Memory— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be clearer and more grammatical. Start with a direct topic sentence, avoid fillers (“uh”, “umm”), correct tense and subject-verb agreement, and limit to 3–4 sentences. Use a linking phrase to contrast strengths and weaknesses (e.g., “however”).

예시: Yes, I am generally good at memorising things, especially when I am interested in the topic. However, I sometimes forget information if I don't review it regularly. For example, when I was younger I could memorise new vocabulary quickly by practising every day.

제안: Give a concise, coherent account with correct grammar and sequencing words. Use one or two specific examples, link them with connectors (e.g., “for instance”, “also”), and correct past tense forms.

예시: Yes, I have forgotten important things before. For instance, when I was in high school I missed a mathematics exam because I forgot the date. I have also once missed a flight due to a scheduling mistake.

제안: Answer directly and succinctly, using correct vocabulary and plural/singular forms. Use a linking word to explain why it matters (e.g., “because”) and give a brief example of how you remember it.

예시: I need to remember my work schedule because I sometimes work morning, afternoon or night shifts. This is important because arriving at the wrong time causes problems; for example, I always check my calendar the evening before to confirm the next day's shift.

제안: Provide a clear method with specific details and correct grammar. Use linking words (e.g., “first”, “then”) and precise timing (e.g., “24 hours before” or “one day before”). Avoid repetitions and fillers.

예시: I usually put important events in my calendar and set reminders. For example, I set an alert 24 hours before and another alert one hour before an appointment, which helps ensure I don't forget important tasks.

× But I also really quit at uh, forget something as well.

✓ But I also often forget things sometimes.

The original sentence uses incorrect verbs and pronouns ('quit at', 'forget something as well') that do not fit the intended meaning. Replace 'quit at' with an adverb like 'often' or 'sometimes' and change 'forget something' to the plural 'forget things' to match general habits. This fixes meaning and number agreement.

× I very good at umm, memorize some vocabulary when I was uh, younger.

✓ I was very good at memorizing vocabulary when I was younger.

The sentence mixes present form 'I very good' with a past time marker 'when I was younger.' Use the past tense 'was' and the gerund 'memorizing' after 'good at.' Also remove unnecessary fillers and use 'vocabulary' without 'some' for natural phrasing.

× Yes, I have so many, uh, chance that I forgot, uh, some special occasions, like when I was in high school, I forgot my uh, exam date and I didn't attend the mathematics uh, exam, and I also forget my flight.

✓ Yes, I have had many chances when I forgot special occasions. For example, when I was in high school I forgot my exam date and missed the mathematics exam, and I also missed my flight.

The original mixes present perfect ('I have') with incorrect noun choice ('so many chance') and inconsistent verb forms ('I forgot' vs 'I also forget'). Use 'have had many' to express experiences, change 'chance' to 'chances,' and use consistent past tense verbs ('forgot', 'missed') for completed events. 'Missed my flight' is the correct collocation.

× In my daily life right now, I have to, uh, remember my, uh, my working time because sometime I work in uh, morning shift, night shift or afternoon shift.

✓ In my daily life I have to remember my work schedule because sometimes I work the morning shift, the night shift, or the afternoon shift.

Use 'work schedule' or 'working hours' instead of 'working time.' 'Sometime' should be 'sometimes.' Include the definite article 'the' before shift names to sound natural. Remove repeated pronoun 'my, uh, my.'

× So I have to memorize my umm, working time all the time because sometimes I can make mis mistake.

✓ So I have to remember my working hours all the time because sometimes I can make mistakes.

'Memorize' is acceptable but 'remember' is more natural here. 'Working time' → 'working hours.' 'Mis mistake' is a duplication and should be 'mistakes' (plural) because it refers to errors in general. Use plural noun for general reference.

× The best way to remind me, uh, to remember the part important thing is uh, put it in the calendar in advance.

✓ The best way to help me remember an important thing is to put it in the calendar in advance.

'Remind me to remember' is redundant; use 'help me remember.' 'Part important thing' is incorrect word order; use 'an important thing.' Use the infinitive 'to put' after 'is.'

× UH-23 hours or sometime before the one, one day before it.

✓ For example, 23 hours before, or sometimes one day before it.

Original fragment is unclear and uses incorrect adverb placement. Use '23 hours before' and 'one day before it' to indicate timing. 'Sometime' → 'sometimes' if meaning occasionally; here 'sometimes' fits.

× It's helped me to remember it's important thing.

✓ It helps me to remember important things.

Use present simple 'helps' to describe a habitual effect. 'It's' (it is) helped is incorrect passive here. 'It's important thing' should be 'important things' (plural) or 'an important thing' and omit the contraction. Use natural collocation 'helps me remember.'