Memory— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific supporting detail using linking words. Avoid redundancy and correct mistakes (e.g., 'memorizing', 'remember information', 'low grade in history').

예시: No, I'm not very good at memorizing things. For example, I often forget dates and facts, so when I was a child I got a low grade in my history class. Because of that, I now use study techniques like spaced repetition to remember key facts.

제안: Give a clear, chronological account with correct tense and linking words. Begin with a topic sentence, then explain what happened and why, using one or two supporting details. Fix grammar (e.g., 'I forgot an important meeting last year', 'I mixed up the time', 'I didn't put it on Google Calendar').

예시: Yes, I forgot an important meeting last year because I mixed up the time. I didn't write the date on my Google Calendar, so I turned up two hours late and missed the discussion. Since then I always set reminders on my phone.

제안: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence and use specific vocabulary. Replace unclear phrases ('parity task') with 'priority tasks' or 'daily priorities'. Use linking words to explain reasons and be grammatically correct.

예시: I need to remember my daily priority tasks, such as work deadlines and appointments. Because keeping track of priorities helps me stay focused, it allows me to achieve my long-term goals by completing small tasks each day.

제안: Start with a clear statement about your method, then give one specific example and explain why it works. Use correct forms (e.g., 'I take notes on Google Calendar and in my phone's notes app') and linking words to show cause and effect.

예시: I use Google Calendar and the notes app on my phone to remember important things. For example, I set calendar reminders for meetings and write brief to-do notes; this works well because I get alerts and can quickly check my tasks.

× I find it's very difficult to remember or of information.

✓ I find it's very difficult to remember information.

The preposition 'of' is unnecessary after 'remember' here and creates an ungrammatical phrase 'remember or of information'. Remove 'or of' to make the sentence concise and correct. Suggestion: use 'remember information' or 'remember things'.

× For example, when I was a child I had a low grade of history subject.

✓ For example, when I was a child I had a low grade in history.

The phrase 'a low grade of history subject' uses incorrect article and noun structure. Use 'grade in history' to show the subject associated with the grade. Also omit the extra word 'subject'.

× Yes I have forgotten the important meetings last year because I got a time mix up.

✓ Yes, I forgot an important meeting last year because I had a mix-up with the time.

Using present perfect 'have forgotten' with a definite past time expression 'last year' is incorrect; use simple past 'forgot'. Also 'meetings' vs context indicates a single meeting; use singular 'an important meeting' or 'important meetings' consistently. 'Got a time mix up' is awkward; use 'had a mix-up with the time'.

× I cannot remember the actually date and I am not.

✓ I could not remember the actual date.

'Actually' is an adverb; the correct adjective is 'actual' to modify 'date'. Also the clause 'and I am not' is incomplete and unnecessary; use past tense 'could not' to match the previous past context.

× I was not put it on the Google Calendar so that's why I miss it.

✓ I did not put it on Google Calendar, so I missed it.

'I was not put it' is passive and ungrammatical for this meaning. Use active past simple 'I did not put it'. Also 'that's why I miss it' mixes present with past; change to past 'I missed it' to be consistent with the event time.

× I would like to remember about the parity task.

✓ I would like to remember the priority tasks.

'Remember about' is unnatural; use 'remember' directly followed by the object. Also 'parity task' is likely a misspelling of 'priority tasks'. Correct the noun and use plural if you refer to multiple daily tasks.

× This is because it's very important to follow priority tasks in each day.

✓ This is because it's very important to follow priority tasks each day.

The phrase 'in each day' is awkward; use 'each day' or 'every day'. Remove 'in' for natural adverbial expression.

× Is help me to achieve a goal for long term.

✓ It helps me achieve my long-term goals.

'Is help me' lacks a proper subject and verb agreement. Use 'It helps me' (present tense) to describe a habitual effect. 'To achieve a goal for long term' is awkward; use 'achieve my long-term goals' and hyphenate 'long-term' when used as an adjective.

× Now I try to take note on the Google calendars and on a short note on mobile phone because it's easy to look on it and it helped me to remember the important thing.

✓ Now I try to take notes on Google Calendar and make short notes on my mobile phone because it's easy to check them and they help me remember important things.

Use the gerund/plural form 'take notes' and 'make short notes'. Use 'on Google Calendar' (singular service name) and 'on my mobile phone'. 'Look on it' is incorrect; use 'check them'. Maintain consistent tense: present 'help' instead of past 'helped'. Use plural 'important things' for general reference.