Memory— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 整体回答流利且内容相关，但存在语法、重复和断句问题，影响自然度与连贯性。建议：1) 精简句子，避免重复（如 'very proud of it' 与 'really helped me so much'）；2) 修正语法和搭配（memorising/memorizing skills → memorization or good memory）；3) 使用连接词使论述更连贯（for example, however, therefore）；4) 控制在最多5句并包含主题句和一到两条具体细节。练习时可先构思1句主题句+2句具体例子。

예시: Yes, I have a good memory. For example, when I started studying legal subjects I was overwhelmed by detailed regulations, but my good memory helped me remember key rules and case facts. As a result, I learned new topics more quickly and felt more confident in class.

제안: 回答有具体事件，内容贴切，但句子断裂、时态与语法错误较多，影响表达清晰度。建议：1) 使用过去时描述过去经历并注意句子完整（e.g. 'I couldn't find my passport'）；2) 删除多余表述并合并短句以增强流畅性；3) 增加一条感受或结果的具体细节（how you solved it, what you learned）；4) 注意情态动词和语序。

예시: Yes, once I almost missed a flight because I couldn't find my passport on the way to the airport. I was very nervous and checked my bag repeatedly, but luckily I found it in a coat pocket just in time. Since then I always put my passport in a designated travel pouch.

제안: 内容涵盖工作与个人生活，但重复冗长，句子结构混乱，影响表达效果。建议：1) 开头用一句主题句概括主要内容；2) 用两到三条简洁具体的例子说明（工作细节、家庭安排、宠物照顾）；3) 使用连接词（for example, besides）并避免重复表达；4) 控制句子数量与长度，使表达更自然。

예시: I need to remember both professional and personal tasks. For example, at work I must remember case deadlines and key evidence, and at home I keep track of my dog's feeding schedule and appointments for my parents. To manage these, I use a calendar and reminders on my phone.

제안: 回答结构清晰并给出工具方法，但有冗余与重复（'To Do List'和手机/笔记本重复表达），用词可以更地道。建议：1) 开头一句直接回答并概述方法；2) 用一两句具体说明如何使用这些工具（例如设置 reminders, prioritizing tasks）；3) 避免重复并用更自然表达（take notes / keep a to-do list）；4) 保持句数在3-4句内。

예시: I usually rely on my phone and a personal notebook to remember important tasks. I make a prioritized to-do list, set reminders for deadlines, and review the list each morning so nothing is missed.

× I am very proud of it.

✓ I am very proud of that.

此处并非现在分词问题，而是代词使用不当。原句中的 it 指代不明确或不自然，用 that 更恰当以指代前文提到的记忆能力。请在类似句子中使用明确的代词指代（例如 that 或 this）。

× it helps me so much in learning new different new skills.

✓ it helps me so much in learning different new skills.

原句中有重复的形容词“new different new”，用词冗余且顺序不当。应删除重复并按自然顺序排列形容词（例如 different new skills 或 new and different skills）。建议简化为“different new skills”或“new and different skills”。（简体中文建议：避免形容词重复，按语义选择一个或用“and”连接。）

× For example, when I started to learn about legal studies, I was initially bothered about the. Detailed regulations.

✓ For example, when I started to learn about legal studies, I was initially bothered about the detailed regulations.

原句被不恰当地断句，导致句子结构被打断并出现大写的孤立名词“Detailed”。应将定冠词和名词连在一起，形成完整名词短语“the detailed regulations”。（简体中文建议：注意不要在句中随意断句，确保限定词和被限定词相连。）

× my good memorizing things skills helped me to remember them in detail.

✓ my good memorization skills helped me to remember them in detail.

“memorizing things skills”结构不正确且啰嗦。应使用名词形式“memorization”并将修饰语放在前面，形成“memorization skills”。（简体中文建议：使用恰当的名词或形容词短语，如“memorization skills”而不是“memorizing things skills”。）

× For me. It was already awkward and embarrassed experience.

✓ For me, it was an awkward and embarrassing experience.

原句有错误的标点和形容词形式。应合并为一个句子并使用不定冠词“an”；形容词“embarrassed”描述人的感受，形容经历应使用“embarrassing”。（简体中文建议：注意标点不要断开短句，区分“embarrassed”和“embarrassing”的用法。）

× I was on the way to the airport.

✓ I was on my way to the airport.

固定短语为“on my way to ...”，需加物主代词“my”。（简体中文建议：记住固定搭配“on my way to”表示在前往某地的途中。）

× I found I can't find my passport.

✓ I found I couldn't find my passport.

前句叙述为过去时（I found），后句应使用过去时态一致性（couldn't）。此外“can't”是现在时，时态不一致。 （简体中文建议：在叙述过去发生的事情时，保持动词时态一致。）

× I was really nervous because I was worried about I couldn't catch the airplane.

✓ I was really nervous because I was worried I couldn't catch the plane.

从句中不需要介词“about”并且“airplane”通常简化为“plane”。另外时态使用“couldn't”与过去时一致。问题主要为多余介词和词汇选择。 （简体中文建议：不要在“worried”后加“about”再接从句，直接接宾语从句或用“worried about + 名词短语”。）

× Finally I found it in my bag, so it reminds me that we always have to take our passport carefully.

✓ Finally I found it in my bag, so it reminded me that we always have to take our passports with us.

时态应与前句过去完成一致，使用“reminded”。“passport”应为复数“passports”或用“your passport”更自然；“take carefully”搭配不恰当，常用“take with us”。（简体中文建议：保持时态一致，注意可数名词的单复数与搭配短语。）

× As a qualified lawyer in Taiwan, I have to deal with many litigation and non litigation matters every day.

✓ As a qualified lawyer in Taiwan, I have to deal with many litigation and non-litigation matters every day.

“non litigation”应连字符或合并为“non-litigation”。除此之外“litigation matters”本身可数，句子结构需用连字符表述复合形容词。 （简体中文建议：复合形容词如“non-litigation”用连字符连接。）

× Among these matters there are many details to be studied and I have to remember all these details every day.

✓ Among these matters, there are many details to be studied, and I have to remember them every day.

句子可更简洁；添加逗号并用代词“them”避免重复“details”。（简体中文建议：避免不必要重复，使用代词替代前文提到的名词。）

× Besides this I have to take. Take care of my dog, my parents and my girlfriend.

✓ Besides this, I have to take care of my dog, my parents and my girlfriend.

原句被不恰当地断句并重复“Take”。应合并为一句并移除重复。 （简体中文建议：注意不要在动词短语中间随意断句或重复动词。）

× So I need to remember all these details every day. To care, to take care of all the things. Great.

✓ So I need to remember all these details every day — to care for and take care of all these things.

原句断裂且表达不完整，“To care, to take care of all the things.”不是完整句子。应合并并用并列结构使之完整。 （简体中文建议：确保不定式短语作为句子补充时与主句连贯，避免残句。）

× I remember important things by taking notes in my smartphone or personal notebook.

✓ I remember important things by taking notes on my smartphone or in my personal notebook.

搭配错误，“take notes on”更常用来表示在设备上记笔记，且“in my personal notebook”需加介词“in”。（简体中文建议：记忆常见搭配，如“take notes on/ in”。）

× I am very busy every day to study the cases of litigation or non litigation matters because there are many details to be studied carefully.

✓ I am very busy every day studying the cases of litigation or non-litigation matters because there are many details to be studied carefully.

不定式“to study”在此处不自然，改为现在分词“studying”更符合“busy ... studying”的固定结构；并将“non litigation”改为“non-litigation”。（简体中文建议：使用“busy + -ing”结构表示忙于做某事。）

× And in the meantime I have to prepare the IELTS test, so I list all the To Do List in my smartphone and notebook so that I can track them and prepare for them well.

✓ And in the meantime I have to prepare for the IELTS test, so I list all the items on my to-do list in my smartphone and notebook so that I can track them and prepare well.

短语“prepare the IELTS test”应为“prepare for the IELTS test”。“list all the To Do List”重复且不正确，应该是“list all the items on my to-do list”。此外“prepare for them well”冗余，改为“prepare well”。（简体中文建议：注意动词搭配“prepare for”，避免重复名词短语，使用固定搭配“items on my to-do list”。）