Memory— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid contradiction in one sentence, and use present simple for habits. Add a brief supporting detail with a linking word.

예시: Yes, I am generally good at memorising things. However, I sometimes forget small details, so I use reminders on my phone to help me.

제안: Use correct tense and smoother linking. Begin with a direct answer, then give a specific example and explain what you do now. Keep it to two or three sentences and avoid redundant phrasing.

예시: Yes, I once forgot an important appointment, which was very stressful. Since then, I have written important dates in a journal and set phone reminders so I no longer miss them.

제안: Answer directly with a topic sentence, then give two specific methods and a linking word. Avoid fillers and repetition; use clear vocabulary (e.g., "notes," "discussing").

예시: In daily life I need to remember appointments and tasks. To help, I write notes in my journal and discuss plans with a friend, which both reinforce my memory.

제안: Give a structured answer: topic sentence + specific methods with linking words. Remove fillers and unclear phrases like "pretend things". Limit to up to three concise sentences with examples.

예시: I remember important things by writing them down, taking photos of documents, and telling someone about them. For example, I photograph receipts and add tasks to my phone so I don't forget.

× Yes, I believe I'm good at memorizing things, but sometimes I forgot things.

✓ Yes, I believe I'm good at memorizing things, but sometimes I forget things.

The sentence mixes present belief with a past-tense verb 'forgot'. Because the speaker is describing a habitual or repeated action, the simple present 'forget' should be used. Use 'forget' for general, repeated events and 'forgot' for specific past instances. Suggestion: use simple present for habits (I forget), or specify a past time if you mean a single past event (I forgot yesterday).

× Yes, I forgotten something important and that makes me frustrating because even though I'm trying to remember it but I can't.

✓ Yes, I have forgotten something important and that makes me frustrated because even though I'm trying to remember it, I can't.

The original uses 'forgotten' without an auxiliary verb; the correct present perfect requires 'have' + past participle: 'have forgotten'. Also 'frustrating' (causing frustration) should be 'frustrated' (feeling frustration). Remove the redundant 'but' when using 'even though' and add a comma. Suggestion: use 'have forgotten' for past actions with present relevance and match adjective forms ('frustrated').

× So I'm starting to write on the journal the important things I have so that I will not forget it.

✓ So I started writing in my journal the important things I have so that I will not forget them.

The speaker used 'on the journal' (wrong preposition) and 'it' to refer to 'things' (plural). Also tense consistency: earlier sentence used present continuous 'I'm starting' but context refers to a past or habitual action; 'started' or 'start' can be chosen—here 'started' matches prior present perfect. Use 'in my journal' and plural pronoun 'them'. Suggestion: use correct preposition 'in' with 'journal' and match pronoun number to its antecedent (them for plural).

× Like what I'm said earlier, one thing that I need to remember in my daily life is I always write in my journal.

✓ Like what I said earlier, one thing I need to remember in my daily life is that I always write in my journal.

'I'm said' is incorrect; the past simple 'I said' should be used. Also insert 'that' to introduce the clause 'I always write in my journal' for clarity. Maintain tense consistency: referring to a previous statement uses past simple 'said'. Suggestion: use 'I said' for reporting earlier speech and include 'that' before content clauses for clarity.

× So sometimes writing also helps me to umm, remember that memory in my life and also talking it to other people helps me also to remember it.

✓ So sometimes writing also helps me remember memories in my life, and talking about them to other people also helps me remember them.

The phrase 'remember that memory' is awkward and repetitive; use 'remember memories' or 'remember them'. 'Talking it to other people' is incorrect: use 'talking about them' and match pronoun number. Remove unnecessary 'to' after 'helps me'. Suggestion: use 'talking about them' and consistent plural pronouns for 'memories'.

× Umm, sometimes I remember, I remember pretend things is like writing it and also taking a picture and talking it to other people.

✓ Umm, sometimes I remember by doing things like writing them down, taking pictures, and talking about them to other people.

The original mixes structures incorrectly ('remember pretend things is like'). Use 'remember by doing' to express method, and use gerunds/list form 'writing them down, taking pictures, and talking about them'. Also change 'it' to 'them' to match plural. Suggestion: use parallel gerund forms and clear prepositions ('writing them down', 'talking about them').

× And these are the many things.

✓ These are some of the many things I do.

The original sentence is awkward and incomplete. 'These are the many things' is vague; better to specify the relation to the previous clause: 'These are some of the many things I do.' This adds clarity and corrects sentence structure. Suggestion: make the subject and verb relationship clear and relate it to the action described.