Memory— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and structured: start with a direct topic sentence (Yes/No or It depends), then give one clear reason and one brief example. Reduce hesitations and grammatical errors (use full sentences and correct verb forms). Use linking words like “because” or “so” to connect ideas.

예시: It depends. I can remember things well when I am interested in them because my attention is higher; for example, I remember details of hobbies but I often forget boring tasks.

제안: Give a clear past-tense narrative with correct details and avoid confusing phrases. Start with a simple topic sentence (Yes, I have), then briefly describe what happened, how you felt, and what you learned. Correct pronouns and times (mother's age or which birthday) and avoid fragmented sentences.

예시: Yes, I have. Two years ago I forgot my mother's birthday because I spent the whole day playing video games. I felt very sorry and promised myself to plan reminders for important dates in the future.

제안: Answer directly and add one or two specific examples. Use plural/singular correctly and a linking word to expand. Keep it within 3–4 clear sentences.

예시: I need to remember meetings and deadlines. For instance, I note group meetings, conference dates and assignment deadlines in my notebook so I don't miss them.

제안: State your main method clearly and give one specific detail about how you use it. Avoid redundant phrases and correct collocations (take notes, write by hand). Use a linking phrase to add a short example.

예시: I usually take notes by hand in a small notebook. For example, I write down meeting dates and short action points, and I review the notes each evening to make sure I don't forget anything.

× Well, to be well, it depends on the things, whether I am interested in, umm, for example, if uh, activity which is very boring and I would like to forget about it.

✓ Well, to be honest, it depends on the thing and whether I am interested in it. For example, if an activity is very boring, I would like to forget about it.

Errors: misuse of 'well' and 'to be well' (word choice), plural mismatch 'things' vs singular reference, incorrect clause order and missing 'it' after 'interested in', missing article 'an' before 'activity', incorrect verb form 'which is' used awkwardly. Suggestions: Use 'to be honest' for clarity, match singular/plural references, include necessary pronouns ('it'), add articles (a/an), and use standard clause order 'if an activity is very boring'.

× If uh, activity I'm participating in and very interesting, so I would like to remember it deeply in my heart.

✓ If an activity I am participating in is very interesting, I would like to remember it deeply in my heart.

Errors: missing article 'an' before 'activity', incorrect word order ('activity I'm participating in and very interesting'), and unnecessary comma plus conjunction 'so'. Suggestions: Place the relative clause correctly ('activity I am participating in is very interesting') and remove redundant conjunctions for a grammatically correct conditional sentence.

× Yes, just two years ago it is my mother's 4th birthday but I'm spending the whole day playing video games and I forget about it.

✓ Yes. Just two years ago it was my mother's 44th birthday, but I spent the whole day playing video games and I forgot about it.

Errors: tense mismatches ('is' and 'I'm spending' present forms used for past event), possible number error '4th' likely meant '44th' or '4th' depending—kept as 44th as common adult age; inconsistent past tense. Suggestions: Use past tense for past events ('was', 'spent', 'forgot'). Verify the intended birthday number and correct if necessary.

× After that. I felt really sorry for her and I kept in mind that he the specific take out of his birthday.

✓ After that, I felt really sorry for her and I remembered the specific details of her birthday.

Errors: fragmented sentence 'After that.' punctuation issue, incorrect pronouns ('he', 'his') referring to mother, awkward phrase 'kept in mind that he the specific take out of his birthday'. Suggestions: Combine fragments with a comma, use correct pronouns for the mother ('her'), and use clear phrase 'remembered the specific details of her birthday'.

× Well, as a graduate student I have many group meetings and academic conference to attend and I would like to record these events on my notebook.

✓ Well, as a graduate student I have many group meetings and academic conferences to attend, and I would like to record these events in my notebook.

Errors: 'academic conference' should be plural to match 'many' and parallel structure, incorrect preposition 'on my notebook' should be 'in my notebook'. Suggestions: Make nouns agree in number ('conferences') and use correct preposition 'in' for notebooks.

× Well, I take a note by my hand and I could I would like to record some important activities on it.

✓ Well, I take notes by hand and I like to record some important activities in it.

Errors: 'take a note by my hand' is incorrect idiom; use 'take notes by hand'. Redundant modal phrasing 'I could I would like to' is ungrammatical. Preposition 'on it' is better as 'in it' for a notebook. Suggestions: Use standard expressions ('take notes by hand', 'I like to') and correct prepositions.