Memory— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cải thiện tính mạch lạc, ngữ pháp và phát âm; dùng cấu trúc câu rõ ràng và tránh lặp từ. Nên mở đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng (Yes/No + brief explanation), sau đó đưa 1-2 chi tiết cụ thể bằng liên từ (for example, however) để minh hoạ. Chú ý dùng động từ và danh từ đúng (memorising, facts, exams) và tránh lặp từ như “I”.

예시: Not really. I'm not good at memorising facts for exams; I usually forget them quickly. However, I can easily remember important personal dates, for example my friends' birthdays and anniversaries, because I celebrate them every year.

제안: Sắp xếp ý mạch lạc hơn: bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề trực tiếp, tiếp theo nêu ví dụ cụ thể và lý do cảm xúc. Tránh các mảnh câu và lỗi ngữ pháp (have forgotten, exact dates). Thêm liên từ (for example, because) để nối ý và làm rõ nguyên nhân tại sao điều đó quan trọng với bạn.

예시: Yes, I have. For example, I sometimes forget the exact dates of family events from my childhood. These memories are still important to me because I cherish my family and respect the traditions they passed down.

제안: Cải thiện độ rõ ràng và ngữ pháp: trả lời trực tiếp nêu danh sách ngắn các việc cần nhớ (assignments, bills, appointments, health). Dùng từ vựng chính xác (deadlines, classes, bills, doctor's appointments) và sắp xếp bằng dấu phẩy hoặc liên từ để tránh lộn xộn. Giữ không quá 3–4 câu ngắn gọn, tránh tiếng rỗng "uh".

예시: I need to remember several things daily, mainly university deadlines and assignments. I also keep track of bills and class schedules, and I try to remember medical appointments to take care of my health.

제안: Làm rõ phương pháp cụ thể và sắp xếp câu hợp lý: bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề (I usually...), rồi nói hai phương pháp chính (notebook, digital calendar) với ví dụ và liên từ (for example, so). Tránh lặp từ và câu không hoàn chỉnh. Nên dùng từ vựng chính xác (note, notebook, reminders, calendar, plan).

예시: I usually write important tasks in a notebook and set reminders in my digital calendar. For example, I add deadlines to my calendar and set alerts so I don't miss assignment due dates.

× I I am not a very not a word memorizing things in a general, especially these facts for exams. However, I can easily remember important dates like birthdays and anniversaries of my friends or and family.

✓ I am not very good at memorizing things in general, especially facts for exams. However, I can easily remember important dates like the birthdays and anniversaries of my friends and family.

The original sentence has repeated words and a confusing word order, making it a sentence structure error. Remove duplicates ('I I', 'not a very not a word'), place adjectives and phrases in the correct order ('good at memorizing things in general'), and fix conjunctions ('friends and family'). Also add the definite article before plural specific nouns ('the birthdays and anniversaries') to sound natural.

× Ah yes, I have a forgotten some details from my childhood such as the exact dates of family events.

✓ Ah yes, I have forgotten some details from my childhood, such as the exact dates of family events.

Using 'have a forgotten' is incorrect because the present perfect requires 'have' + past participle without an extra 'a'. Remove the extra 'a' to form the correct present perfect 'have forgotten'.

× Events are. Those memories are important to me because I cherish my family and I respect the traditions they pass down.

✓ Those events and memories are important to me because I cherish my family and respect the traditions they pass down.

The fragment 'Events are.' is incomplete (no verb or clear connection). Combine related ideas into one complete sentence and remove redundant subject pronouns ('I respect' can be shortened to 'respect') to improve flow and grammaticality.

× In my deadline, I need to remember my university assignments and other small class like uh, being bills and uh, during a hospital choice and so try to remember to take care of my health that over the way of.

✓ I need to remember my university assignments, small tasks like paying bills, and appointments at the hospital, and I also try to remember to take care of my health.

The original sentence is disorganized with unclear phrases ('In my deadline', 'other small class like', 'during a hospital choice', 'that over the way of'). Reorder the ideas into a clear list of things to remember and use correct noun phrases ('small tasks like paying bills', 'appointments at the hospital'). Remove filler words and ensure parallel structure.

× I usually write important things down in the notebook or in the notebook. On that point I I also said that reminders in my calendar so I don't forget deadlines for example. Always great and plan for.

✓ I usually write important things down in a notebook. I also set reminders in my calendar so I don't forget deadlines. I always plan ahead.

The original contains repetition ('in the notebook or in the notebook'), incorrect verb choice ('said' instead of 'set'), extra filler ('On that point I I'), and fragments ('Always great and plan for'). Split into clear sentences, correct the verb ('set reminders'), remove duplicates, and use concise phrases ('plan ahead') for clarity.