Memory— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be clearer and more concise. Start with a direct topic sentence answering the question, then give one or two specific supporting details. Use correct grammar (e.g., 'when I'm alone in my room', 'lying down') and avoid unnecessary repetition.

예시: Yes, I am fairly good at memorising things. For example, I often study alone in my room because it's quiet, and I find that reviewing notes right before going to bed helps me remember facts better.

제안: Organise the answer: state briefly that you have forgotten something important, then give a clear, specific example with a reason and result. Reduce hesitations and fix grammar and vocabulary (e.g., 'exam date'). Aim for 2–3 coherent sentences linked with words like 'for example' and 'because'.

예시: Yes, I once forgot an important exam date. For example, I mistakenly thought the exam was a day later, so I missed the test and had to reschedule, which caused a lot of stress.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence and then one or two specific examples explaining why it matters. Improve grammar ('being on time', 'it saves time and effort') and use linking words like 'for example' or 'because'. Keep it concise.

예시: I need to remember time and my schedule every day. For example, being on time for work and appointments is important because it saves time and reduces stress.

제안: Answer directly and add a specific example. Use correct vocabulary ('calendar', 'apps', 'alarms') and a clear sequence word like 'nowadays' to contrast past and present. Keep sentences short and grammatical.

예시: I usually use a calendar and mark important dates. Nowadays I prefer smartphone apps and alarms; for example, I set reminders for bill payments and exams so I don't forget them.

× Yes, I'm good at memorizing things when I'm alone with my bedroom, especially when I'm laying down the time, I memorize a lot of thing.

✓ Yes, I'm good at memorizing things when I'm alone in my bedroom; especially when I'm lying down, I memorize a lot of things.

Preposition: use 'in my bedroom' not 'with my bedroom'. Verb form: 'lying' is the correct present participle for reclining, not 'laying' which means placing something. Plural: 'a lot of things' is required. Also use a semicolon or separate sentences to join clauses correctly. Suggestion: practice common prepositions ('in' for rooms) and distinguish 'lie/lay' and singular/plural nouns.

× Is money dames out even, uh, I've forgotten, uh, that was, uh, most important.

✓ Money is gone; I've forgotten it even though it was very important.

The original is ungrammatical and unclear. 'Money is gone' or 'Money was stolen' conveys meaning. 'Even' placement and fragments make it incorrect. Suggestion: form a full clause subject+verb+object and place adverbs (even) appropriately.

× Uh, for example, one of the most, uh, important thing was my exam dated, umm, and I forgot these, uh, it mystically, I thought it was a one day later, but uh, it that is not.

✓ For example, one of the most important things was the date of my exam, and I forgot it mistakenly; I thought it was one day later, but it was not.

Plural noun: 'things' not 'thing' when saying 'one of the most important'. Word choice: 'dated' should be 'the date of my exam'. 'These' incorrect pronoun; use 'it'. 'Mystically' is wrong; use 'mistakenly'. Article and word order fixed. Suggestion: practice noun phrases 'one of the most + plural noun' and use correct adverbs like 'mistakenly'.

× Actually, in my daily life, time is very important. Uh, on time work, it's really good. It's save my time, umm, and less effort.

✓ Actually, in my daily life, time is very important. Being on time for work is really good. It saves me time and requires less effort.

Phrase 'on time work' is incorrect; use 'being on time for work' or 'punctuality'. Verb form: 'It saves' required for third-person singular, not 'It's save'. Pronoun: 'me' needed after 'saves'. Suggestion: remember subject-verb agreement and common expressions like 'save someone time'.

× In my past for remembering important things I use calendar. I mark it and see it.

✓ In the past, to remember important things I used a calendar. I would mark it and check it.

Tense: refering to past requires past tense 'used' not 'use'. Also article: 'a calendar' required. 'See it' is awkward; 'check it' or 'look at it' is better. Suggestion: match tense to time expressions like 'in the past' and use articles.

× But nowadays the technology is very updated, so I use some of apes alarm apes. I set the alarm and remember it on time.

✓ But nowadays technology is very advanced, so I use some apps with alarms. I set the alarm and remember things on time.

Word choice: 'updated' is odd; use 'advanced'. 'Apes' should be 'apps'. Phrase 'some of apps alarm apps' is incorrect; use 'apps with alarms'. Also 'remember it on time' unclear; 'remember things on time' or 'be reminded on time' preferred. Suggestion: learn common collocations: 'technology is advanced', 'mobile apps' and 'set an alarm'.