story with a clear topic sentence and chronological details. Eliminate fillers and correct tense and grammar (e.g., "I forget" → "I forgot", "I found after two months only" → "I only found it two months later"). Use linking words like "when" and "later" to make the narrative coherent. Keep it to 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I once forgot an important document. When I stayed at my aunt's house, I misplaced my character certificate and it slipped under the bed. I only found it two months later, which caused a lot of trouble when I needed it for work.

제안: Answer directly and use specific vocabulary related to your job. Correct grammar and word choice (e.g., "I run a hotel in my hometown"; "I need to remember which orders are ready and whether the meat is cooked"). Use linking words like "for example" and keep it within 2–3 sentences. Clarify unclear words (e.g., "Tommy"—do you mean 'tomorrow' or a person's name?).

예시: I run a small hotel in my hometown, so I need to remember daily tasks. For example, I must check which rooms need cleaning, whether the food orders are ready and if the meat is cooked, and prepare dishes and utensils for guests.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence and explain the method with precise language. Fix grammar (e.g., "I'm remembering" → "I remember" or "I now remember"; "one small notes" → "a small notebook"). Use linking words like "so" or "therefore" and include an example of how notes help you. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

예시: I remember important things by writing them in a small notebook. For instance, I write daily tasks and appointments so I don't forget them, and this method has helped me avoid missing important deadlines.

× No, I'm not good at memorizing things because I easily get forget, uh, for example, last night I have a dreams about like some kinds of like, uh, animals.

✓ No, I'm not good at memorizing things because I easily forget; for example, last night I had a dream about some kinds of animals.

The phrase 'get forget' is incorrect; 'forget' should be used alone in present simple ('I easily forget') to express a habitual tendency. 'I have a dreams' mixes present perfect with plural and is ungrammatical; the correct past simple for a specific past event is 'I had a dream'. Also 'some kinds of like, uh, animals' is redundant; simplify to 'some kinds of animals' or 'some animals'. Suggestion: Use 'I easily forget' for habits and 'I had a dream' for a single past event.

× But when I wake up in the morning, I easily forget what I remembered.

✓ But when I wake up in the morning, I easily forget what I remember.

Mixing past 'remembered' with present habitual 'wake up' is inconsistent. The student means a recurring situation, so use present simple 'remember'. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent for habitual statements: 'when I wake up... I forget what I remember'.

× But I remember like little things like about animals or any, some little kind of things.

✓ But I remember small details about animals or other little things.

'Like little things like about' is repetitive and ungrammatical. Use the quantifier 'small details' or 'little things' once and 'other' instead of 'any, some'. Suggestion: Simplify phrases and avoid repeated filler words.

× Uh, yes, or definitely I forget that important is my uh, character certificate, uh, when I was in my aunt home, I forget, uh, my all, all, I kept my, all my great seats, but I have lost my character certificate under the bed.

✓ Yes, I definitely forgot something important: my character certificate. When I was at my aunt's house, I misplaced it under the bed and only found it after two months.

Multiple tense and word-choice errors: 'I forget' should be past 'I forgot' for a past event. 'When I was in my aunt home' should be 'at my aunt's house'. 'I have lost' is present perfect but the action is completed in the past and aligns with 'found after two months', so use simple past 'I misplaced it' or 'I lost it'. Also 'my all, all, I kept my, all my great seats' is unintelligible and removed; likely meant 'I kept all my great seats' which is unclear. Consolidate into clear past-tense narrative. Suggestion: Use past simple for completed past events and standard phrases: 'forgot', 'at my aunt's house', 'misplaced'.

× So I found after two months only.

✓ I only found it after two months.

Word order is awkward; English prefers 'I only found it after two months' to place 'only' before the verb phrase for emphasis. Also include the object 'it' for clarity. Suggestion: Use correct word order and include necessary objects.

× So in my hometown I do my own business hotel, so I have to remember daily about on some of floor and meet whether meat is not prepared or not boiled.

✓ In my hometown I run my own hotel business, so every day I have to check some floors and see whether the meat is prepared or cooked.

Several structural errors and wrong word choices: 'do my own business hotel' should be 'run my own hotel business'. 'Remember daily about on some of floor' is ungrammatical; the intended meaning is 'check some floors daily'. 'Meet whether meat is not prepared or not boiled' is incorrect; use 'check whether the meat is prepared or cooked'. Suggestion: Use clear verbs ('run', 'check') and standard collocations ('hotel business', 'check floors', 'whether the meat is cooked').

× Also, I have to prepare some dishes and utensils for Tommy.

✓ Also, I have to prepare some dishes and utensils for the customers.

'Tommy' may be a wrong or unclear referent; likely intended 'tomorrow' or 'customers'. If the student meant 'tomorrow', use 'tomorrow' instead of 'Tommy'. If they meant guests/customers, use that noun. Pronoun/noun choice must match context. Suggestion: Clarify the intended referent: 'for tomorrow' or 'for the customers'.

× Or nowadays I'm remembering my important things by writing notes.

✓ Nowadays I remember important things by writing notes.

'I'm remembering' is a stative habitual action better expressed in simple present 'I remember'. Use simple present for regular habits. Suggestion: Use simple present for habitual actions: 'I remember' or 'I keep track of important things by writing notes'.

× Uh, so I have made one small notes and I am starting to write things that I that is very important to me and therefore I not usually get forget whenever I use this notebook.

✓ I have made a small notebook and I have started to write things that are very important to me, so I don't usually forget when I use this notebook.

Multiple errors: 'one small notes' mixes singular/plural — use 'a small notebook' or 'a small note'. 'I am starting' should be present perfect 'I have started' if beginning recently; present simple 'I have started' is acceptable. 'that I that is' is redundant; use 'that are very important'. 'I not usually get forget' is incorrect; use 'I don't usually forget'. Suggestion: Correct number agreement, use 'a small notebook', use 'don't usually forget' for negation in present simple, and fix relative clause agreement.