Memory— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar (use singular/plural, articles) and avoid repetition.

예시: Yes, I’m quite good at memorising things. For example, I keep a daily diary and often take photos of important moments, so I can review them later and not forget details.

제안: Provide a clear topic sentence and one specific example; use linking words and correct tense/grammar. Avoid repeating the same idea and give a brief consequence or how you fixed it.

예시: Yes, I have forgotten important things, especially deadlines. For instance, I once missed an assignment deadline because I hadn’t noted it properly, which caused me to request an extension.

제안: Begin with a direct answer and give specific categories of things you must remember. Use linking words and correct word forms (diary, passwords). Avoid giving instructions to the examiner; focus on your habits.

예시: I need to remember things like appointments, passwords and shopping lists. Therefore, I usually write them in my diary or save them in my smartphone notes so I can check them when needed.

제안: Good clarity — make it slightly more natural by starting with a topic sentence and adding a brief reason or result. Use plural/singular correctly and avoid redundancy.

예시: I usually save important information, such as passwords or schedules, in my phone’s note app. This helps me access them quickly and reduces the chance of forgetting.

× Yes, I think I am because I usually write diary to remember many things and I also like to take a pictures a lot and all I do is because I want to memorize a lot of things in my life.

✓ Yes, I think I am because I usually keep a diary to remember many things, and I also like to take pictures a lot; I do this because I want to remember many things in my life.

Errors: 'write diary' needs the noun 'diary' to be used with a verb phrase like 'keep a diary' or 'write in a diary' (verb + noun collocation). 'take a pictures' mixes singular article 'a' with plural 'pictures' (singular/plural issue). 'memorize a lot of things' is acceptable but 'remember many things' sounds more natural. Suggestion: use correct collocations ('keep a diary' or 'write in a diary'), match articles with countable nouns ('take pictures' or 'take a picture'), and simplify redundant phrases.

× Yes, I have I forgot important things sometimes and that is mostly about the deadline.

✓ Yes, I have; I forget important things sometimes, and it is mostly about deadlines.

Errors: mixed tense and incorrect auxiliary usage. 'I have I forgot' is ungrammatical: present perfect 'I have' needs a past participle ('I have forgotten') or use simple present 'I forget'. The context 'sometimes' suggests a habitual action, so simple present 'I forget' fits better. 'the deadline' should be plural or general 'deadlines'. Suggestion: choose the correct tense for habitual actions (simple present) or correctly form present perfect ('I have forgotten').

× I I sometimes forgot deadline and that is really important because I have to submit my assignment or apply for important thing.

✓ I sometimes forget deadlines, and that is really important because I have to submit my assignments or apply for important things.

Errors: 'sometimes forgot' uses past tense ('forgot') though the meaning is habitual, so use simple present 'forget'. 'deadline' should be plural 'deadlines' when speaking generally. 'my assignment' and 'important thing' should be plural or more natural: 'my assignments' and 'important things'. Suggestion: use simple present for repeated actions and match plural forms for general statements.

× When I have something to remember, I always write it down on my Diaries or take a picture.

✓ When I have something to remember, I always write it down in my diary or take a picture.

Errors: 'on my Diaries' misuses the preposition and pluralization. Use singular 'diary' for the concept or 'my diaries' if multiple notebooks; the usual phrase is 'write it down in my diary.' Also 'on' is incorrect preposition. Suggestion: use 'in my diary' or 'in my diaries' depending on meaning and ensure correct preposition.

× Or we all have smartphones and in smartphones we have a note app, so you can write important things such as password or the important schedule so that you can remember well.

✓ We all have smartphones, and on them we have a Notes app, so you can write important things such as passwords or important schedules so that you can remember them better.

Errors: inconsistent pronoun address ('we' then 'you')—maintain same perspective. 'in smartphones' is unnatural; use 'on them' or 'on smartphones.' 'a note app' should be 'a Notes app' or 'a note-taking app.' 'password' needs plural when general ('passwords') and 'the important schedule' should be plural or 'important schedules.' 'remember well' is awkward; use 'remember them better.' Suggestion: keep consistent pronouns, use correct noun forms and prepositions, and pluralize general items.

× When I need to remember important things like a password or important schedule, I always write it down immediately on my notes apps so that I can remember and open it whenever I want.

✓ When I need to remember important things like a password or an important schedule, I always write them down immediately in my Notes app so that I can remember and open them whenever I want.

Errors: article usage and agreement: 'a password or important schedule' needs article before 'important schedule' ('an important schedule') or rephrase. 'write it down' conflicts with plural 'important things'—use 'write them down.' 'on my notes apps' incorrect plural and preposition; use singular 'Notes app' or 'note apps' with 'on.' Also 'open it' should match plural 'them.' Suggestion: ensure articles before singular countable nouns, keep pronoun number consistent, and use correct app name/capitalization if applicable.