Memory— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be clearer and more grammatical: start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid contradictions and unclear phrases. Focus on coherent sentences and correct verb forms and articles.

예시: Yes, I think I have a fairly good memory. For example, when I watch funny movies, I can remember small details such as a character's facial expressions or jokes. However, I sometimes forget trivial facts like exact dates. Overall, I remember things that interest me more easily.

제안: Answer directly, then give a clear specific example with correct tenses and linking words. Keep to a maximum of about 3–4 sentences and avoid repetition. Explain cause and effect briefly.

예시: Yes, I have forgotten important things before. For instance, when I was studying for exams with many subjects, I sometimes forgot what I studied earlier because I was rushed. As a result, I learned to make a study schedule to review material regularly.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence and then give specific examples using linking words. Use correct plural forms and articles. You can add one short reason to support your answer.

예시: I need to remember several practical things in my daily life. For example, I must remember passwords for apps, my phone number, and my home address because I use them every day. Therefore I try to keep this information secure and easy to access.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence, then describe your method with specific details and correct vocabulary. Use linking words like "for example" and correct phrasing (access, notebook). Mention a brief reason or result.

예시: I usually write important information in a secure notes app so I can access it later. For example, when I create an email account, I record the address and password in my notes and label it clearly. This is convenient because I can quickly access the information when needed, but I also use a password manager to keep it safe.

× I think I have a good memory, especially when I watching silly, I can remember in the detail.

✓ I think I have a good memory, especially when I am watching silly things; I can remember the details.

The student wrote 'when I watching' which omits the auxiliary 'am' required for the present continuous (verb in present participle form). Also 'in the detail' is incorrect; use 'the details' to refer to specific small parts. Suggestion: use 'am' + verb-ing for ongoing actions and plural 'details' for multiple small items.

× It's not only the character, but I can't remember in. Small detail that actor expressed in its chapter.

✓ It's not only the characters I remember; I also remember the small details that the actor expressed in each scene.

The original has fragments and incorrect references: 'can't' contradicts context and 'in.' is an incomplete phrase. Use complete clauses: 'I remember' not 'I can't remember' and 'characters' plural for multiple characters; 'actor' should be referenced correctly and 'chapter' replaced with 'scene' or 'episode.' Also combine into one coherent sentence.

× Yes I have. When I have many things to manage in my life, I will forget something.

✓ Yes, I have. When I have many things to manage in my life, I tend to forget some things.

Using 'will forget' sounds like a future prediction; here the student means a habitual or common outcome, so use 'tend to forget' or simple present 'forget' for habitual actions. Also add 'some' for natural phrasing.

× For example during the exam it's have many subject to.

✓ For example, during exams there are many subjects to study.

'It's have' is ungrammatical. Use 'there are' for existence (There be issue, but classified here as sentence structure). Also plural 'exams' and 'subjects' and add 'to study' to complete the thought.

× Through exam right? And I when I read all the subject, I will forget the early subject that I already read it.

✓ During an exam, when I read all the subjects, I sometimes forget the earlier subjects that I already read.

Problems: awkward phrasing 'Through exam right?' removed; 'all the subject' should be 'all the subjects' (plural) and 'early subject' should be 'earlier subject(s)'. The final 'it' is redundant. Use 'sometimes' or 'I tend to' for habitual forgetting and keep pronouns consistent.

× I want to remember the thing that important for me.

✓ I want to remember the things that are important to me.

Use plural 'things' for multiple items and include the verb 'are' for the relative clause. Use 'to me' rather than 'for me' in this context.

× For example my password in each application or my phone number, my address.

✓ For example, my passwords for each application, my phone number, and my address.

Use plural 'passwords' if referring to multiple applications and 'for' to indicate association. Add commas and 'and' for list clarity.

× When I want to remember something, I will keep it on my note.

✓ When I want to remember something, I keep it in my notes.

Use simple present 'keep' for habitual action rather than future 'will keep.' Also use 'in my notes' rather than 'on my note' and plural 'notes' for typical usage.

× For example, when I create e-mail account, I will note the e-mail and the password on my note.

✓ For example, when I create an email account, I write the email and the password in my notes.

Add the article 'an' before 'email account'. Use 'write' (present simple) for habitual action. Use preposition 'in' for notes rather than 'on', and use 'notes' plural. Also 'email' is one word commonly.

× I think it's convenient and quickly excess when I want to see the password because it's it cannot on my phone.

✓ I think it's convenient and quick to access when I want to see the password because it cannot be stored on my phone.

Original has multiple issues: 'quickly excess' should be 'quick to access' (adverb/adjective confusion). 'it's it cannot on my phone' is ungrammatical; use 'it cannot be stored on my phone' or 'is not stored on my phone.' Use passive 'be stored' to express inability and fix pronoun redundancy.