Memory— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cevap daha net bir konu cümlesiyle başlamalı ve mantıklı bağlaçlar kullanılmalı. Ayrıca gereksiz tekrarlar ve dilbilgisi hataları düzeltilmeli. Örneğin, önce yeteneğin genel durumunu söyle ve sonra örnek ver. Cümleleri 2–3 kısa cümleyle sınırlı tut ve doğru fiil formlarını kullan.

예시: I'm fairly good at memorising things, especially small or detailed items. However, I sometimes remember unimportant details more easily than essential information, because my attention tends to focus on minutiae rather than the bigger picture.

제안: Cevap çok belirsiz ve dilbilgisi hataları yoğun. 'Always' yerine uygun zaman ifadesi kullan ve nedeni açıkça belirt. Kısa bir örnek veya sonuç ekle. Bağlaçlarla cömertçe bağlantı kur ve tek cümlede fazla bilgi verme.

예시: Yes, I have forgotten important things before. For example, I once missed a deadline because I focused on less important tasks, which taught me to use reminders and to-do lists to avoid repeating the mistake.

제안: Cevap karışık ve tekrarlar var; daha açık bir yapı gerekir. Önce ana fikri söyle (günlük hatırlaman gereken şeyler), sonra 1–2 destekleyici örnek ver. Gereksiz tekrarları kaldır ve doğru kelime kullanımına dikkat et ('things that stem from my job').

예시: In my daily life I need to remember work-related tasks, such as meetings, deadlines and financial matters. For instance, I regularly track my expenses and check investment opportunities that could improve my income.

제안: Sağlıkla ilgili mazeret verilirken daha net ve doğru cümle kur: 'I lack vitamin B12' yerine 'I have a B12 deficiency' gibi. Ardından günlük stratejilerden (not almak, alarm kurmak) bahset. Cevabı kısa ve uygulanabilir önerilerle bitir.

예시: I sometimes struggle to remember important things because I have a B12 deficiency, which affects my concentration. To cope, I use phone reminders, written lists and calendar alerts so I don't miss important tasks.

× If things including essential things I can memorize, but if things very unnecessary I can remember everything about it because my brain focus on details and unnecessary things.

✓ If the things are essential, I can memorize them, but if they are very unnecessary I remember everything about them because my brain focuses on details and unimportant things.

The original sentence has missing helping verbs and incorrect pronoun agreement. Use 'are' to link 'things' with descriptions (there be / verb agreement) and plural pronouns 'them'. Also use third person singular verb 'focuses' to agree with 'my brain'. Replace 'unnecessary things' with 'unimportant things' for clarity. Suggestions: add 'are' after 'if', change 'it' to 'them', and use 'focuses'.

× I always forgotten something vital because my brain wants to avoid essential things because of protects peace of my brain so I can remember the same things but.

✓ I have always forgotten something vital because my brain wants to avoid essential things to protect its peace, so I remember the same things repeatedly.

The verb form 'forgotten' was used without an auxiliary; the present perfect requires 'have'. Also 'because of protects peace of my brain' is ungrammatical — use an infinitive phrase 'to protect its peace' and correct pronoun 'its' for 'my brain'. The ending fragment was unclear; clarified to 'remember the same things repeatedly'. Suggestions: use present perfect 'have forgotten', replace 'because of protects' with 'to protect', and use 'its' for possession.

× I need to remember my job and things that's. Stems from my job because gaining money is important for me.

✓ I need to remember my job and things that stem from my job because earning money is important to me.

The relative clause was split and 'that's. Stems' is incorrect. Use 'things that stem' (present simple verb 'stem' for plural 'things'). 'Gaining money' is awkward; 'earning money' is more natural, and 'important to me' is the correct collocation. Suggestions: keep the relative clause intact and use correct verb form and collocation.

× So if I investigate investment, make an investment for my job, it's it's essential.

✓ So if I research investments and make an investment for my job, it's essential.

'Investigate investment' is unnatural; use 'research investments'. Repetition 'it's it's' should be a single 'it's'. Use plural 'investments' when speaking generally. Suggestions: use 'research' or 'look into' and remove duplicate words.

× I don't remember important things since I am lack of B12 vitamin. Uh so this leads to. Uh, forgot about vital things.

✓ I don't remember important things because I lack vitamin B12, so this leads me to forget vital things.

Use 'because I lack' rather than 'since I am lack of'. 'Lack' is a stative verb that does not take 'am'. 'Vitamin B12' is the normal word order. 'This leads to forgot' mixes tenses; use 'leads me to forget' or 'causes me to forget'. Suggestions: use 'I lack vitamin B12' and 'leads me to forget'.