Memory— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and fluent: start with a clear topic sentence, reduce filler words (uh, umm), and give one or two specific examples of what helps you remember. Use linking words to connect ideas (however, although, therefore).

예시: Yes, I’m generally good at memorising things; however, I sometimes struggle with facts I find boring and need to repeat them several times. For example, when learning vocabulary I use flashcards and spaced repetition, which helps me retain words more reliably.

제안: Give a clear, chronological account with specific details and avoid hesitations. Begin with a topic sentence, then briefly describe what happened and what you learned, using linking words like because and since.

예시: Yes, I once forgot an important appointment because I was extremely busy and distracted. As a result, I rescheduled it quickly and, since then, I’ve used phone reminders and calendar alerts to avoid the same mistake.

제안: Be slightly more specific and reduce fillers. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give specific examples and a brief reason, linking them with words like for example and because.

예시: I need to remember important dates and appointments, such as birthdays, meetings and social events, because I’m quite forgetful. For example, I set calendar alerts on my phone a week and a day before each event to make sure I don’t miss them.

제안: Organise your answer with a clear topic sentence followed by concise supporting details and eliminate disfluencies. Explain briefly how each method helps and use linking words (for example, additionally). Correct unclear phrases (e.g., 'clear my mind' instead of 'sleep my mind').

예시: I usually rely on my phone by setting reminders and calendar alerts, and I also write important items in a notebook. For example, reminders notify me in advance, while writing things down helps me remember tasks when I’m busy.

× Yes, once forgetting an important appointment because I was extremely busy and I had a lot on my mind and I fairly, umm, quickly could manage that appointment and uh, I did it.

✓ Yes, once I forgot an important appointment because I was extremely busy and had a lot on my mind, but I managed to reschedule it fairly quickly.

The original uses 'forgetting' which is a gerund where a past simple verb is required to describe a specific past event. Use past simple 'forgot' to narrate the past action. Also 'could manage that appointment and I did it' is awkward; use 'managed to reschedule it' for clarity and correct past-tense narration. Suggestion: Use past simple for completed past events and simplify redundant phrases.

× I find them boring and I should repeat them, umm, several times.

✓ I find memorizing things boring and I have to repeat them several times.

The pronoun 'them' is unclear because the verb 'memorizing' is the action being described; clarify the noun and use 'have to' instead of 'should' to express habitual necessity. 'Should' can indicate advice; 'have to' indicates necessity which fits the context better. Suggestion: Replace vague pronouns with the specific noun and choose the appropriate modal/phrase for habitual necessity.

× But umm, usually I remember things I need to umm, easily.

✓ But usually I easily remember the things I need to.

Word order is awkward; place adverb 'easily' before the verb for natural English or after auxiliary. Also add 'the' before 'things' to specify which things are meant. Suggestion: Use natural adverb placement and include articles where needed.

× Yes, I'm fairly good at memorizing things, uh, but sometimes I have struggled to, uh, memorize things.

✓ Yes, I'm fairly good at memorizing things, but sometimes I struggle to memorize them.

Using 'have struggled to' suggests a present perfect continuous meaning that conflicts with 'sometimes' habitual frequency; simple present 'struggle' fits habitual actions. Also change final 'memorize things' to 'memorize them' to avoid repetition. Suggestion: Use simple present for habitual actions and avoid repetition by using pronouns appropriately.

× But since that I started using reminders.

✓ But since then I started using reminders.

Use 'since then' to refer to time from that point onward. 'Since that' is incorrect. Note: 'I started using reminders' is past; with 'since then' it may be better to say 'I have used reminders since then' if emphasizing from then until now. Suggestion: Use 'since then' for a reference to time; consider present perfect if action continues to present.

× I need to keep track of important umm dates and appointments like birthdays and uh, parties because I can be quiet forgetful.

✓ I need to keep track of important dates and appointments like birthdays and parties because I can be quite forgetful.

This contains a spelling/word-choice error: 'quiet' should be 'quite'. This is not in the original list by ID, but it affects correctness; treated here as incorrect use of adjectives/adverbs (ID 13). 'Quite' is the correct adverb to modify 'forgetful.' Suggestion: Use 'quite' for degree; proofread for commonly confused words.

× Umm, These things help me to stay organized and make sure, uh, sleep my mind.

✓ These things help me stay organized and keep these things in my mind.

Several problems: 'These' should be lowercase in the middle of a sentence. 'make sure, uh, sleep my mind' is ungrammatical; likely intended meaning is 'keep them in my mind' or 'clear my mind.' This is corrected to 'keep these things in my mind.' This falls under sentence structure errors (ID 26) and article/capitalization issues (ID 22). Suggestion: Rephrase unclear idioms to standard expressions such as 'keep in my mind' or 'clear my mind' depending on intended meaning.

× Sometimes I rely on my phone and I use, uh, reminders and set them, or, umm, I use my calendar, uh, or sometimes I write it down in my notes.

✓ Sometimes I rely on my phone: I set reminders, use my calendar, or write it down in my notes.

The original mixes verb forms and is repetitive. Use parallel verb forms ('set', 'use', 'write') for clarity. Also change 'write it down in my notes' to 'write things down in my notes' for agreement with plural 'reminders' or 'things.' Suggestion: Use parallel structures and ensure verbs are in the same form for a list of actions.