Memory— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct vocabulary errors; give a clear topic sentence, one brief reason, and a short example. Avoid repetition and keep within 3–4 sentences. Replace incorrect words (e.g. "reputation" → "repetition") and correct verb forms (memorize→memorize). Use a linking word to connect the reason and example.

예시: I’m not very good at memorising large amounts of information because my attention is often scattered. However, I can remember specific details like card numbers if I rehearse them regularly. For example, I repeat my card number several times and write it down briefly to ensure I don’t forget it.

제안: Start with a direct answer to the question, then give one specific example and a brief consequence or feeling. Avoid vague or odd word choices ("appealing" is wrong here). Keep sentences short and logical with a linking word like "for example" or "once".

예시: Yes, I have forgotten something important. For example, once I missed my mother’s birthday because I was overwhelmed and didn’t set a reminder. As a result, I felt guilty and promised myself to use calendar alerts in future.

제안: This answer is clear and relevant but can be tightened: start with a concise topic sentence, then add one supporting detail and a brief example with a linking word. Avoid filler words and keep it within 3–4 sentences.

예시: I need to remember several daily things, primarily my schedule and homework. In addition, I keep track of my little brother’s timetable because my mother is often tired, so I sometimes take him to school or judo practice. This helps our family stay organized.

제안: Correct minor grammar and wording errors, be concise, and use a linking word to connect method and reason. For example, plural/singular agreement (tasks), and clearer phrasing for syncing across devices. Keep it to 2–3 sentences with a short example if needed.

예시: I usually enter important tasks into a calendar on my laptop and set alerts so I don't forget them. This is more convenient than paper because the reminders pop up and sync across my devices, ensuring I see them on my phone or laptop.

× Not quite. I struggle to memorize large amounts of information because my thoughts are often scattered due to ADHD. However, I can remember specific details like card numbers or pens because I rehearse them regularly and use reputation to.

✓ Not quite. I struggle to memorize large amounts of information because my thoughts are often scattered due to ADHD. However, I can remember specific details like card numbers or pen numbers because I rehearse them regularly and use repetition to.

The phrase 'pens' is ambiguous — likely intended 'pen numbers' or simply 'pen details'; more importantly 'reputation' is a wrong word choice. The correct word is 'repetition' (practice repeatedly). This is a vocabulary/word-formation error that affects clarity. Suggestion: use 'repetition' or 'practice' and specify 'pen numbers' or 'pen details' if necessary.

× Because of my health condition, I can't really memorize things very easily. That said, I can forget a lot of things, and the most appealing thing that I forgot before is my mom's birthday.

✓ Because of my health condition, I can't really memorize things very easily. That said, I can forget a lot of things, and the most significant thing I forgot before was my mom's birthday.

'Most appealing' is the wrong adjective in this context; 'appealing' means attractive. Use 'most significant', 'most important', or 'the worst' to convey seriousness. Also change present form 'is' to past 'was' to match 'forgot before' (past event). Suggestion: choose 'most significant' or 'most important' and keep past tense consistency.

× I usually enter important task in a table on my laptop's screen and set alerts so I don't forget them.

✓ I usually enter important tasks in a table on my laptop's screen and set alerts so I don't forget them.

'Task' should be plural 'tasks' because 'them' and context imply multiple items. This is a singular/plural mismatch. Suggestion: use plural nouns when referring to multiple items or use 'an important task' if referring to a single item and adjust pronouns accordingly.

× I find this more convenient than using a paper because the reminders pop up and the listings across my devices.

✓ I find this more convenient than using paper because the reminders pop up and the listings sync across my devices.

'Using a paper' is incorrect; 'paper' (uncountable) is correct without an article. Also 'listings across my devices' is unclear; likely intended 'sync across my devices'. This is an article/word-choice and clarity issue. Suggestion: use 'paper' (no article) and replace 'listings' with 'they sync' or 'the reminders sync' for clarity.