Memory— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 全体として意味は伝わりますが、文法ミス、語順の誤り、語形の不一致、そして冗長な表現が目立ちます。より自然で効果的に答えるには、まずトピック文で直接答え（肯定/否定）を示し、その後に理由を1〜2文で述べます。具体的には動詞の原形や-ing形、過去形の使い分けを意識し、不要な言い直しを避けて流暢さを高めてください。例："It depends on what I need to remember. If it's something I care about, I'm quite good at memorising it. But when it's school-related information, I often struggle."

예시: It depends on what I need to remember. If it's something I care about, I'm quite good at memorising it. However, when it's school-related facts or dates, I often struggle because I find them boring and hard to retain.

제안: 答えは体験を述べており内容は適切ですが、文法（冠詞、時制、語順）と語彙選択に誤りが多く、発話が不明瞭です。改善策としては、過去形で簡潔に状況を説明し、原因や結果を一つか二つの短い文で続けると良いです。また、不必要な修飾や繰り返しを避けてください。例："Yes. I once forgot something important during a junior high school exam because I panicked and couldn't recall what I had studied."

예시: Yes. I once forgot important answers during an exam in junior high school. I had tried to memorise everything, but during the test I panicked and couldn't recall the information I had studied.

제안: 内容は良く、話題の具体例も挙げていますが、文が冗長で不自然な表現（"what's happening in the world now"は良いが続きの構造が崩れている）や繰り返しが見られます。改善するには、主語を一貫させ簡潔に述べ、接続詞を使って例示を整理してください。例えば、"I try to remember current events because they provide topics for conversations, like sports or local news."のようにすると自然です。さらに具体的な例（最近の出来事）を一つ加えると説得力が増します。

예시: I try to remember current events because they give me things to talk about with friends. For example, I follow major sports tournaments and local community news so I can join conversations easily.

제안: 方法は明確で実用的ですが、構文の繰り返しや語順の乱れ、冗長なフレーズが目立ちます。改善には、シンプルで流れるような文を心がけ、理由と結果を論理的に繋げる接続詞を使うと良いです。また、具体的な習慣（アプリ・場所・頻度）を一つ挙げると内容が豊かになります。例："I write important things in a notebook or on my phone, so I can review them later if I forget."

예시: I usually write important tasks in a small notebook or in a notes app on my phone. That way I can review the list later and quickly recall anything I might have forgotten.

× It depends on what I want to memorizing.

✓ It depends on what I want to memorize.

The verb 'want' should be followed by the base form of the verb (infinitive without 'to' when using 'want to', or 'to' + base). 'Memorizing' is a gerund and incorrect after 'want to'. Use 'to memorize' or 'want to memorize'. Suggestion: Use 'want to' + base verb: 'I want to memorize'.

× If I trying to memorize that I like, it's very I I'd like to say I'm good at memorizing things.

✓ If I try to memorize things I like, I'd say I'm good at memorizing things.

The subordinate clause requires the base form 'try' with the present simple after 'If' for a general condition. 'It's very I I'd like to say' is ungrammatical and redundant. Simplify to 'I'd say'. Suggestion: Use 'If I try to...' for general habit; avoid redundant phrases.

× However, if it's, uh, about study, I think I'm very bad at memorize.

✓ However, if it's about studying, I think I'm very bad at memorizing.

After 'about' use the gerund 'studying' (present participle form). Also 'bad at' should be followed by a gerund: 'bad at memorizing'. Suggestion: Use 'about' + verb-ing: 'about studying' and 'bad at' + verb-ing.

× Yes, it was a exam when I was in junior high school and I was trying to memorize everything important.

✓ Yes, it was an exam when I was in junior high school and I was trying to memorize everything important.

Before a vowel sound use the indefinite article 'an' not 'a'. 'Exam' begins with a vowel sound, so 'an exam' is correct. Suggestion: Use 'an' before vowel sounds.

× However, it was not my favorite thing to remember, so I suddenly be couldn't remember.

✓ However, it was not something I liked to remember, so I suddenly couldn't remember.

'Be couldn't remember' is ungrammatical. Use 'couldn't remember' for past ability/negation. Also 'my favorite thing to remember' is awkward; 'something I liked to remember' is clearer. Suggestion: Use correct past negation 'couldn't remember' and choose clearer phrasing.

× I think we need to remember what's happening in the world now because it can be a topic when we make a conversation with my friends such as uh, sports, world sports event or or neighborhood happening.

✓ I think we need to remember what's happening in the world now because it can be a topic when I have conversations with my friends, such as sports, world sporting events, or neighborhood news.

Pronoun mismatch: 'we' and 'my friends' are inconsistent with 'make a conversation with my friends'. Use 'I' with 'my friends' or keep 'we' with 'our friends'. Also 'make a conversation' is unnatural; use 'have conversations'. 'World sports event' should be plural or 'world sporting events'. 'Neighborhood happening' is unnatural; use 'neighborhood news'. Suggestion: Keep pronouns consistent and use natural collocations: 'have conversations', 'sporting events', 'neighborhood news'.

× I always try to remember a significant thing with writing note, because if I write on that note I if I can easily remember and if I forgot something I can check the note and recall the important things.

✓ I always try to remember important things by writing notes, because if I write them down I can easily remember them, and if I forget something I can check the note and recall the important things.

Use 'by' + verb-ing ('by writing notes') to express the method. 'Writing note' should be plural 'notes' and 'write on that note' should be 'write them down'. Tense consistency: 'if I forgot' should be 'if I forget' for general present habit, or keep past consistently. Also pronouns: refer back to 'things' with 'them'. Suggestion: Use 'by writing notes' and keep tense consistent: for habitual actions use present simple: 'if I forget'.