Memory— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more direct and expand slightly with a brief example or reason. Use one topic sentence and one supporting detail, avoid unnecessary phrasing like "to be honest" unless emphasizing. Also correct small grammar (memorising -> memorizing is fine in US spelling, but be consistent).

예시: No, I'm not very good at memorizing things. For example, because my daily schedule is hectic and I have many tasks, I often forget small details unless I write them down.

제안: Structure the answer with a clear topic sentence then a concise supporting detail. Use linking words for coherence and correct small grammar ("in a hurry" not "in hurry"). Try to limit to two sentences for clarity.

예시: Yes, I have. Last week my father asked me to give money to my younger brother for his school fees, but I forgot because I was in a hurry to get to my institute. As a result, I had to call my father later to sort it out.

제안: Make the response more concise and use specific examples with correct grammar and linking phrases. Use parallel structure and avoid vague phrases like "the whole work there" or "all the instruction". Limit to maximum five sentences.

예시: I need to remember several specific things every day: arriving at my institute on time, completing the assignments given in class, and remembering important instructions from my teachers. For example, today I had to remember to submit a homework exercise and to bring my textbook.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence and one or two specific supporting details or an example. Improve grammar ("an important thing", "save it on my mobile so the next time I use it I remember"). Use linking words to show cause and effect.

예시: I usually write a quick note on my mobile to remember important things, so when I check my phone later I see the reminder. For instance, I saved a note to pay a bill and the notification helped me remember it on time.

× But as I was in hurry to reach my institute then I forgot it.

✓ But as I was in a hurry to reach my institute, I forgot it.

Missing article before 'hurry' and redundant 'then'. Use 'in a hurry' and a comma for clarity. Remove 'then' because past sequence is clear.

× In my daily life I have to remember a lot of things such as reaching my institute timely, doing the whole work there, memorize the things which my teacher taught me and all the instruction which are important.

✓ In my daily life I have to remember a lot of things such as reaching my institute on time, doing all the work there, memorizing the things my teacher taught me, and all the instructions that are important.

Mixed verb forms: use parallel -ing forms (reaching, doing, memorizing). 'Timely' is better as 'on time'. 'Whole work' is unnatural; use 'all the work'. Use plural 'instructions' and 'that' instead of 'which' for essential clause clarity.

× When I have to remember a important thing, I usually make a note of it and save it on my mobile as the next time when I use my mobile I quickly remember it.

✓ When I have to remember an important thing, I usually make a note of it and save it on my mobile, because the next time I use my mobile I quickly remember it.

Use 'an' before a vowel sound: 'an important'. Combine clauses with 'because' and remove redundant 'when' for natural flow. Also added a comma before the conjunction for readability.

× To be honest, I'm not good at memorizing things due to my hectic schedule.

✓ To be honest, I'm not good at memorizing things because of my hectic schedule.

Replace 'due to' with 'because of' for correctness in this context: 'due to' often follows a form of 'be' and modifies nouns; 'because of' correctly links to verb phrase explaining reason.

× Well yes, it happened to me last week when my father told me to give some money to my younger brother as he had to submit his school fees.

✓ Well yes, it happened to me last week when my father told me to give some money to my younger brother because he had to pay his school fees.

Use 'because' for reason clarity and 'pay his school fees' is more natural than 'submit his school fees'. The past tense 'had to' is correct; adjust verb choice for natural English.

× ...and all the instruction which are important.

✓ ...and all the instructions that are important.

'Instruction' should be plural 'instructions' to match 'all'. Also 'that' is preferable for defining clauses; 'are' remains correct but plural noun is required.