Memory— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct minor errors (e.g., 'specially' → 'especially'). Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific brief example and use a linking phrase. Avoid filler sounds like 'uh'.

예시: Yes, I'm good at memorising things, especially when I'm interested in the topic. For example, I learned key vocabulary by repeating words and linking them to pictures, so I can recall them quickly during conversations.

제안: Correct verb tense errors and make the sequence clear. Use a linking word to show consequence and give a specific detail about the change you made. Keep it to two or three sentences.

예시: Yes, I have. For instance, I once missed an assignment deadline because I was busy with other work, and I felt very stressed as a result. Since then, I record all deadlines in my phone calendar and set alerts to avoid that happening again.

제안: Avoid filler words and correct word choice errors (e.g., 'airlines' → 'appointments' or 'deadlines'). Group related items and use a linking phrase to organise the list. Limit to three short sentences max and be specific about examples.

예시: I need to remember several daily things, such as my class schedule, assignment deadlines and appointments. In addition, I try to remember small tasks like replying to important messages and bringing my student ID or wallet when I go out.

제안: Remove awkward phrasing ('where which') and combine similar ideas to avoid repetition. Use a linking word to explain effectiveness and give a concrete example of a reminder type. Keep it within three sentences.

예시: I usually write important items in my phone and set calendar reminders, which helps me avoid forgetting deadlines. I also repeat key information aloud when studying, for example repeating an exam date and its tasks twice a day so it stays fresh in my memory.

× Yes, I'm quite good at memorising things, specially when I'm interested in the topic.

✓ Yes, I'm quite good at memorising things, especially when I'm interested in the topic.

The word 'specially' is an adjective meaning 'for a special purpose'; the adverb 'especially' should be used to mean 'particularly' or 'above all'. Replace 'specially' with 'especially' to convey the intended meaning.

× I felt really stressed when I remember it.

✓ I felt really stressed when I remembered it.

The main clause is in the past tense ('I felt'), so the subordinate clause should also use past tense. 'Remember' is present; change to past 'remembered' to maintain consistent past-time reference.

× I try to keep important dates in my phone.

✓ I try to keep important dates on my phone.

Use the preposition 'on' with devices like 'phone' to indicate stored items or reminders. 'In my phone' is less natural in this context.

× I need to remember quite a few things in my daily life, especially uh, my class schedule, assignments and important airlines.

✓ I need to remember quite a few things in my daily life, especially, uh, my class schedule, assignments and important dates.

The word 'airlines' does not fit contextually; likely the student meant 'dates' or 'deadlines'. Also ensure parallelism: 'class schedule, assignments and important dates' are all items to remember. This fixes the singular/plural/contextual error.

× I also need to remember a small tasks like replying to messages and bringing necessary things when I go out.

✓ I also need to remember small tasks like replying to messages and bringing necessary things when I go out.

The phrase 'a small tasks' mixes singular article 'a' with plural 'tasks'. Remove 'a' to match plural 'tasks', or change to 'a small task' if singular. Here plural fits the examples given.

× I also repeat important information a few times where which helps me remember it more easily.

✓ I also repeat important information a few times, which helps me remember it more easily.

The clause contains an incorrect relative connector 'where which'. Use the relative pronoun 'which' with a comma to refer to the preceding clause. Removing 'where' yields a grammatical sentence.

× This is especially useful for assignments, exams and any kind of appointments.

✓ This is especially useful for assignments, exams, and any kind of appointment.

Either keep plural for parallelism ('appointments') or use singular 'appointment' with 'any kind of'. The original mixes 'any kind of' with plural 'appointments', which is less natural. Also add a serial comma for clarity.