Memory— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and grammatical: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid incorrect phrases (e.g. "I'm not going to add memorizing things") and errors in tense/number. Use vocabulary like "remember," "memorize," and "vocabulary" correctly.

예시: Not really. I’m not very good at memorizing vocabulary, so I don’t remember new words immediately. However, I try to understand the meaning and use new words in sentences to help me remember.

제안: Answer directly with a clear example and one reason, using linking words (e.g., "because", "so"). Avoid vague or repeated phrases like "my brain is always full" without context. Mention a specific item or event you forgot and how you handled it (e.g., using notes).

예시: Yes, I once forgot an important meeting because I was juggling many tasks. Because my schedule was full, I missed the time, so now I always set calendar reminders and take notes to avoid this.

제안: Begin with a clear topic sentence stating the main thing you need to remember, then give specific examples of tasks. Use linking phrases like "for example" or "such as". Correct job-related vocabulary (e.g., "editor", "tasks", "proofread/correct"). Keep to 2–3 concise sentences.

예시: I need to remember work-related tasks because I work as an editor. For example, I must remember deadlines, which articles to proofread, and client requests so that I can prioritize my day.

제안: Start with a clear method statement, then give specific details and a reason. Use correct collocations like "take notes" and avoid filler phrases such as "you know". Explain how your method helps memory (e.g., reviewing notes, using apps or reminders).

예시: I usually take notes to remember important things. For instance, I write tasks in a small notebook I bought and review it every evening, and I also set phone reminders for deadlines.

× No, I'm not going to add memorizing things because.

✓ No, I don't try to memorize things.

The original mixes 'I'm not going to add memorizing things' which is unnatural and uses 'memorizing' incorrectly. The speaker intends a present habitual ability, so use simple present 'I don't try to memorize' or 'I don't memorize.' Use 'memorize' (base form) after 'try to.' Also remove unnecessary 'add' and trailing 'because.' Suggestion: say 'No, I don't try to memorize things.'

× I'm don't have enough vocabularies so I don't remember immediately, but I try to understand the meaning and.

✓ I don't have enough vocabulary, so I don't remember immediately, but I try to understand the meaning.

'I'm don't' is ungrammatical (subject and auxiliary conflict). Use 'I don't.' 'Vocabularies' is incorrect: 'vocabulary' is an uncountable noun referring to word knowledge. Remove the trailing conjunction 'and.' Also add a comma before 'so.' Suggestion: 'I don't have enough vocabulary, so I don't remember immediately, but I try to understand the meaning.'

× Yes, of course I have because I my brain is always full, fulfilling because I should memorize all of things. But I take notes.

✓ Yes, of course I have because my brain is always full; I feel like I should memorize everything. But I take notes.

Remove extraneous 'I' and correct sentence flow. 'Full, fulfilling' is incorrect; use 'full' or 'I feel like.' 'All of things' should be 'everything.' Use present simple 'my brain is always full' and 'I should memorize everything.' Semicolon or conjunction improves sentence structure. Suggestion: 'Yes, of course I have because my brain is always full; I feel like I should memorize everything. But I take notes.'

× I think it uh, working things because I work as an editor in the company.

✓ I think it's about work-related things because I work as an editor at a company.

Use 'it's' (it is) to introduce the topic. 'Working things' is unnatural; 'work-related things' or 'work tasks' is clearer. Use preposition 'at a company' or 'for a company' rather than 'in the company' unless specifying a particular company. Also remove filler 'uh.' Suggestion: 'I think it's about work-related things because I work as an editor at a company.'

× I have to describe a a lot of my tasks and, uh, I correct my.

✓ I have to describe a lot of my tasks, and I edit my work.

Duplicate 'a a' should be removed. 'Describe a lot of my tasks' is acceptable though 'describe many of my tasks' could also work. The clause 'I correct my.' is incomplete; likely intended 'I edit my work' or 'I correct my writing.' Use 'edit' or complete the object. Suggestion: 'I have to describe a lot of my tasks, and I edit my work.'

× I often take no take notes because I recently bought a new type of, you know, notebooks, which is very lovely, so I definitely memorize.

✓ I often take notes because I recently bought a new kind of notebook that is very nice, so I can remember things better.

'Take no take notes' is ungrammatical; use 'take notes.' 'Type of notebooks' is awkward—'kind of notebook' or 'type of notebook' (singular) fits. 'Which is very lovely' is acceptable but 'that is very nice' is more natural. 'So I definitely memorize' is wrong: use 'so I can remember things better' to express improved memory. Ensure verb forms and objects are complete. Suggestion: 'I often take notes because I recently bought a new kind of notebook that is very nice, so I can remember things better.'